Fantastic Story! The changes you've made have made it much clearer. A few very tiny notes below. 1. ext. elinor’s yard - DAY Love this story! No additional notes from me. Line Count - 106 Elinor P - 34 Olive P - 16 Ari P - 16 Mr. Beaver P - 20 Famer Bear P - 20 Mr. Hippo A - 5 Ranger Rabbit A - 5 ESTABLISHING. Under the shelter of a beautiful LEAFY TREE, ELINOR, ARI and OLIVE share a kid-size table. They’ve been drawing with crayons. elinor Okay, let’s see our story so far. Ready? Olive and Ari nod. (The kids each hold a few drawings face-down ready to flip up.) ELINOR (storytelling) (CONT’D) ‘Once upon a time in the enchanted forest, there was a big, beautiful tree -’ ANGLE ON: Ari flips up a picture he made, of the bottom half of a BIG TREE. OLIVE (laughing) Ari, where’s the rest of the tree? aRI (sheepish) I ran out of space ! I’ll start again. Ari tosses his page into a CARDBOARD BOX on the ground, which already has many sheets of discarded paper in it, and grabs a fresh sheet from a PILE OF PAPER on the table. Elinor continues. eLINOR (storytelling) ‘- and in this tree, a bird had made her nest.’ Olive flips up her drawing, of a nesting bird - then frowns. after line 6 it reads it shows an bear ‘OGRE’ in the woods. pls correct. i assume it should just read 'ogre' and not a bear. OLIVE Hm , I don’t like how the bird’s wings turned out. I’m going to re-do it. Olive recycles her drawing too, and grabs a new sheet. Elinor resumes the story, holding up her own picture - it shows an bear ‘OGRE’ in the woods. ELINOR (storytelling) But one day, an ogre came stomping through the forest . He wanted to push down all the trees! Olive and Ari stare at her picture. oLIVE An ogre? I thought it was going to be a giant! Wondering if "cabinet" might be more familiar to kids than "cupboard" eLINOR Is there a difference? OLIVE A giant’s a lot bigger. Olive holds up a picture she made, with a giant who’s so big, only his FOOT fits in the drawing beside the tree! ELINOR Whoa, the poor trees! Okay, I’ll draw him as a giant - Elinor tosses her ‘ogre’ picture into the rather full RECYCLING BIN. She reaches for a new sheet of paper, but there isn’t any. eLINOR (CONT’D) - oops. We’re o ut of paper. Come on, let’s get some more... Elinor gets up and heads for the house. Her friends follow. 2. INT. KITCHEN - DAY RANGER RABBIT is chopping vegetables when the kids enter. ELINOR Hi Mom. Can I get some more paper from the cupboard? ranger RABBIT Sure, Elinor. Help yourself. (to Ari and Olive) How’s it going with your storybook? ARI (enthusiastic) Great! It’s about a bird who has to protect the tree s from a giant. RaNGER RABBIT Ah! Well, trees do need protecting. Elinor breaks in, gesturing to an empty shelf in a cupboard. ELINOR Mom? There’s no paper here. RangER RABBIT Oh? We must have run out. ELINOR (confused) Run out? But - this is where paper comes from. The cupboard! Ranger Rabbit smiles, making sure not to laugh. RANGER RABBIT Well before that, it comes from a store. OLIVE Yeah! Mr. Hippo’s store. ARI ( beat ) I knew that. BACK ON Elinor, looking concerned. ELINOR Well, we can’t finish making our storybook without paper. She looks hopefully at Ranger Rabbit. eLINOR (CONT’D) Maybe we could go to the store and buy some more? Ranger Rabbit reaches into a drawer for a little COIN PURSE. rANGER RABBIT All right. This should be enough money for a pack of paper. ELINOR Thanks Mom. We won’t be long! Elinor, Ari and Olive wave good-bye as they EXIT. DISSOLVE TO: 3. EXT. MAIN STREET - MR. HIPPO’S STORE ESTABLISH Mr. Hippo’s store, as the three kids hurry through the main door. A bell <JINGLES> to announce their arrival. 4. INT. MR. HIPPO’S STORE MR. HIPPO is moving along a shelf, rapidly (and comically) pricing items with a STICKER GUN - <KA-CHUNK KA-CHUNK> when the kids enter. olive Hi Mr. Hippo. <KA-CHUNK> As Mr. Hippo turns to greet them, he ‘prices’ Ari. Mr. HIPPO (singsong) Good morning - whoops! (after a beat) Sorry, we’re having a sale. Ari peels off the sticker. ARI (jokes) Fifty cents? C ome on, I’m worth at least a dollar. The k ids and Mr. Hippo <SFX: GIGGLE> . ELINOR Mr. Hippo, w e’re making a storybook, but we ran out of paper. Should this say "in aisle two"? (instead of "on aisle two") MR. HIPPO Ah, paper! You can find it on a isle two. Middle shelf. The kids eagerly hurry down an aisle - but their faces fall. POV - there’s an empty shelf in front of them. ARI Huh? There’s no paper. Mr. Hippos strolls over to join them. He looks at the empty shelf and taps his chin <SFX: HMMMM...> OLIVE But how can a store run out of paper? This is where paper comes from. Mr. HIPPO (chuckles) Oh, no. Stores usually don’t make the things they sell. Everything here was made by someone else. Elinor, Ari and Olive look at each other in surprise. They never thought about this. <SFX: SURPRISED OOOOHH WALLA> ELINOR Then who makes the paper? MR. hIPPO Mr. Beaver. And it looks like I need to ask him to bring some more. ElINOR Why don’t we go and ask him for you? (aside, to Ari and Olive) Then maybe we’ll get to see how he makes the paper. Ari and Olive nod in enthusiastic agreement. after line 38 it reads -He mischievously ‘prices’ his own arm. As he goes back then goes back to work, we... - i'm unclear as to how this action takes place. is it on purpose? will it read as a gag? seems a bit odd Mr. Hippo Well, that would be fine! Thank you, kids. As the trio head out the door again - <JINGLE!> - Mr. Hippo grins. <KA-CHUNK!> He mischievously ‘prices’ his own arm. As he goes back then goes back to work, we... DISSOLVE TO: 5. Ext. Mr. beaver’s PAPER FACTORY The three kids approach Mr. Beaver’s ‘paper factory’ - really more of a small workshop on the Beaver family property. CLOSER - a PAPER-THEMED PICTOGRAM SIGN by the door confirms that this is the right place. Elinor <KNOCKS> on the door. Mr. Beaver (os) Come in! The kids push open the door. CUT TO: 6. Int. Mr. Beaver’s FACTORY INSIDE - the kids find MR. BEAVER, amid an assortment of low-tech, PAPER-MAKING EQUIPMENT. MR. BEAVER Well, hi there! What brings you to my paper factory this fine morning? ELINOR Hi , Mr. Beaver ! We’re looking for paper. We were making a storybook, but we ran out . OLIVE We went to the store to buy more, but Mr. Hippo’s out of paper too. Mr. BEAVER Ah, so he sent you to me! Well, you came to the right place. I was just about to make some. ARI Ooh , can we watch ? ELINOR (eager) W e want to know how you do it. Mr. beaver Of course! Right this way... He beckons, and they follow him. Mr. Beaver’s first stop is a BIN, from which he takes a SMALL LENGTH OF CUT WOOD. Mr. bEAVER (CONT’D) It all starts with this. elINOR A piece of wood? What does that have to do with paper? Mr. BEAVER Everything! Paper is MADE from wood. CUT TO Elinor, Ari and Olive, who are quite amazed. <SFX: AMAZED WALLA> ELINOR That’s SO interesting! We need more observations. Mr. Beaver grabs 3 pairs of SAFETY GOGGLES, and dons his own. Mr. BEAVER Then you better put on your ‘observation’ goggles, for safety. The kids put on the goggles, giggling at how funny they look. <SFX: GIGGLE WALLA> Mr. BEAVER (CONT’D) First, I grind up the wood into little pieces... Mr. Beaver takes the log to a WOOD-GRINDING MACHINE. He feeds the log into it, and a <GRINDING NOISE> erupts. CUT TO the kids - covering their ears at the loud sound! WOOD SHAVINGS shower out the other end, into a box. MR. Beaver takes a big <SFX: SNIIIF> Mr. BEAVER (CONT’D) (to himself rapturously ala Homer Simpson) Mmmmmmmm . W ood chips. Mr. Beaver takes the box of wood shavings, and dumps this into a big TROUGH of STEAMING HOT WATER. Mr. BEAVER (CONT’D) Then I mix the wood chips with water... and cook it . He grabs a VERY LONG-HANDLED LADLE and starts stirring. Elinor watches with astonishment. eLINOR Cook it? Like... wood soup ? Mr. BEAVER (chuckles) Exactly! Until the wood gets all soft and mushy... then it’s called pulp. Mr. Beaver turns to a SECOND TROUGH, spoons up some of the mushy pulp, and pours it over a framed screen. Mr. BEAVER (AMUSED) (CONT’D) Now I pour the wood pulp over a screen... Water pours off into a basin, below. Mr. Beaver picks up the screen full of wood pulp and puts it down on a flat mat. Then he lays a big flat board over it. Mr. BEAVER (CONT’D) Squish out all the water... He presses on the board - then lifts it up to REVEAL a damp sheet of homemade paper. Mr. BEAVER (CONT’D) TA-DA! One piece of slightly wet handmade paper. Go ahead, peel it off! Elinor gingerly peels the fresh paper off the screen, and holds it up to show her friends. <SFX: KIDS AMAZED WALLA> ARI That’s so cool! MR. beaver I’ll hang it up to dry. Mr. Beaver hangs the wet sheet of paper from a low string, like wet clothing on a clothesline. Another place to consider "cabinet" (instead of cupboard) ELINOR I can’t believe I thought paper just came from the cupboard. Mr. BEAVER ( chuckle ) Just about everything we use is made somewhere else. And it’s all made out of something. OLIVE Like wood! line 65 and 66 - the kids explained when they arrived that they are needing paper and mr.beaver said perfect timing, as he was just about to make some. and here ari is asking again. suggest instead on line 65, mr.beaver says something to the fact that, they came for paper but as they can see, he just used his last piece of wood ARI C an you make us some paper, Mr. Beaver? Mr. Beaver puts his safety glasses back up on his forehead, looking thoughtful. (OS, the kids remove theirs too.) mr. BEAVER I’d love to! But that was my last piece of wood . I need to ask Farmer Bear to send over some more. Elinor gets an idea. ELINOR We know where Farmer Bear’s farm is. If you want, we can go and ask her right now? MR. BEAVER Well, that would be a big help! aRI We’re on it, Mr. Beaver. See you later! As Ari sets off, still waving good-bye, Mr. Beaver warns - Mr. BEAVER Watch out for the - <WET SMACK!> Ari has walked right into the sheet of wet paper he just hung up! Ari peels it off, cringing. Mr. bEAVER (CONT’D) - (chuckle) Wet paper. ARI (sheepish) Heh . Sorry. As Ari wipes his face and follows the girls OS, we DISSOLVE TO: 7. EXT. FARMER BEAR’S TREE FARM - MINUTES LATER FARMER BEAR uses a SHOVEL to dig a small hole, at the edge of a woodlot. She hums happily as she works. SFX: HAPPY HUMMING> Then she takes a perky TREE SEEDLING from her SUPPLY WAGON and plants it in the hole. As she tamps down the earth - elinor (os) Hi, Farmer Bear! The farmer looks up to see Elinor, Ari and Olive approach. FARMER BEAR (cheerful) Well, if it isn’t Elinor, Ari and Olive! What are you sprouts doing here? eLINOR Mr. Beaver sent us. See, we need more paper to finish our storybook - OLIVE - but Mr. Beaver can’t make the paper without wood. ARI (nodding) So we came to help you pick more wood! Farmer Bear raises an eyebrow, puzzled. FARMER BEAR Pick the wood? ARI Yeah! Doesn’t wood grow on trees? THOUGHT BUBBLE - Ari imagines SMALL WOOD PLANKS like the one Mr. Beaver had, dangling from tree limbs like fruit. The farmer plucks one off, and puts it into a bushel basket. (END THOUGHT BUBBLE) FARMER BEAR ( amused ) Mmm , n ot exactly, Ari. Wood doesn’t grow ON trees. Trees are MADE of wood. Elinor looks confused. This isn’t making sense yet. ELINOR Wait. What do you mean? FARMER BEAR Wood comes from the trunks and branches of big trees . We have to cut them down to get the wood. Elinor’s eyes widen. She looks to Elinor and Ari, who look astonished too. ELINOR You have to cut down trees to get wood? FARMER BEAR Yes! But don’t worry. F or every tree I cut down, I plant two new ones. That way , there wi ll be plenty of trees in the future. She gestures to the row of seedlings she’s just planted. FARMER BEAR (CONT’D) I guess you could say I’m planting some ‘wood’ right now. Elinor is thinking about what she just heard , while Olive and Ari try to get a handle on all of this. OLIVE Let me get this straight. To get paper, first you get wood from a tree - ARI - then the wood goes to a factory to be made into paper - Olive - then the paper goes to a store, where we buy it and take it home? Farmer Bear nods. FARMER BEAR That’s it! It sounds like you figured out the whole paper trail. <MUSIC UP> as Farmer Bear launches into a - SONG moment - "The Paper Trail" (As she sings, Farmer Bear digs a new hole. Elinor helpfully puts a seedling into it, and tenderly covers it with soil.) farmer bear (sings) (CONT’D) You’re on the trail of paper And this is what you found It all starts when a tiny tree Is planted in the ground The farmer pats the thick trunk of the nearest mature tree. FARMER BEAR (sings) (CONT’D) The tree grows tall and mighty Until we bring it down And then we make some nice wood and take it into town As the three kids listen, we DISSOLVE TO: FLASHBACK - INT. MR. BEAVER’S PAPER FACTORY QUICK CUTS to recap the papermaking process, as Mr. Beaver grinds up the log, ‘cooks’ the wood into pulp, and pours it out onto a screen. The wood goes to a factory To grind and mix and blend ANGLE ON Elinor, the moment she peels wet paper off a screen, and holds it up in wonder. Whoever knew that paper would Come out the other end? BACK TO SCENE - the kids now march behind Farmer Bear as she pulls her SUPPLY WAGON along as she sings: The paper travels to a store, From there we take it home. Oh, every piece of paper has A story of its own! (END SONG.) Farmer Bear has stopped her wagon near a MID-SIZED TREE. FARMER BEAR (CONT’D) Well, I guess I’d better get some wood for Mr. Beaver. She reaches for an axe in the wagon. ANGLE ON Elinor - her eyes grow wide, and she gestures for the Farmer to stop. ELINOR (blurts) Wait! Farmer Bear, I know that having paper is good, and that we have to cut trees to get it, but... Maybe we don’t need more paper yet. Ari and Olive look surprised. OLIVE What? But how else can we finish our story book? ELINOR I think I know another way... Off Olive and Ari’s puzzled looks, we DISSOLVE TO: 8 . EXT. ELINOR’S HOUSE WIDE ON the yard, with its <CHIRPING> birds, and shady tree. The crayons and recycling bin are right where they left them. CLOSER - Elinor leads Olive and Ari to the brimming recycling bin. She picks it up and puts it on top of the table. ELINOR Look, we still have LOTS of paper in the recycling bin. Ari takes out a sheet, and holds the already-used side towards Elinor. ARI But it’s used. ELINOR Only on one side. We can still draw on the other side ! She turns the paper around to show the fresh reverse side. ELINOR (CONT’D) Now that we know paper comes from trees... maybe we shouldn’t waste so much of it? CUT TO Ari and Olive. They look up at the big, friendly tree overhead - and share a smile. The current line doesn't seem to follow as well from the line above. Maybe Olive can just say something like "Good idea!" OLIVE We can do that. Elinor grins, and raids the recycling bin, handing out a few sheets to each of her friends. aRI So... where were we? eLINOR (grins) Protecting the forest. OLIVE (laughing) Oh yeah! They settle in at the table, flip their paper over to the blank side, and resume their brainstorming, crayons poised. ELINOR What if the bird takes one of her feathers, and sneaks up on the giant - ARI - Oh! And tickles the giant’s feet! The giant laughs so hard, that he doesn’t want to push down the trees anymore. He holds up a foot and tickles it with a crayon. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. SLOWLY, we start to TILT UP to the leafy tree canopy above... OLIVE (os) And they all live happily ever after - including the trees. <SFX: COOL, AWESOME WALLA>...as we FADE OUT.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP.126 “The Paper Trail” By: Karen Moonah Elinor's Question: Where does paper come from? Logline: When Elinor and her friends run out of drawing paper, they follow the 'paper trail' backwards, from the store, to the mill, to a forest - and learn where paper really comes from. ES 3a ) Ask questions about and discuss examples of how humans use Earth's resources (including soil and water) to meet their needs. ES 3c ) Participate in simple activities to care for the environment. (Elinor and her friends discover that we use trees to make paper, and help to plant trees to replace the ones they've cut down.) ND 4 ( RTL Crosscutting concept 'Flows, Cycles and Conservation') Appreciate the way that elements in the natural world change, interact and are re-used, and how we can organize our designed world to better fit and care for the environment. (Elinor and her friends come to understand the importance of replacing the trees we use, and of recycling paper, and protecting the forest) Mains - Elinor, Ari, Olive, Mr. Beaver, Farmer Bear Secondary: Ranger Rabbit, Mr. Hippo Locations: Elinor's House, General Store, Paper Workshop, Tree Farm Props: crayons, paper, recycling bin, papermaking equipment, wheelbarrow, axe, wagon, shovels, tree seedlings. OUTLINE: March 29, 2019 FIRST DRAFT: April 25, 2019 SECOND DRAFT: May 23, 2019 POLISH: June 13, 2019 Ari Ari / Olive / elinor Crowd elinor Elinor / Olive ELINOR / Olive / ari ELINOR / Olive / ARI / farmer bear / lambs Elinor / Olive / ari / others eLINOR / Olive /a FARMER BEAR G L Lamb 1, 2, 3 / beaver LamB 1, 2, 3 / BEAVER / farmer bear / Olive / ari / elinor Mrs. Mrs. Gorilla Ms. Mole Olive Olive / ARI Olive / elinor Olive. Other students ROLLIE ROLLIE’S SISTER Sr Students Tomato mascot VARIOUS STUDENTS All kids ELINOR/ari MRS. Gorilla/elinor/olive/ari Mz. Mole Ranger rabbit Mr. Hippo Mr. Beaver ARI / OLIVE / MR. BEAVER I Elinor / ari / olive B (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) (to herself) (muffled) (os) (thoughtful) (grins) (sings) (CALLS) (SHEEPISH) (cheery) INT EXT I/E 6. EXT 1 2 A SOUVENIR STAND DROP LADDER BEAVERS' PRACTICE AREA SCHOOLYARD CLASSROOM MRS. GORILLA'S JUICE CART INT. CLASSROOM ANIMAL TOWN EXT. ELINOR'S HOUSE INT. ELINOR'S HOUSE MR. HIPPO'S STORE MR. BEAVER'S WORKSHOP FARMER BEAR'S TREE FARM ELINOR'S HOUSE DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY MINUTES LATER ESTABLISHING KITCHEN CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. ‘fluff’ wipe to: Order Title Location ARI ARI