"Lots of really fun writing and nicely polished, thanks for bringing your A game. In terms of story, the biggest note is that the script is about 2 pages short (we usually aim for 13.5 pages). The first act is nicely filled out, but I think we need more on the third act. Suggest that we: - Have all the paints run out, not just green. - Make more of the situation of running out of paint. Add a down beat where Mr. Lion says they'll have to wait until next week to finish their paintings (aww) - Add more Elinor experimenting, and more of the kids looking around for different colors. (The theme of the episode is, after all, getting kids to notice and explore and look at all the colors in Nature). Specific notes below. Thanks!" 1. ext. FOREST CLEARING - day Line Count 81 (pretty low line count, might need to add to this) Ari - 19 Elinor - 31 Mr. Lion - 18 Olive - 13 Open on a wide shot of a forest clearing, with ELINOR, ARI, OLIVE, and several of their classmates standing behind easels arranged in a semicircle. The kids all wear pin-on smocks or backwards old dress shirts to protect their clothes from the paint. cute 1st draft Page count is 12 - may need to add a page - I made a few suggestions below Bob Ross resemblance - thats perfect! In the center of the circle is MR. LION, the fun, energetic, expressive art teacher wearing a tie-dyed smock. He stands at his own easel, holding a paintbrush aloft, squinting at the easel as he plans his next brush stroke. We can’t see his easel, but we can see that he’s looking at a still-life bowl of fruit on a small table. With his fluffy mane, he even looks a bit like Bob Ross. " I’m away and do not have easy access to the tracker. I don’t have specific line edits and really enjoyed the bob ross jokes. My only comment is the be more specific about the problem (stating it is a problem) that they ran out of green paint and there is still so much green in the forest that Elinor loves. Then maybe have an exchange that if they think creatively there are solutions (often more than one) to problems all around. Also some language about using available resources to solve the problem - in a kids friendly way would be great. Love the episode! Happy thanksgiving" We zoom in for a bit, then see a much closer shot of Mr. Lion, weighing his options for what to paint next. Mr. Lion Hmmm ... Delete "tie-dyed" (not sure he's the tie-dye type?). Love the subtle Bob Ross reference The next shot pans over the kids watching Mr. Lion in anticipation. He has really captivated them. ANGLE ON: Mr. Lion gets a look of determination in his eyes, then boldly slashes a few strokes across his canvas. He smiles, satisfied, then stands next to the canvas so that he’s not blocking the kids from seeing it. Mr. Lion (CONT’D) Ta-da ! ANGLE ON: We see that Mr. Lion has painted a perfect representation of the still life fruit bowl. Add some "wow/cool/that's amazing" walla here The kids applaud <SFX: applause> their approval. MR. LION (CONT’D) And THAT’S the joy of painting! ANGLE ON: The kids look impressed. ELINOR That’s great, Mr. Lion! OLIVE Yeah, your painting looks just like the bowl of fruit! Suggest making the joke more explicit like, "Mmm, it looks so real, it's making me hungry!" Ari Mmm , fruit. Olive <SFX: GIGGLES> Ari (CONT’D) (shrugging) What? I’m a fruit bat. Change to "Thanks, kids. And now, it's your turn to paint!" MR. lION Thanks, kids. This is what you’ll all be doing today. Change to something like, "Are we going to paint the bowl of fruit, too, Mr. Lion?" ELINOR want to be sure this doesnt come across with attitiude (as if she feels its silly to paint) Painting a picture of the bowl of fruit? ANGLE ON: Mr. Lion looking passionate -- he really cares about the spirit of art. Change to: "You can... but you can also paint whatever you want! Art isn't about rules -- it's a way to show your feelings about what you want to paint." MR. LION just curious as to the framework of the beginning of this episode - he's teaching them to observe what he sees in front of him (the still life bowl of fruit) and yet he then tells them they can paint whatever they want - perhaps for this line he can start with 'You can!'..but its about making art!....etc" Making art! Art isn’t about rules -- it’s a way to show your feelings about what you’re painting. You can all paint whatever you want! ANGLE ON: Elinor frowns. ELINOR But I don’t know what I want to paint. He dances around and indicates/wiggles the body parts as he mentions them. Mr. LiON You will! Just think about something you love, and let your heart tell your brain, then let your brain tell your fingers, then let your fingers pick up a paintbrush and create something wonderful! The kids giggle at his antics. Elinor looks reassured. The kids start to move toward their easels, then stops when Mr. Lion holds up his hands. Mr. lion (CONT’D) But before you start! The most important thing of all, something you cannot forget! ( pause ) You need paint. Everyone come take some from the table in the middle. The class picks up their empty paint palettes and moves toward the middle table. ANGLE ON: The kids surround the table, each helping themselves to a dollop of each color from squirt bottles. <SFX: excited talking as everyone prepares to paint>. Elinor seems to be taking a larger pile of green paint than any other color. OLIVE That’s a lot of green paint, Elinor. ELINOR Yup ! Mr. Lion said to paint something we love, so I’m going to paint nature. Ari (looking around) Nature does have a lot of green. Have Elinor go on a riff here: "I'm going to paint the trees and the bushes and the leaves and the grass and…" And Ari says "Yup, you're definitely going to need a lot of green." or something like that ELINOR I’m going to paint the forest. The kids start walking back to their easels. Olive What about you, Ari? Make this a bit more explicit: "Well, I love fruit, so that's what I want to paint. But… Mr. Lion already painted that bowl of fruit." Ari Well, the thing I want to paint most ... is the bowl of fruit. But Mr. Lion already painted it. Feels a little adult. Try something like, "I think that's okay, Ari. You can paint something even if someone else already did it."" ELINOR sounds too old - maybe if we add my suggestion to line 10 - she can refere to that - and to the fact that ari painting it will look different That’s okay! There can be more than one painting of the same thing. Change "I'm also going" to "I also want" OLIVE I’m glad you said that, Elinor. Because I love nature, too, and I’m also going to paint the forest. I see what you're going for, but I think Elinor would be excited, not apprehensive. Have her say something like, "That's great! We can both be Nature painters!" Then Olive says, "Awesome!" And Ari closes this section with something fun, like maybe "It's time to make art!" ELINOR (a little unsure how to respond) is she upset about this? - can she not be more encouraging? Oh! Okay. CROSSFADE TO: 2. Ext. FOREST CLEARING - A FEW MINUTES LATER The kids stand back at their easels, and we see that the whole class is excitedly working away, though we don’t yet see what’s on their easels. Mr. Lion walks behind the kids, reacting to their paintings in progress. Change the second "look at" to "I love" (for variety) Mr. Lion I had a great art teacher in college for paint class and he had catch phrases. If it was great "crackjack painting' - if not 'you over cooked it' - just thought i'd share that if we want to give him these or new ones to push his character even further Wow, Sally, look at that sunrise! ... Gael, look at those melting clocks, how unusual! ... Good work, Ari! That apple looks tasty enough to eat, but I’m not going to, because it’s a painting. ANGLE ON: Elinor and Olive paint side by side, but with their easels angled slightly so that they can’t see what the other is working on. Olive is a virtuoso, painting with a brush in her hand and another in her trunk at the same time. ELINOR (singing to herself as she paints) I’m painting a scene. I’m using the green. And now some blue. ( to Olive) How ‘bout you? Olive giggles. Elinor turns her canvas around so that Olive can see it: She has painted a straightforward landscape with green grass, trees, and a blue sky with a yellow sun. It’s clearly unfinished, though, with a large portion of one side unpainted. Change "straightforward" to "kid-quality" in description above this line. OLIVE That’s really nice, Elinor. Those look like happy trees. Add "Mr. Lion is right." to the beginning of this line ELINOR suggest 'they are happy! Its so fun to paint what you love" It’s fun to paint what you love. She moves slightly so that she can see Olive’s canvas, then gives a little gasp. ANGLE ON: We see Olive’s canvas. She’s still working on it, but what she’s painted so far looks like a higher-resolution version of Elinor’s painting. The tree trunks look more defined, individual branches are visible, the clouds have texture. ELINOR (CONT’D) Olive, that’s beautiful! Do kids know the word "details"? Maybe change it to "things you notice" OLIVE Thanks! I’m trying to paint all of the details in nature. She leans back for a moment and assesses her canvas. OLIVE (CONT’D) Needs more birds. With a double flourish of the brushes in her hand and trunk, she expertly adds a few birds to the sky. ANGLE ON: Elinor looks back at her own painting, a little discouraged. ELINOR Your painting is so good. It looks ...real. is this said with a shrug? perhaps instead she appreciates the comment 'you think so!? Thanks Elinor!' OLIVE I guess. Olive keeps painting happily. Ari leans in, holding his paintbrush. LOL. Maybe Ari can mime a few robot sounds after this line? Ari could then have Ari imitate robots (in robot voice) eating fruit "beep boop! (chewing sounds) mmm apple yum!' It doesn’t have to look real, Elinor! In fact, when I’m done painting the bowl of fruit, I might add a few robots. ELINOR I know. But still. Mr. Lion walks over, having heard Elinor’s disappointment. Change "how much you love" -> "what you feel about" Mr. LiON Art isn’t “good” or “bad” -- it’s your own way of showing how much you love what you’re painting. Elinor looks reassured. ELINOR Thanks, Mr. Lion. Okay, I need to make my painting really show how much I love nature! ANGLE ON a closer shot of Elinor; she looks determined. She touches her brush to her palette. ELINOR (CONT’D) (singing again) I’m painting a scene. I’m using the green. When she says the word “green,” she puts the brush to her canvas, attempting to add leaves to a bare tree trunk -- but nothing comes off of her brush. ELINOR (CONT’D) Hmm. She picks up her palette, and we can see that she’s out of green paint (i.e., it’s in its usual spot in a rainbow of paint blobs, but there’s only a tiny smidgen left on the palette). Make this more explicit: "Uh-oh. I'm out of green paint." ELINOR (CONT’D) Uh-oh. ANGLE ON: Elinor carries her palette to the table where Mr. Lion keeps the paint bottles. She picks up the green paint bottle and tries to squeeze a dollop onto her palette. "Maybe this should be ""I'm getting more green… I'm getting more green…""? Maybe add a silly sound effect for bottle empty" ELINOR (CONT’D) (trying her song again) I’m using the...green ! On the word “green,” she gives the bottle a hard squeeze, but nothing comes out. Ari comes up behind her, carrying his own palette. Have Ari come look for the blue paint (to tie it later to the blue berry). Change "green" to "blue" and add "blue dragon" to last sentence. ARI Elinor, can I please have the green next? I added a bunch of robots to my fruit picture, but now it needs a dragon. Move this line to earlier, right before "Ari comes up behind her…" ELINOR Uhhh ... there’s no more green paint in this bottle. Before this line, let's add more script here: After Ari asks for the blue paint, Elinor checks the blue tube and says they're out of blue, too. We're out?? Says Ari. Then have Olive come up, looking for brown paint. We're out of brown paint too! Then a few more kids start to show up. Then Ari asks the question in 42, but make it about all the colors: "Mr. Lion? It looks like we're out of paint. Do you have more?" ARI Mr. Lion? Is there any more green paint? Mr. Lion approaches. A couple other kids approach as well, including Olive -- they’re also out of green. Elinor hands the bottle to Mr. Lion, and he shakes and squeezes it himself. Nothing comes out. Before this line, let's make more of the situation. Have Mr. Lion check all the bottles. Maybe he gets a little flustered. "I thought I had brought enough…" MR. Lion sorry kids' since there are a few of them looking for the green paint It looks like we’re fresh out of green. Sorry, Ari! "Before this line, let's make more of this situation. After Mr. Lion tells the kids they're out of paint, let's lay out the problem more. Uh oh, how are the kids going to finish their paintings? Show a few examples: Koa wanted to finish his painting of X, and Mary and Liv wanted to finish their painting of Y. Then Mr. Lion says he's sorry, but we might need to finish the paintings next week. Then have the main kids walk back to the easel disappointed. This is the downbeat of the episode, the oh no moment. Then as they get to the easels, something happens that triggers the grass stains (see next note)" ElINOR Uh-oh. It’s an art emergency! Not sure this is the best way to stumble unto the answer. Maybe he trips or something as they get back to the easels. Ari (overly dramatic) An art-mergency ! When he says this, he casts his hands skyward and pretends to faint, falling into the grass. ArI (CONT’D) I’m okay, I’m okay. Elinor <SFX: GIGGLES> at his antics and helps him stand and bush off his smock, but then she notices that some of the green stains on his white smock aren’t brushing off. ELINOR Huh. Ari, your smock has green stains on it. ARI (noticing the stains) Sure. That’s what it’s for -- to keep my clothes clean! Add a beat here instead where they wonder how he got the stains: But the stains weren't there a minute ago. And we're out of green paint. Where did the stains come from? They look around and then Elinor looks closely and finds the blade of grass. ELINOR But these stains aren’t paint. She picks a broken blade of grass off of Ari’s smock and holds it up. CU: We can see that it’s vibrant green. ELINOR (CONT’D) They’re from the grass. ANGLE ON: Olive examines the stain, too. OLIVE You mean like the stains you get on your pants sometimes when you’re playing in the grass? ELINOR Yes. Elinor has an idea. Feel like we got to our solution to the episode problem too quickly here. (plus, we need to fill out more pages) So let's expand this part a bit more. If