"Great draft and lots of fun in the snow! We are getting there in terms of making the learning sequence (as Sara puts it) clear for kids. A few overall notes: - I think the biggest story note is to think about what the question the kids want to answer and what is the answer, and then set that up as a mystery story. For example, if the question the kids are trying to answer is ""Why is the snow different today?"" And the answer is ""It's much colder today"" then we should set up the story so that a) that's the question the kids try to investigate, and b) at the climax ""aha"" moment, that's what the kids figure out: ""Today is much colder, that's why the snow is different!"" So give them clues that the temperature is different, but don't give them the information directly or have the kids point out the difference in temperature until the aha moment. Suggestions below. - There's a few things compounding the main mystery: 1) there is a lot of emphasis on it being warm at the beginning, will kids be confused that it can snow when it's warm? 2) the kids run into two problems right now: they run out of snow, and then the snow is too powdery. Let's make sure these two things don't get in the way of a clear throughline for the main mystery. - Check with Sara, but the conclusions from before were that we wanted to stay a bit away from the states of matter of water. Perhaps there is a way to get the kids to simply observe that warming the snow makes it slushier without having to go into the physics of it. Suggestions below. - Might help to have Mrs. Elephant confirm to the kids that their observation is correct and fill in the gaps that the kids can't figure out for themselves. See suggestions below. - Part of the fun is always to see how the kids find a solution to their problem, so suggest not having the kids step through the solution and making it more of a fun reveal. Suggestion below. Thanks! " 1. EXT. OLIVE’S FRONT YARD HILL AND FIELD -- DAY "Total Line Count on Script: 120 Elinor - 40 Olive - 33 Ari - 42 Ranger Rabbit - 2 Olive's Mom - 3" Nice first draft. START ON: The shining sun. PAN DOWN TO: It’s a sunny, mild winter day and a bunch of kids (the winter team as necessary - SALLY, MARY, LIZZIE, ROLLIE, BODIE) are in the field having a blast building with the sticky snow! They’re making all kinds of snow things – snow forts, snow slides, and lots and lots of snow-balls. <DESIGN NOTE: this is the same location as “The Science of Staying Warm”> I think the sequence of learning is much stronger in this first draft. Elinor's question maybe more along the lines of How come snow sticks sometimes and not others? or What helps snow stick to itself so you can build with it? ELINOR, ARI and OLIVE arrive wearing their light jackets, and no hats. Wonder if it will confuse kids to have it be THAT warm. Some kids who are not familiar with snow or cold weather might not know it can be warm and still snowy outside. Maybe the episode should lean more in the "cold vs. colder" rather than "warm vs. cold" direction. Elinor where are the kids arriving from since the location of where everyone is playing is the hill right in front of Olive's house. perhaps they come out of her house and start talking about how nice it is out. Olive can say inline 2 “I know. Even i can play outside with just a spring jacket” What a beautiful day! It’s so warm it doesn’t even feel like winter. Olive I know. I’m just wearing my spring jacket! Ari’s attention is caught by the activity in the nearby field. ANGLE ON: The kids playing in the snow. Ari Whoaaa! Look at all the snow-building! OLIVE Snow forts, snow slides, snow balls... ArI And SNOW-BATS!!! Whooo-hooo!! Ari flops on his backs making one of his famous snow-bats. Elinor And everything’s made out of snow. That’s soo cool! ARI Actually snow is kinda COLD when you lie in it. Brrrrr. Ari hops up. Meanwhile, Olive picks up some snow with her trunk. Olive I know why the snow building’s going so well. She forms a little snow-ball. I think this is OK with the right visuals. I worry that sticky means something different to many preschoolers. The snow really is sticking to itself...it's not sticky to anything. OlIVE (CONT’D) The snow is extra-sticky today! She hands the small snowball to Elinor. Elinor Wow, you’re right, Olive, it really sticks together…watch this! Elinor demo’s her snow-ball rolling technique. ElINOR (CONT’D) See how the snowball picks up more snow when you roll it around! ARI (in awe) Whoa. The snowball is making itself. feels like we're repeating that the snow is sticky here when it's unnecessary. OlIVE Because the snow is so sticky. Look at this. Olive takes a plastic bucket from a small selection of sand toys in a bin beside her house. She fills it with snow and turns it over - a perfect cylinder. The location of the bucket in a bin on the side of the house - their house it very wide and they are at the front - it’ll take some time for her to walk to the side, grab a bucket and come back to demonstrate. Can she say something to the fact that she was playing in the snow earlier which is why she already knows it’s sticky and what they can build with it. So e can have a bucket in the now close by them. Her dialogue can support that she was playing earlier ARI A snow-castle! OliVE It’s like we’re at the snow-beach. ARI Neat! You can really make things out of sticky snowhoooooaa ! At that moment Elinor accidentally rolls her snowball right into Ari. whoops' doesnt sound like a natural reaction from a little kid. suggest we remove and just have him excentuate 'snow' as you have it in line 16. And her may not land back in the same bat-angel he made earlier depending on his location at this time since they've been moving around bit. ArI (CONT’D) Whoops! He does a little flip, lands perfectly in his snow bat, then bounces to his feet. ArI (CONT’D) Ta-dah! I meant to do that. OLIVE (giggling) Smooth move Ari. He does a little bow. ARI Why, thank you. ELINOR Sorry Ari, my snowball got away from me. It’s getting so BIG. ANGLE ON: the snowball has rolled a little way off, maybe down a small hill. ARI That IS a big snowball! OLIVE What are you going to do with it, Elinor? Add a thought bubble to show what Elinor is envisioning? It's the main goal of the episode, but the audience might not have any idea what a snow friend is since we don't show it. Elinor Hmmm, I’m not sure. <GASP!> I have an idea - let’s make a SNOW FRIEND! Ari Yes! The biggest snow friend EVER!! QUICK SNOW-FRIEND MAKING MONTAGE Elinor, Ari and Olive roll their first snowball around as much as they can, until it’s basically too big to move. (NOTE: As the kids roll the snow-ball around they are picking up ALL the snow and leaving grassy patches). They <SX: EFFORTS GRUNT> as they struggle to move it one last time, and collapse around it <SFX: GIGGLING>. CROSSFADE TO: Olive, Ari and Elinor are working on their second snowball. It’s about 1/2 the size of the first one, but still big. They roll it to the bigger ball and roll it up the side and set it in place on top. NOTE: we don’t see the full thing yet. END MONTAGE. Olive Elinor and Ari are admiring their work, eyes wide. <SFX: WHOOOA WALLA> ANGLE ON: Their creation, two snowballs stacked on top of the other, quite a bit bigger than they are. Olive Now that’s the biggest Snow Friend I’ve ever seen! a bit odd having him say 'Here’s the GIANT snow giant’ (giant twice) ArI That’s not JUST a Snow Friend, it’s a snow GIANT!! (movie music) Duh--duh-DUH!!!!! (big voice) Here’s the GIANT snow giant stomping around the WORLD! (Ari stomps around) Boom-boom-BOOM! The problem of "not enough snow" seems to be a little bit of a misdirection. E.g. kids at home will think that's the problem, but then that problem gets solved on it's own, and then they have ANOTHER problem (snow is different). Consider putting this more in the background or deleting altogether. Perhaps the kids can just be called in and that's why they have to stop for the day. OlIVE Uh, Ari... ARI What? ElINOR (giggling) Our Snow Giant can’t stomp anywhere yet. OlIVE (laughing) He doesn’t have a head. I think it’ll feel more natural for him to stop during the word ‘up' as he looks towards what he is doing. instead of 'wha-oh' ARI I am also a little distracted by the stomping. Feels very not earth friendly. Oh, right! One giant snow head coming up...wha-oh. Ari looks around, puzzled. WIDEN TO REVEAL: there is mostly grass and not much snow. ElINOR We used up all the snow! Ari Now what are we going to do? Olive We can’t have a Snow Giant without a head - how would he smile? reads a bit odd - they are talking about not having enough snow for a head 'how would he smile?' - but then responds 'or stomp!' but stomping has nothing to do with not having a head ARI (excited) And STOMP!! We need MORE SNOW! And we need it NOW! (regular voice) So, where are we gonna get it? OlIVE Well, it is winter. ElINOR So we just have to wait for it to start snowing. ARI Got it! They wait for a beat, Ari anxiously watching the blue sky. ARI (CONT’D) No snow yet. Another beat. ArI (CONT’D) Still no snow. (to the sky) SEND SOME SNOW PLEASE!!! Suddenly Olive Mom calls from OS. OliVE’s Mom (O.S.) Oooolive! Time to come in for dinner! due to locatioon design - she wouldnt need to say this line - they'd be able to see her mom from where they are playing - maybe instead 'ok mom, be right there!' OLIVE Oh, that’s my mom. ELINOR I’d better go home too. ArI Wait, what? We can’t leave! Our snow giant has no head! suggest 'we can finish it tomorrow' - otherwise she sounds a bit upset with him, especially in saying his name OLIVE We’ll finish it tomorrow Ari. ELINOR If there’s more snow. 2. INT. Elinor’s room - night Elinor is lying in bed looking out the window. ElINOR Oh please start snowing. Please, please, please... Her eyes close. She starts to <SFX: GENTLY SNOOORE> ANGLE ON: The window, it starts to snow. 3. INT. ELINOR’S ROOM – THE NEXT MORNING Elinor bounds out of bed and hops to the window. ElINOR YES!! SNOW! Now we can finish our Snow Giant. 4. INT. Elinor’s KITCHEN – MORNING Elinor is wolfing down her breakfast with her Mom. RANGER RABBIT What’s the rush, Elinor? ElINOR I have to get to Olive’s house. We’re making a SNOW GIANT! i feel she should respond to her mom instead of just hoping o.s - 'ok mom!" Ranger Rabbit Can the mom say something about it being cold enough to snow last night...so we don't put out the idea it snowed because Elinor wished for it. A snow giant! Sounds impressive. Well, you’d better wear your hat. It’s quite a bit colder out there today than it was yesterday. Elinor hops OS. 5. EXT. OLIVE’S HOUSE - DAY Elinor (wearing her winter outfit) rushes to Olive’s front yard where she meets up with Ari and Olive (also in winter gear) running from different directions. should they say hi or good morning since its a new day? OliVE Maybe add "Look at the fluffy snow"- and show how the kids move through the snow easily to begin to show the properties of cold snow verses warmer snow, Whoaaa! Look at all the snow!!! ArI We can make our snow giant THREE heads. a bit odd that elinor asks Olive to make a snowball - instead of doing it heself ELINOR We only need one head to start, Ari. Olive, can you make a snowball please? Maybe Olive says ‘and I’ll start with the snowball” OLIVE With pleasure. Olive picks up some snow in her trunk, but immediately runs into problems. The snow just falls apart and flutters to the ground. This is the part where the kids run into the main mystery of the episode. We should really show them being stumped, and maybe add a little bit where they try to figure out (unsuccessfully) or think of possible reasons why it's different. Also, maybe add one more example of how the snow is different and why that prevents them from their goal (e.g. maybe they try piling a big armful of snow on top of their snow friend, but it all crumbles down, or maybe they try to use the buckets but the snow doesn't stay and crumbles down) OLIVE (CONT’D) Oh! Better try that again. She scoops up more snow - the same thing happens, the snow-ball crumbles and falls to the ground. OLIVE (CONT’D) That’s weird. This NEW snow won’t stick together - it just falls apart. ARI What’s going on – why is the snow so different from yesterday? ELINOR Hmmm. I’m not sure. She picks up a mitt-full of snow. ECU: Of the powdery pile of snow in Elinor’s mitt. ELINOR (CONT’D) It LOOKS pretty much the same. the powdering Ari in the face just by closing her fist with the powdered snow seems to be a bit much visually- OLIVE Yes, but try to make a ball. Elinor squeezes the snow in her hands - it pops out the sides, powdering Ari in the face. ELINOR Whoops! Sorry, Ari! Ari (laughing) That’s okay Elinor. He wipes his face off. ARI (CONT’D) Brrrr, that’s really cold. Again, we want to lay the clues for the kids to later figure out that what's different about the two days is that it's colder, but not have the kids already know at a high level that it's colder today. ELINOR Yeah, my Mum said it’s much colder outside today than it was yesterday. The kids are starting to shiver. <SFX: chattering> OLIVE (chattering) Anybody feel like going in for some hot chocolate? ELINOR/aRi (chattering) Yes, please! 6. INT. OLIVE’S HOUSE – DAY Olive’s Mom has bundled the kids in blankets on the couch, and they each hold a mug of hot chocolate. Maybe instead of the boots (which seems to get us into the arena of states of matter), you can just have the kids bring in a bucket of powdery snow (perhaps to keep examining it or something), and then after the hot chocolate they observe that it became mushier and stickier. That way the sequence is simpler: They have a problem, they make an observation (the snow in the bucket got slushier), they figure out why (the snow melted because it's warmer inside the house) - and they piece together/realize/connect that yesterday was warmer which is why they had their problem, and they figure out a solution. Elinor Oooh, this is cozy. OlIVE Thanks, Mom! i dont think she needs to explain whats she's doing 'put another log on the fire' - we will see her doing it before moving the boots over to get warm OLIVE’S mOM You’re welcome kids. It IS really cold out there. Let me put another log on the fire. Olive’s Mom puts a log on the fire and closes the door to the wood stove. "Now I’ll put your boots here so they warm up. You kids keep away from the fire - it’s hot.''- maybe she mentions there being snow on the boots so Elinor's line 79 feels more plausable OLIVE’S MOM (CONT’D) Agreed...seems like a good place to intro the word melt. The warmth from the fire will melt the snow off the boots. Now I’ll put your boots here so they warm up. You kids keep away from the fire - it’s hot. Olive’s Mom puts the snowy boots on a mat a SAFE DISTANCE from the wood stove, then she goes off. ElINOR I wonder why that snow outside didn’t stick together? Ari It sure stuck yesterday. ElinoR That’s true. Hmmmm. What’s the difference between today and yesterday? Olive Well one thing is for sure, it’s a lot colder today. I had to wear my heavy snow clothes outside. Elinor I wonder if that’s the difference. It was warmer yesterday. ArI Too bad we don’t have any snow now - it’s sure toasty in here. ELINOR Wait a minute Ari, we do! We have snow on our boots! Elinor hops off the couch and heads over to the boot tray (NOT near the fire). ELINOR (CONT’D) Oh, look! There’s snow AND water in the boot tray - that’s SO INTERESTING. Ari Water? I don’t remember any water on my boots. Only snow. ELINOR You’re right Ari. We need more observations. Elinor picks up a good-sized clump of snow and holds it in her hand. SCIENCE ECU: The snow now a has a little blue water on the edges. The words "a bit" at the end of Elinors statement feel too old. Maybe "it's starting to melt." Elinor (CONT’D) This snow feels different from the snow outside - it’s a little wet. And look, it’s melting a bit. OlIVE Maybe that’s because its close to the fire. Snow melts when it gets warm, right? ArI So that’s where the water’s coming from. The melting snow. again, a bit odd she asks Olive to do it, especiallly when she has it in her hand to begin with Elinor Hmmmm. Lets see if this snow is any stickier. Olive? Elinor hands the snow to Olive who uses her trunk to make a snowball. ARI It IS! OLIVE Yep, one perfect Snowball! ELINOR (realizing) That’s IT! If we’re gonna finish our Snow Giant, we need warmer snow! I like the thought bubble ARI So what do we do? Build our Snow Giant in the house? THOUGHT BUBBLE shows the Show Giant in the house, maybe posed playing a Board Game with the kids (I was going to say watching TV but I realized, this is Ep. 122 and we’ve never shown a TV. That’ sooo iiinteresting!) OLIVE Maybe, but it’s pretty big. I think this is really important point to make and like that it has a thought bubble too. ElINOR Besides, it’s really warm in here compared to outside. Our Snow Giant would melt. THOUGHT BUBBLE: Shows the Snow Giant melting, then the bubble POPS! ArI That’s no good. Maybe it would be more fun if the solution is a fun reveal, rather than them explaining it beforehand. ELINOR Hmmmmm. <GASP> I’ve got it!! Instead of bringing the Snow Giant inside, we’ll just bring some snow inside and warm it up. OlIVE Right. Then the snow will melt just a little. ELINOR And get sticky. Like the snow in the boot-tray! OLIVE Then we can bring it outside where it’s still cold. ArI And finish our snow giant! BUCKET BRIGADE MONTAGE: A quick montage of Elinor, Ari and Olive forming a bucket brigade of play pails to warm up the snow. Elinor and Ari are outside, while Olive remains at the door. Ari scoops up snow in a bucket, hands it to Elinor who runs to Olive, Olive takes the snow inside and puts it near (but not too near) the fire. Wonder if the chorus of the song can be more in line with the general lesson: snow changes depending how cold it is. When it's cold it's powdery, when it warms it's slushier ELINOR/ARi/olive Elinor: Yesterday was warm, And the snow could really stick Olive: Today it is colder and It doesn’t stick a bit. Ari: We’ll bring the snow inside, Where it’s nice and toasty, then - Elinor: We’ll wait for it to melt a bit, then take it out again ANGLE ON: The snow melting in the buckets. WIDEN TO REVEAL: Olive is watching, she grabs the two buckets and runs to the door and opens it. Ari’s there with two MORE buckets of snow, they exchange buckets, and Olive closes the door and runs back to the fire. ALL: Warm up the snow! Warm up the snow! Make the snow sticky And we’re good to go! Warm up the snow! Warm up the snow! We can build anything When we warm up the snow. OUTSIDE: Ari and Elinor are standing beside a good-sized pile of melty snow (maybe its a little bluer). Olive runs out in full winter gear, she scoops up a snowball - it works! Elinor takes it, puts it down and starts rolling, as the snowball gets bigger Ari and Olive join in. Elinor: Our Snow Friend isn’t finished We have to make his head! Olive: So if we can’t use cold, cold snow, We’ll warm it up instead. Ari: When snow gets wet and sticky We can make a good snowball, Elinor: Then put it on our Snow Friend Ari flutters up with the head and balances it in place. Wow, he’s really tall! ALL: Warm up the snow! Warm up the snow! Make the snow sticky And we’re good to go! Warm up the snow! Warm up the snow! We can build anything When we warm up the snow END MONTAGE: EXT. OlIVE'S FRONT YARD – DAY The kids are admiring their creation (Note: He doesn’t have a face yet). Elinor/ari/OLIVE Woooooow! ElinoR Now that’s what I call a GIANT snow giant. ArI He’s so big he could crush cars and houses and mountains!! (he starts stomping around) BOOOM! BOOM!!! BOOM!! BOOM! Elinor and Olive look at each other and smile. ELINOR Uh, Ari, our Snow Giant would never do that. ARI Why not? OlIVE He’s friendly! She stretches up her trunk and draws eyes and a big smile. Ari shrugs. ArI Oh! O.k. That works too. Ari flutters up and puts the bucket on the Snow Friend’s head. ArI (CONT’D) How’s it going, giant friendly Snow Friend. ANGLE ON: He perches on it’s shoulder and give the Snow Friend a hug. ARI (CONT’D) Awww. I think he really likes me. Elinor and Olive <SFX: LAUGH> IRIS OUT, THE END

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 122 Snow Friend By Katherine Sandford Elinor’s Question: How can I make the snow stickier? Logline: Elinor and her friends want to build “snow-friends” but the snow isn’t sticky enough. ES1 . Understand that the Earth is made up of a variety of natural materials. a. Explore and describe the characteristics of earth materials such as sand, rocks, soil, water, and air b. Explore water and other Earth materials during play using simple tools. (Elinor and her friends explore the characteristics of snow and.) SEP6 . Constructing explanations (science) and Designing Solutions (engineering) a. Use background knowledge experiences, and data to construct reasonable explanations and theories of natural phenomena (science) b. Look for and describe patterns and relationships in natural phenomena (science) c. Use and apply productive science discourse to support an explanation d. Use evidence to support a theory or solution to a problem (engineering) (Elinor observes that when the weather is colder the snow doesn't stick together and she and her friends figure out that to make the snow stickier, they should warm it up.) LINE COUNT: 113 MAINS: Elinor, Ari, Olive SECONDARY: Elinor's Mom, Olive's Mom. LOCATIONS: Olives's house, interior and exterior, Elinor's room, Elinor Kitchen. PROPS: Plastic buckets, boot tray, wood stove - snow! OUTLINE - March 2, 2019 FIRST DRAFT - March 25, 2019 - Elinor ARI Olive OliVE’s Mom Ranger Rabbit ELINOR/ar ART OLIVE’s ELINOR/ARi/olive ELINOR/aRi L Rollie (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E ELINOR WONDERS WHY ] PARK ACROSS FROM OLIVE'S -- DAY ELINOR'S HOUSE – LATE AFTERNOON ELINOR'S ROOM – THE NEXT MORNING KITCHEN – MORNING ELINOR'S HOUSE – MORNING PARK – DAY OLIVE'S HOUSE – DAY PARK -- DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. [J&D: END MONTAGE: CROSSFADE TO: