"Fun draft with lots of great humor moments and pacing. Some overall notes: - Let's not show Ranger Rabbit picking up the snake, just have her show up with the terrarium. - Let's be a little careful about the timing and the movements of the kids back and forth so that the audience doesn't get confused. - Let's think a little more carefully how the kids piece together what's happening to the snake. Specific notes below. Thanks!!" 1. int. Ari’s bedroom -- morning Line Count - 113 Elinor P - 33 Ari P - 26 Olive P - 21 Ranger Rabbit - 19 cute first draft notes below This is a good combination of science and social skills learning. We are close on ELINOR and OLIVE as they wait, somewhat patiently, in ARI’s upside down bedroom as clothes, hats and a few toys, come flying into frame. Lines: 1-11 - This scene is moving a bit fast for our audience, let's take a bit of time to spell things out a little more. Suggestions below. ARI (O.S.) No... that’s not it... where is it? Elinor and Olive duck out of the way of a few things, but then a blue shirt lands right on Elinor, draping itself over her like she was a coat-rack. With the shirt still over her: "Let's not have the mom walk with them, but rather have the kids run into the mom on their way to the soccer field. So suggest we change this line to: ELINOR Ari, what are you looking for? It's almost time to go play soccer. OLIVE Yeah, we're supposed to go practice before the big game." eLINOR we should take advantage of the upsied down bedroom- he can be standing on the ceiling at his dresser with the drawers open, his head burried inside one of them. as he toses things out they fall to the ground - and some onto the girls Ari, what are you looking for? My Mom is waiting for us, it’s almost time for soccer practice. We go wide on Ari’s bedroom as we see Ari’s legs sticking up in the air as he searches through a messy pile of things. "Have Ari finish his sentence normally and add a dialogue line: ARI (O.S.) I know, but I can't go until I find my lucky shirt! Elinor and Olive look at each other (""lucky shirt""?) ARI A-HA! I found it! Ari suddenly pops up, triumphant…" ARI (O.S.) I know, but I can’t go until I find... my lucky shirt! Ari suddenly pops up, triumphant, holding a red, long-sleeved shirt. Suddenly, Elinor and Olive are intrigued. "This scene might be funnier if Ari is hanging from the roof, rummaging through the pile of shirts in his drawer and tossing some aside, causing it to rain shirts on Elinor and Olive. In the description below this line, put the pictures in the wall near Elinor and Olive, not his desk (I'm not sure he has a desk), and have Ari fly down and point to the pictures as he talks about them." oLIVE We dont have a desk in Ari’s room. If we change him to be looking through his dresser, then we could put the series of pictures on the inside of one of the cupboard doors. That IS a nice shirt... What’s so lucky about it? Ari points to his desk, where some pictures are set up. As he speaks, we look through the pictures of the different events. The pictures are: Ari, Elinor and Olive at a baseball game, Ari giving a thumbs up with a big bug on his shoulder and finally, Ari, Elinor and Olive smiling as they eat cake. "Add to the description above this line that Ari is wearing his red shirt in all the pictures. Also, let's not have Ari change into his shirt yet. Cut the description below this line and paste it later below." Ari Do you remember when I got that big hit in the baseball game last year? (different picture) Or the time that cool bug landed on my shoulder? ari doesnt have a closet but keeps his clothes in the dresser as mentioned above. we could have him put the shirt over his exsisting shirt - i realize this throws off the action after line 10 - elinor bringing the blue shit just in case. If this is an issue maybe he can walk behind the side of the dresser - with the door open, there lots of coverage for him to change shirts - unless we feel a scene like that can be sees as akward (different picture) Or that day that Mz. Mole brought in a yummy cake and it wasn’t even anyone’s birthday? Ari pops out from his closet, now wearing the red shirt. It’s so tight that Ari can barely move his arms, which are stuck out to the sides (like Randy in A Christmas Story) . "Let's explain the shirt a little more here. Add a line between 5 and 6 where Elinor or Olive react to Ari's question, then modify line 6: OLIVE Yeah, those were pretty fun days. ARI And on every one of those days, I was wearing THIS shirt. That’s why I call it my lucky shirt. Every time I wear it, something good happens!" ARI (CONT’D) Every time I wear this shirt, something good happens! Have Ari put the shirt on in between lines 6 and 7. It's probably ok to show him shirtless, isn't it? ELINOR I don’t know, Ari. It looks a little... tight. "Move the stretch bit to this line, it's funnier if he says it right before he has trouble with the door: ARI What!? No, it's fine! I just haven't worn it in a while. I'm sure it will stretch out." Ari in regards to design, we can make it look tight but animation will sell it by lack of movement and acting appropriately. adding the dialogue abiut it being tight helps too What?! It’s fine! Ari goes to open the bedroom door, but can’t move his arms. (DESIGN NOTE: the idea is that the shirt is so tight it constricts Ari’s arms from moving and they stick out - will this play? If not, happy to adjust). Delete the second sentence. Ari (CONT’D) Can one of you get this? I just need to stretch my lucky shirt out. As Elinor opens the door, she also grabs the blue shirt that fell onto her head and puts it into Olive’s satchel. Change "And let's" to "I'll" ELINOR I got it. And let’s bring a bigger shirt too, you know, just in case. Ari sideways walk gag is fun. :) Ari Okay, but we won’t need it. We have luck on our side! As the kids all walk out, Ari’s arms smack against the door-frame, so he has to walk out sideways. 2. Ext. soccer field -- day Elinor, Olive and RANGER RABBIT arrive at the soccer field next to school. "Lines 12-14: let's have the kids walking in the forest towards the soccer field by themselves, and let’s have them run into Ranger Rabbit carrying the terrarium with the snake coming the other way. Not feeling super comfortable showing Ranger Rabbit picking up the snake, as it might give some kids the idea to try it. Use line 12 instead to start the scene with Ari being silly and boasting about how many balls he's going to stop now that he has his lucky shirt. Maybe he pretends play and falls over because of his tight shirt." elinor top of seq 2 - please note that ari is folowing further behind Thanks for walking with us, Mom. Use this line for Olive to say, "Look there's your mom, Elinor!" RANGER RABBIT It was my pleasure, honey bunny. It’s right on my way to the Ranger Sta-- Oh, what do we have here? Suddenly, Ranger Rabbit sees something in the grass field and goes over to it. A curious Elinor and Olive follow her. Use the description above this line to describe Ranger Rabbit coming the other way holding a terrarium. Use this line for Elinor to say, "Hi, Mom! Whatcha got there?" ELINOR What do you see, Mom? A beat later, Ari finally waddles into frame, still not able to move his arms. Ari Oooh! What is it? Ranger Rabbit is crouched over, facing away from camera as the kids approach. With each word, their anticipation grows. Instead of turning around, just have mom reveal what's in the terrarium (maybe she had it covered up with a cloth or something). Then the following lines play out with the kids looking into the terrarium at the snake. RANGER RABBIT It’s a cute... little... baby... Ranger Rabbit then turns around, holding a BABY GARTER SNAKE by the base of its head. RANGER RABBIT (CONT’D) Garter snake! Elinor and Olive smile right back at the snake <SFX: AWWW WALLA>, while Ari looks frightened. Ari S-s-s-s-snake? Ahhh! Ari backs up quickly, falling backwards. He tries to get up, but can’t move his arms to lift himself. haha ARI (CONT’D) Little help, please? Elinor helps Ari up as Olive moves closer to the snake. Olive Wow! Can I see it? Use this line to have Ranger Rabbit explain that she found the snake and is going to give her a little water and then release her in another part of the forest where she isn't around kids playing soccer. Also explain that kids should never touch a snake, unless they are with a grown up. RANGER RABBIT after 21 - reads 'NOTE: garter snakes are not poisonous but they do bite sometimes)' do we want ranger rabbit to share that info to the kids when she mentions neverf touching a snake? Sure, Olive, but remember, you should never touch a snake... unless you’re with a grown-up, like me. Elinor and Olive both move in close as Ranger Rabbit holds it in both hands, still making sure to hold its neck, so it can’t bite (NOTE: garter snakes are not poisonous but they do bite sometimes) SCIENCE ECU: the sweet little snake flicks his tongue. OLIVE Look at its tongue flicking. Why does it do that? RANGER RABBIT To smell things. can we make more of this moment? <giggle> with it's tongue! thats sooo interesting......" ELINOR Oooh, that’s so interesting. Come look, Ari. Ari stays behind them, still unsure about this. Ari That’s okay, I can see it just fine from back here, thanks. Elinor is fascinated by the snake. ELINOR It’s so pretty. Check out the zig zag patterns on its back. I'm not sure "yeah but" follows the line above. Olive Yeah, but the snake’s skin is kind of flaky. It’s not shiny and smooth like snake skin usually is. I'm a little confused with the line of thinking on 27-29. Maybe Kevins note will help. ArI How do you know that? Let's remove the two description paragraphs below this line. Let's not have the other kids interrupt our mains in this scene. Let's keep the snake curiosity moment nice and clean without interruptions. OLIVE reads 'curls up on rr's arm - shes holding it at the base of its skull with one hand and the body with the other - would you mind attaching an example image or link to fully understand how this will play out visually Oh, I love looking at pictures of snakes in my nature book. They’re so cool! Ari gently <SFX: SHUDDER> in nervousness. At this moment, MARY and LIZZIE come running through. <SFX: HAPPY PLAYING WALLA> As the kids pass, the snake very slowly curls up on Ranger Rabbit’s arm, as if its scared. between 30-39 feels like we can get a reaction from ari since he's afraid of snakes Elinor Hmm, it seems like this poor snake is moving kinda slowly. Do you think it’s okay? Delete the description below this line. RANGER RABBIT I’m sure it’s fine, Elinor. All the things you’ve observed are just a normal part of growing up for a little snake like this. KOA then comes running through the middle of them, once again causing the snake to slowly curl up. "Delete this line. Instead, add a line from Mz. Mole calling all the kids in to practice (let's use Mz. Mole to frame the soccer playing): Mz. Mole (blows whistle) Ok, kids, time to start our soccer practice!" Koa Mary, Lizzie, wait up! (then, oblivious) Whoa! Excuse me! Delete the second sentence of this line. RANGER RABBIT I think " or bite someone"should be removed. I'm not sure it supports the overall goal for kids to get outside. I think it’s time to get this guy to a safer place. With all the kids running around here, he could get stepped on, or bite someone. Delete the first sentence. Elinor And that would NOT be good. Where will you take him, Mom? the soccer field is surroundd by forest - so maybe to help clarify she can mention that the snake is safest 'deep' in the forest away from where kids re playing so its safe RANGER RABBIT Not sure about the purpose of the last line here..either add why that is good or remove it. Snakes should be in the forest, where there is plenty of food and places for them to find shelter, so I’ll drop him off in the forest near the ranger station. There’s lots of snakes out in those woods. Suddenly, Olive and Elinor look kind of sad. "Instead of wanting to spend more time with the snake, just have the kids want to see Ranger Rabbit as she does it. Change to: OLIVE Can we go watch?" Olive Aww, I was hoping we could spend some more time with the snake. Ranger Rabbit then gets an idea. Add an "Of course!" at the beginning of this line, and replace "it's over" with "you have a break." (let's add this idea of a break between the practice and the game to help kids keep track of the timing in this episode) RANGER RABBIT How about you all have your practice, then you can help me put the snake back into the forest when it’s over? ElINOR/OLIVE Really? / That would be amazing! RANGER RABBIT Change this to something like, "Great. I'll be waiting for you at the Ranger Station." Then we’ll all go and bring him home together this afternoon' - sounds like she's saying they will bring him to where elinor and RR live - pls adjust agree ...needs "to the woods" in here somewhere Great. We have a terrarium at the Ranger Station that will keep him nice warm and cozy for a while. Then we’ll all go and bring him home together this afternoon. As Ari and Olive run onto the field, Elinor gives her Mom a hug. Elinor Thanks, Mom, you’re the best. Have Elinor and Olive say bye to the snake too. (Maybe throw in an Ari snake kicker too?) RANGER RABBIT Just doing my duty as a Park Ranger! Have fun, honey! (then, to snake) Ready to take a walk, little guy? Elinor waves to her mom as she runs off to join her friends. 3. EXT. soccer FIELD -- Day Ari stands in front of the goal, his arms still stuck out to the sides as Elinor and Olive stand by, ready to shoot. seq 3 - please note that olive no longer has her satchel - we can assume she placed it down on the sidelines somewhere Ari Alright, goalie Ari is READY! Give me your best shot! Suddenly, a ball sails right past his right hand and into the net. A beat later, a ball sails into the net past his left hand. In both cases, Ari takes a swing at it, but just can’t move well enough to stop the shots. Haha ARI (CONT’D) Okay, maybe not your best shot. Gimme a good shot. On the field, Elinor and Olive look at each other, unsure about this. They just shrug and keep shooting. We then see a quick montage of Ari scuttling around the net as shot after shot goes in without him being able to stop it. The first shot from Elinor sails over his head. 44-47 will be a lot of fun. ARI (CONT’D) Too high. A shot from Olive rolls in on the ground. Ari bends to get it, but can’t move his arms in time. ARI (CONT’D) Too low. A shot from Elinor sails right past him before he can react. ARI (CONT’D) Too fast. A shot from Olive slowly rolls in as Ari runs over to stop it, but goes right past it. He tries to recover and reach back for the ball, but can’t. ARI (CONT’D) Too slow. Elinor and Olive have seen enough as they approach the goal. Olive Ari, your shirt is too tight for you to move! Why don’t you just change it? i think it needs to be clear that they have a practice followed by a game - and that there's enough time to go see the snake before the game starts ARI I was confused on this too. Most 5 and under games are about 30 minutes total. You come, play, leave. I think its fine to stretch it out but it needs to be clear early on that the game is later in the day and they want to practice before the game to be ready. And lose all my good luck? How will we win the game today? ELINOR But you haven’t stopped any shots yet. Despite all facts to the contrary, Ari remains confident. ARI That’s because you don’t need luck in practice. Once the game starts, my lucky shirt is going to work and guess who’ll be stopping all the shots? Ari points his thumb up and tries to point to himself, but he can’t move his arms, so he just up to the sky. Olive looks up and sees a tree above them. funny Olive The tree? Ari tries harder and finally bends his arm, slightly. ARI No. (straining) This bat right here! As Elinor looks over on the other side of the field, Mary and Lizzie are passing the ball back and forth and score easily on Koa. As they <SFX: CELEBRATE> their goal, Elinor looks concerned. Elinor I sure hope so because Mary and Lizzie are really good at soccer. ARI Ahh, don’t worry about them. With this lucky shirt, I don’t even need to practice. Give this line to Mz. Mole and have her blow her whistle again and tell all the kids it's break time. OLIVE Maybe clarify where they are going to see the snake O.K. Then can we go see the snake now? Give this line to Olive or Elinor and have them say something like, "Let's go help my mom/Ranger Rabbit!" ArI (uncertain) Uuuuh, suuure. maybe one of them calls out to the goat twins and koa - 'we'll be back for the game - see you later!" ELINOR cool..I'm excited to see the ranger station Yeah! Let’s go! Olive and Elinor runs off eagerly, as Ari lags behind. 4. Int. Ranger station -- day Ranger Rabbit is sitting at her desk as the kids walk in, with Ari trailing a beat behind. please note that olive is carrying her satchel with her ELINOR Hi, Mom. Instead of "see the snake" replace with something like "Are you ready to help me let the snake out into its new home?" or "help me bring the snake to the forest"? RANGER RABBIT Hey there, kids! You ready to see the snake again? OLIVE We sure are. As Ari walks in, his arms still stick straight out and he almost knocks over a plant on Ranger Rabbit’s desk, but luckily she catches it before it falls. Ari Oops. Sorry. RANGER RABBIT That’s okay, Ari. The snake is right back there in the terrarium. I’ll be right over as soon as I’m done with this recycling report. ELINOR Okay, Mom. Elinor and Olive walk over to the terrarium as a still nervous Ari stays a step behind. OLIVE There he is. Right in the corner. Olive points to the front of the terrarium, but Elinor sees something different. ELINOR Wait, no! There he is, in that corner? OLIVE Wow! Are there two snakes now? Suddenly, Ari pops up, even more worried. Nice Ari suggest she looks and finds a magnifying glass close by - elinor cant be carrying it with her as its usually in olives satchel (she doesnt have anywhere to hold it)- so unless we have her ask olive if she can use it or It would make sense for RR to have one in her station There should be some in the ranger station...it's part of the job. Also, having a line about using the magyfying glass to take a closer look to make more observations would help with content. That’s too many snakes. Get it? TOO many, because there’s two? Olive and Elinor <SFX: GIGGLE> then Elinor pulls out her magnifying glass. Elinor We need more observations! We see Elinor’s MAGNIFYING POV as she looks at the snake, who sticks his tongue out at her and moves around in the back of the terrarium. Elinor (O.S.) (CONT’D) There’s one snake... Her POV then moves to the front of the terrarium on the snakeskin. She runs the magnifying glass along with the length on it. The pattern on it looks like a snake. Lines 72-82 are kind of unclear and they seem to figure out that it’s the skin too easily. Also, from pictures online, not sure you can see the color patterns on the snake skin, they just look white. Try something like this instead: ELINOR (O.S.) (CONT’D) This other thing looks like a snake... However, when her POV gets to the end of it, the skin is just hollow. We are now back on the kids as they think it over. "I wonder if the bag analogy will confuse kids. Try something like, ELINOR But it isn't. It's not moving. It looks almost like it's made out of paper OLIVE Yeah, it looks really thin and there's no snake inside.""" ELINOR (CONT’D) consider removing "almost"..It's good to make the comparison more directly. But it isn’t. It looks almost like a thin paper bag that kinda looks like a snake, but there’s no snake in it. As Elinor and Olive think about this, Ari takes a deep breath and leans in close to the side of the terrarium. He is still nervous, but he is facing his fears. We see from inside the terrarium as the snake slithers by in the FG as Ari looks in, studying the snake and the skin on the ground. Here maybe replace "This paper bag" with "This paper-looking thing…" (it's not a bag) ARI This paper bag doesn’t kinda look like the snake. The snake, whose skin is now much more smooth and shiny than it was before, slithers by the skin and Ari notices that the pattern on both skins is exactly the same! Delete the second sentence. Ari (CONT’D) It looks exactly like the snake. See, they both have the same zig zag patterns. olive You’re right, Ari. They do. Ari turns to face his friends and make a hypothesis. "Here, have the real snake come in and sit next to the shed skin. Then add aline before 76 something like, ELINOR Wait a minute, the real snake's skin looks shiny and new now. Remember it looked old and flaky before? ARI It's almost like that snake's skin came off! Is that possible?? (instead of ""lost its skin""). " Ari It’s almost like that snake... lost its skin! Is that possible? This discovery floods the kids with curiosity and questions as they gather around the terrarium. Olive His skin fell off? Poor snake! Elinor once again observes the snake, who seems fine. ELINOR He seems okay, but why did his skin fall off? We definitely need some more observations now. The kids all gather around the terrarium and look at the snake, who stops to rest right next to the stretched out skin. When they are next to each other, it is very apparent by the pattern on the skin that they are identical. Not sure from pictures online that you can see the pattern on old snake skin that's been shed. Instead, replace lines 79 and 80 with Olive observing that the she skin looks smaller than the snake. It doesn't look like it would fit him. OLIVE "These are the same pattern on the skins, for sure" - reads a bit clunky These are the same pattern on the skins, for sure. But now his skin is shiny and bright, not all flaky like before. Suddenly, Elinor notices something. Delete. ELINOR The pattern may be the same, but the size of the pattern is just a little bit different. The new zig zags on the snake are just a teensy bit bigger than the old zig zags. Ari then observes that the old skin isn’t quite as long as the snake is now. Delete second and third sentences. Ari You’re right, Elinor! And look! The old skin is just a little too short for this snake. ELINOR Yeah! It’s almost like this other skin came from... a smaller snake. RANGER RABBIT You kids are right about that... in a way. The kids turn around to find Ranger Rabbit observing their investigation in the background. Suggest "We are? Is the skin from a smaller snake?" Olive We are? So there ARE two snakes? "replace ""shed"" with ""get rid of"" or ""replace"" replace ""could be just the right size"" with ""could grow and be just the right size.""" RANGER RABBIT No, Olive, there’s just the one snake, but this snake used to be smaller, then he grew and had to shed his old skin so that his new skin could be just the right size. The kids look on at Ranger Rabbit, minds blown! its ELINOR So when a snake grows, it’s skin just comes off in one big piece? RANGER RABBIT Delete the word "shedding" That’s right, Elinor. This shedding is a process called molting. Ari suddenly has a scary thought. Change this to "My mom says I'm growing really fast. Is my skin going to molt off?" (growth spurt seems a little advanced) Ari My Mom says I’m due for a growth spurt. Is my skin gonna molt off? "We can do a bit better with this paragraph. Maybe something like: No, Ari. You have nothing to worry about. In many animals, like bats, and rabbits and elephants, their skin grows as the animal grow. But in some animals, like snakes, their skin doesn't grow. Instead they grow a new skin underneath, and their old skin falls off. Or something like that." RANGER RABBIT could start with a chuckle - then go into line No, Ari. You have nothing to worry about. Many animals, like bats, and rabbits and elephants, grow their skin as they grow. But some animals, like snakes, have to molt their skins as they grow, leaving behind their entire skins, like you saw in the terrarium. OlIVE Ranger Rabbit, does it hurt the snake when they molt? RANGER RABBIT No, they actually feel much better because their old skin was getting tight and uncomfortable. At that moment, Ari tries to stretch his arms in his tight shirt, but can’t. He then thinks about something. Nice. ARI But, what if the snake liked the old skin? What if it was his lucky skin and he did all these cool things in it? RANGER RABBIT Ari, growing up is a good thing, and sometimes that means we outgrow the things that used to fit us. ELINOR Plus, think of all the new and awesome things that the snake can do with his new skin! Ari thinks about this for a moment and nods his head. Let's expand this line a little bit. Add this after the first sentence: "I guess you're right. Maybe it's time to say good bye to my lucky red shirt. It doesn't really fit me any more. Elinor, do you still have that other shirt? Ari after 95 - again, there's nowhere for elinor to be carrying the shirt - it was placed in olive’s satchel - so he should ask olive about it and she gives it to him I guess you’re right. Say, Elinor, do you still have that other shirt? Elinor pulls out the blue shirt and hands it to Ari. Can we polish this line a little bit? It feels like the author's voice. ELINOR I sure do! Now you can move around, just like our snake friend in its new skin! 5. Int. rangER STATION -- song sequence As the music starts, the kids sing and dance around the terrarium as Ranger Rabbit and the snake watch. The song is cute, but it could use a chorus? Something about the general lesson that all living beings grow, and it's good to grow, and we all grow, etc. Add the chorus at the beginning and repeat it at the end. ELINOR/olive/ARI ELINOR: When you’re a snake And it’s time to grow OLIVE: There is one thing That you need to know. Ari jumps in, now wearing the new blue shirt, which fits perfectly. Just to be sure, he moves his arms with ease. ARI: Your skin will start To feel real tight ELINOR But don’t you worry You’ll be all right! ALL: Because your old skin Will molt and shed And you’ll be fresh and new From your tail to your head! As the song finishes, the kids dance right out of frame. 6. EXT. FOREST -- day Let's have Ranger Rabbit bring the snake in the terrarium, and have her release the snake by turning it over or something. As if it was continuous action, the kids then run into frame, with Ranger Rabbit one step behind, once again holding the snake at a forest clearing. Elinor Welcome home, little guy. Ranger Rabbit puts the snake gently on the ground and it slithers away happily. Ari Look at him go! He can really move now that he has comfortable skin. Olive (a little whistful) Bye, bye little snakey-snake. (to Ranger Rabbit) Will he be okay, Ranger Rabbit? As they look into the forest, another garter snake slithers by and our snake follows him into the forest. RANGER RABBIT I think he’ll be just fine, Olive. Now don’t you kids have a game to play soon? The kids all realize the game is about to start. They were so wrapped up in this investigation, they almost forgot. Elinor Ooh, you’re right, Mom! We’d better hurry! Ari runs off, now able to run at full speed. if a crowd is watcing the game - i would assume RR would be there too Ari Me first! As the kids run off, Ranger Rabbit waves to them. Elinor Alright! Let’s go, let’s go... As Elinor runs out of the forest, we: Cut to: 7. Ext. soccer FIELD -- day As if continuous her line, we see Elinor running on the soccer field and Olive dibbling the soccer ball between them - they’re pretty good. We see on the scoreboard that it’s 1-0. Let's tone down the competition aspect of playing. Remove the scoreboard reference. It feels a bit unfriendly that they celebrate when Mary and Lizzie lose. Not a big deal, but can we just have Ari block a shot without the whole game resting on it? ELINOR "and we’re up by one!" sounds too old - we could just have elinor call it out - we're winning one nothing. and we dont have a scoreboard at this location design- unless we change it to be a stand with cards that flip to show the the score. Let’s go! Only one minute left and we’re up by one! As we go wide, we see Elinor and Olive are playing against Mary and Lizzie. Koa and Ari are the two goalies. OlivE Pass it to me, Elinor. Elinor does a fake crossover to send Mary going in one direction, then passes to Olive in the other direction. Unfortunately, Lizzie intercepts the pass and takes off down the field all by herself! Let's just have Ari stop the goal, remove the buzzer horn. ELINOR after 107 - reads SFX: HORN blows, signaling the end of the game. <SFX: CROWD CHEERS> - the soccer pitch is a little field near their school - without a scorboard or horn - we would need someone to blow a whistle - maybe mz.mole? or a secondary character - we dont have to give this character any lines - also reads that there's a crowd - i assume secondary characters?kids and adults? we can only use walla ad not give them specific dialogue Oh no! As time ticks down, Ari gets ready to defend the net. He now has full mobility as Lizzie shoots the ball and Ari jumps up, arms fully extended, and catches it to make the save, just as the SFX: HORN blows, signaling the end of the game. <SFX: CROWD CHEERS> Elinor and Olive run over to Ari, who still holds the ball. Remove "we won! We won!" Just have Ari triumph by stopping the ball. ELINOR (CONT’D) We won! We won!! Way to go, Ari! she's talking about his blue shirt - however, it doesnt read that elinor and olive wear blue shirts (to look like a team) - so at the top of the episode, if we are to have elinor grab an extra shirt in his bedroom just in case, then why not grab the green shirt (his regular design) he changed out of to wear his lucky shirt oLIVE It looks like your new shirt is lucky for you too. Ari Oh, I’m lucky all right. Lucky to have you two on my team!! Elinor, Olive and Ari all high five, celebrating their victory. <SFX: CHEERS AND LAUGHTER> THE END.

EWW 134 Ari's Lucky Shirt D1 June 20, 2019 .

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 134 Ari's Lucky Shirt By: Michael Foulke Elinor’s Question: Why did this snake lose its skin? Logline: When a baby snake in the care of Ranger Rabbit loses its skin, Elinor and friends try to help before learning that shedding skins is just a part of growing for snakes. Curriculum Goals: LS2: Understand that all animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs, and that plants have different parts to help them survive and grow. [The snake's skin works differently than our characters' skin in that it doesn't grow with the animal, but rather sheds and creates a new layer of brand new skin when it becomes too small.] ND1: Understand that modes of life in the natural world and engineered solutions in the designed world have common patterns, and engineers often look to natural patterns for inspiration. [Much like the snake needs a new layer of skin because he has grown bigger, Ari needs a new shirt for the same reason.] SEP3: Planning and carrying out investigations: compare and contrast objects by describing similarities and differences in detail. [Elinor and friends investigate why the snake lost its skin by comparing and contrasting the old skin to the new one.] SEP7: Engaging in argument from evidence: Engage in discussions before, during and after investigations. Support thinking and argue ideas with evidence. [Elinor determines that the skin is not a second snake, but it the first snake's old skin by looking at the evidence of the old skin and showing her friends that the old skin and the new one are the same, except for the fact that the old skin is a bit smaller, because the snake has grown.] MAINS: Elinor, Ari, Olive, Ranger Rabbit LOCATIONS: Ari's Bedroom, Soccer Field, Ranger Station, Forest PROPS: Blue Shirt, Red Shirt, Soccer Balls, Terrarium, Snake Skin, Magnifying Glass OUTLINE: May 23, 2019 FIRST DRAFT: June 20, 2019 ELINOR OLIVE ARI SILAS ELINIR MARY LIZZIE MR RaCCOON ELINR TAPIR MZ Mole KOA SALLY FARMER BEAR R Ranger RABBIT OLIVE/ARi/ELINOR ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI Elinor/olive Elinot (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 5 6 EXT MAIN FOREST PATH -- DAY MAPLE TREE GROVE SOCCER FIELD RANGER STATION -- DAY INT. RANGER STATION -- SONG SEQUENCE INT. RANGER STATION -- DAY SOCCER FIELD -- DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.