we have the kids back at the easel, have Elinor experiment here instead of knowing the solution right away. After she says, "That's so interesting!" have her just say, "I wonder..." then she tries painting the canvas with some grass. ELINOR (CONT’D) That is SO INTERESTING. Come on, I have an idea to solve our paint problem. Elinor runs off. "Lines 54-61: Replace these lines with these beats: -Elinor tries the grass on the canvase. - Wow, it works. The green from the leaves gets unto the canvas. - Maybe we can use it to finish our paintings. - Awesome! - But what about the other colors? - Hmmm... I know, let's go look around and see what other colors we can find in Nature. Then have the kids go and look and discover different colors in Nature (don't do this only in the song montage). Do it here with dialogue of the kids describing the things and the colors they find." Ari I don’t understand. What does my messy smock have to do with paint? Mr. Lion I think Elinor just had what both artists and scientists call an inspiration. CROSSFADE TO: 3. ext. FOREST CLEARING - a feW MINUTES LATER Elinor stands at her canvas, holding a handful of grass. ELINOR Plants have beautiful colors, right? OLIVE Right. ELINOR And we saw on Ari’s smock that sometimes those colors can be wiped onto other things, right? Ari Right. ELINOR Then maybe we can take the green from the grass... She scrubs her handful of grass onto the spot where she had previously tried to paint green leaves. A faint green stain appears there. ELINOR (CONT’D) ...and put it into a painting! <SFX: COOL, NEAT WALLA> (Continuing from the note on 54) Once the kids have found lots of colors in Nature (except blue, see note below), they go to Mr. Lion and tell him they found a solution to the paint problem and they explain what they've seen and how they discovered it. Then continue with line 62. Mr. Lion What a creative idea: using nature to paint nature! Ari gasps. ArI <GASP!> I’ll be right back. He rushes away. Mr. Lion Another inspiration! Over near the paint station, Ari picks up a blackberry from the still life fruit bowl, then rushes back. Make it a blueberry (to make it clearer that it would paint blue). Also, make it so that in their searching and discovering colors in Nature, they find all kinds of colors except blue, and Ari is disappointed because he wanted to paint his dragon blue. But now here in 065 he remembers the blue berries. Ari Mr. Lion, can I use this blackberry? Mr. Lion Sure, but what for? ARI Well, one time I sat on a berry by mistake, and it stained my pants. Olive (completing his thought) So maybe you can use fruit to paint fruit! Ari Or... Ari makes a few motions on his canvas with the blackberry, then steps back. ANGLE ON: We see the canvas, where Ari has used the berry to draw a wide-mouthed purple dragon set to devour the fruit bowl. Ari (CONT’D) I can use fruit to paint a dragon! Mr. Lion Very clever Ari! You know, back before you could buy paint in a bottle, cave dwellers used to paint using nature! A THOUGHT BUBBLE appears next to Mr. Lion, illustrating the following as he says it. Nice. Gives us a good idea for an interstitial… :) Mr. Lion (CONT’D) They’d crush up rocks and charcoal to make pictures inside their caves, and we know this because some of the pictures are still there, thousands of years later. The THOUGHT BUBBLE disappears. should these lines 73 -75 be more of a question as they dont know yet - ie 'Maybe we can even paint with dirt!' eLINOR We could paint with dirt! Ari Or beets! will 'beets' be understood? ELINOR Or flower petals! Tito Mouse - although a mouse is still relatively the same size as the other kids - therefore the flower wont be giant OLIVE I need to write these down. She takes out her ever-present notebook and crayon and starts to write. Mr. Lion leads a song as the kids experiment with plants and soil on their paintings. Scenes during the song include: Kids run excitedly from plant to plant. Olive tries plants one at a time, then records the results in her notebook. Elinor uses grass to spread more green across her canvas. Tito Mouse hauls a giant (to him) flower to his canvas. The Goat Twins paint pictures of each other in unison. Mr. Lion dances; his dancing looks like meditative tai chi. SONG: MR. LION: The world is full of colors that can all be found Hanging from the trees or growing in the ground. Put down your pen and pencil, ‘cause here’s the greatest part: Nature is a work of art! ELINOR: A berry’s red -- OLIVE: The grass is green -- ARI: The dirt is brown -- MR. LION: And hello! The flowers all around are orange, pink, and yellow. ELINOR: With berries in your painting, instead of in a tart, Nature is a work of art! ARI: You don’t always need to buy things in stores. ELINOR: You might find them if you just look outdoors. OLIVE: We’ll figure out the colors and write them in a chart. ELINOR AND ARI: Nature is a work of art! MR. LION (slowly, operatically): You see it all around you; you feel it in your heaaaaaart ! ALL (happily shouting, resuming tempo): Nature is a work of art! END SONG. ANGLE ON: The class smiles at their paintings; they’re all pleased with how they turned out. ANGLE ON: Elinor considers her canvas; Mr. Lion stands behind her. She’s holding a dandelion and weighing how to represent it in her painting. She’s almost done, but not quite. "perhaps this part has a bit more back and forth - some guidance from mr.Lion. 77 It just needs one more thing as she holds the dandelion - maybe about to rub it on the canvas for colour 78 stays as is 78A elinor understands what he's suggesting '(Gasp) Yes!' takes the glue etc. and i would assume she uses the dandelion to make the sun in the sky - perhaps line 80 Ari comments saying how cool that she used it to be the sun" ELINOR It just needs one more thing. I want to add a real-looking dandelion. Mr. Lion as noted that this script is short - maybe Ari and then Olive aslso glue something to their painting - Ari sticks two berries to be the robots eyes - Olive then grabs a few flowers and glues them below the tree inher painting Then maybe you don’t need paint. And maybe you don’t need colors from nature, either. Maybe what you need -- is glue! He dramatically reveals that he’s holding a bottle of white glue. He hands Elinor the bottle. She smiles, then puts a dab of glue on her canvas and attaches the dandelion. It looks great! Elinor steps back to look at her work. Olive and Ari come over to look at it as well. "Add a recap here about how Elinor got to show or paint how she feels about Nature: it's full of colors and that's why she loves it (or something like that). Add a recap or callback connection from Mr. Lion about his ideas of art. Add a recap about how there are all kinds of colors in Nature." OlIVE Wow. A picture OF nature, BY nature, IN nature, made WITH nature. ARI I especially love the dandelion - nice touch. MR. lion See? I told you not to worry about how your painting would turn out, Elinor. You’re a natural! They laugh as we zoom out and see the whole scene, with kids painting, chatting, and having a good time, some using paintbrushes and others using plants. FADE OUT, THE END.

EWW155 A Change of Art - D1 26Nov19 .

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ELINOR Wonders Why EP 155 A Change of Art By: Adam Ruben Elinor’s Question: How do we use nature to make art? Logline: When Mr. Lion's art class runs out of green paint, Elinor and her friends learn to make art using the colors found in nature. Curriculum Goals: LS8 . Begin to understand that there are many different kinds of living things and how they may be the same or different. (Different plants have different colors.) ND2 . Begin to understand that systems developed in our world often work in similar ways to systems found in the natural world. (Elinor and her friends learn that paints have an array of colors, just as plants have an array of colors.) SEP1a . Demonstrate curiosity about the greater world outside of their environment. (Elinor and her friends wonder which plants and other natural items can be used for their art.) SEP6a . Use background knowledge, experiences, and data to construct reasonable explanations and theories of natural phenomena. (Ari theorizes, from having stained his clothes in the past, that some of the most dramatic colors will come from deeply colored blackberries.) Main Characters: Elinor, Olive, Ari, Mr. Lion Non-Speaking Characters: Children in art class (Goat Twins, Tito Mouse, Camilla Dromedary, Sally Beaver, Gael Lynx, and others) Backgrounds - Forest clearing near the school Props - Paints, easels, blade of grass, handful of grass, fruit bowl, dandelion, glue, blackberry, paintings, paint bottles, paint palettes, Olive's notebook and crayon, smocks OUTLINE: October 28, 2019 FIRST DRAFT: November 26, 2019 Al All ARI Cam Camilla ELINOR ELINOR AND Olive Elinor, Olive Elinor, Olive, Ari ELINOR, Olive, aRI, sALLY SILAS ELINOR, Olive, ARI, sally, kai ELINOR/Olive Goat twins Kai Olive Olive, ARI Olive, Ari, Olive, ari, sallu, kai, Camilla, Goat Twins Olive/ari SALLY Mr. Rabbit Elinor, camilla Elinor, olive, ari, camilla MR. BAT MRS. BAT Mz. Mole Child Koa Ranger rabbit Mr. Lion Ari and olive (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 2 4 3 5 6 1 7 CLUBHOUSE ON A HILL (WIDE) – DAY CLUBHOUSE -- DAY SMALL HILL -- DAY BOTTOM OF THE HILL -- DAY CLUBOUSE – LATER IRIS OUT THE END. INT. ELINOR'S LIVING ROOM EXT. ELINOR'S YARD EXT. HILL INT. EXT. FOREST INT. ARI'S BEDROOM INT. CLASSROOM EXT. SCHOOL PLAYGROUND EXT. LAKESIDE EXT. FOREST CLEARING DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY A BIT LATER A FEW MINUTES LATER LATER THAT MORNING THAT NIGHT EARLY WINTER, A COUPLE WEEKS LATER CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. CROSSFADE TO: Wipe to: