"Nice, I think the overall structure and focus are working a lot better, thanks for all the tweaks. The main note is that the dialogue feels a little adult at times, please do a pass in polish to find those kid voices and find the characters and keep it fun. A few specific notes below. Thanks!" 1. EXT. SCHOOLYARD - DAY Looks good to me! It’s a beautiful sunny day. The kids are at school, playing outside during recess. The camera pans across kids playing various games and stops at ELINOR and ARI, who are having a thoughtful discussion. Hoping that this helps reduce the arguments from kids around bedtime! Cute story. A few notes from us below. ELINOR Hmm. What game should we play today? ARI We could play catch with a ball. ELINOR Nah . We did that yesterday. ARI Right. Oh, I know! We could have a snowball fight. ELINOR Ari, it’s spring. There’s no snow. ARI Maybe we’ll get lucky and there’ll be a spring snowstorm! Ari looks up at the sky, as if waiting impatiently. Fun ARI (CONT’D) I’m WAITING. Elinor <SFX: GIGGLE S >. Then a pair of butterflies fly past them, one chasing the other. ARI (CONT’D) Look at those butterflies go. They look like they’re chasing each other. ELINOR Hmm. Are you thinking what I’m thinking? ELINOR/ARI Let’s play tag! ARI You know who loves tag? Olive. Maybe she wants to play too. Where is she? ELINOR She said she was going to read under that big tree. ARI Let’s go! Ari and Elinor find Olive sitting under a big tree. She’s reading a huge book, and she looks very absorbed in it. ELINOR Hi, Olive. Olive doesn’t look up, but she replies with enthusiasm. She’s just very excited about her book. OLIVE Hi, Elinor . Hi Ari. ARI What are you reading? Now Olive looks up, beaming. OLIVE I ’m reading this really fun book. It’s about a princess who goes into a magical forest to rescue a prince. What’s inside that forest? Dun dun dunnn ... it’s a mystery! ARI Whoa. That does sound really good. ELINOR W e’re going to play tag. Want to play with us? Olive looks thoughtful. OLIVE Hmm. That does sound like fun. But... I really want to finish this book. I wish I could read and play tag at the same time. But it would be too easy to tag me if I kept looking down at my book. (Olive looks down at her book. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE> ) Okay, I’ll play tag. I’m IT! Ari and Olive <SFX: LAUGH> or <SFX: SCREAM PLAYFULLY> as Olive sets down her book and runs after them. 2. INT. OLIVE’s HOUSE - BEDROOM - NIGHT Olive is in her PJs , sitting up in bed, avidly reading her book by the light of a bedside lamp. There’s a window showing the moon and some stars. MS. ELEPHANT pokes her head into the bedroom. Ms ELEPHANT All right, my little bookworm- it’s time to sleep. OLIVE But I want to know how the story ends! The princess is almost at the magical forest. I wonder what happens next. MS ELEPHANT Sweetheart, your book will still be there in the morning. But now it’s time to sleep . OLIVE But why? MS ELEPHANT Because it’s nighttime, and night is when you sleep . OLIVE [ pleading ] Can’t I just read for five more minutes? Ms. Elephant looks thoughtfully at her watch, or at a clock. MS ELEPHANT Hmm. It’s not that late. Okay, you can read for just five more minutes. OLIVE Yay! MS ELEPHANT But after five minutes, it’s time to turn off your light and sleep! OLIVE Yes, mom. Ms. Elephant walks up, leans down, and gives Olive a kiss on the forehead. Nice. MS ELEPHANT I love that I have a daughter who’s so excited about reading. I hope that your dreams are full of interesting stories, too. OLIVE Thanks, mom. Night night. Probably don't need the second sentence here, can delete it. MS ELEPHANT Goodnight , sweetie. Remember, just five more minutes. Ms. Elephant leaves the room. Olive buries her head in her book again. OLIVE [ to herself] Right. Just five more minutes. We see Olive reading, and get a sense of time passing, eg . a MONTAGE - dissolve she is in 3 different poses - each one with her body showing fatigue, eyelids getting lower INTERCUT WITH: ANGLE ON: the moon setting outside a window, maybe with the sky lightening a little. BACK ON: Olive looking bleary-eyed. OLIVE (CONT’D) Oops. I think that was a little more than five minutes. She yawns, flops over, and passes out on her book. 3. EXT. TOWN - MORNING The next morning, Elinor is walking to pick up Olive and Ari on the way to school. She’s wearing her backpack. She walks past a tree where her chickadee friend has perched. ELINOR Good morning, Chicky ! I’m off to school. Hope you have a great chicka-day . Chicky <SFX: CHIRPS>. Elinor walks a little, then meets up with Ari outside his house. ELINOR (CONT’D) Morning, Ari! How are you today? ARI I’m great! I slept so well. I’m so excited to play tag again today. I’m going to run really fast. They begin walking. ELINOR Me too! Let’s go get Olive. Hmm. I wonder if she finished her book. She’s a fast reader, but that was a GIGANTIC book. Elinor and Ari approach Olive’s house. Olive has her satchel and she’s standing on the sidewalk, looking exhausted and spacey. ELINOR (CONT’D) Hi Olive! Olive <SFX: YAWNS>. OLIVE ( sleepy ) Hi Nelinor . I mean, hi Relinor . I mean... hi friend. ELINOR Olive, are you ok ? ELINOR (CONT’D) ( sleepy ) Yeah. YAWN. ARI Did you finish your book? OLIVE ( sleepy ) No, but I got a lot closer. My mom let me read for five extra minutes, but the book was so good that I lost track of time. ELINOR So you didn’t sleep? Make it "…stay up again tonight." OLIVE (sleepy) I only slept a little. But I got to read more of my book. I’m gonna ask my mom if I can stay up all night. Then I can finish this (YAWN) story. ARI Huh. I thought everyone just sort of HAS to sleep. If I didn’t sleep, I’d have a lot more time to play. ELINOR I’ve never really thought about it before. Why DO we need to sleep? What’s it good for? ARI Good question. It’s a sleepy mystery. ELINOR I know! Let’s see if we can find any animals sleeping on the way to school. Maybe that will help us figure out why we sleep. ARI Yeah! OLIVE ( sleepy ) YeaaaYAWN . I mean, yeah. The kids start walking. They reach a tree that has a great horned owl perched on a branch close to the trunk. ELINOR There’s an owl! ARI Ooh . OWL take a closer look. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. SCIENCE CU: the owl. It’s puffed up, eyes closed, asleep. ARI (O.S.) (CONT’D) Its eyes are closed and it’s not moving. I think it’s sleeping. BACK ON: The kids. I think we can extend this owl moment a little bit, maybe a line or two longer, just to drive home that hint that sleep is connected to being active later. ELINOR My mom taught me that owls sleep during the day , when we’re awake. I’ve seen them flying around at night! OLIVE ( sleepy ) I’ll get out my note pad and keep track of what we’ve seen. Olive takes out her notebook and draws a sleeping owl. CU: Olive’s drawing. OLIVE (O.S.) (CONT’D) ( sleepy ) There. A sleeping owl. BACK ON: The kids. ELINOR Okay. Let’s get some MORE OBSERVATIONS. They keep walking and come across a lizard sleeping on a rock. OLIVE ( sleepy ) I see a liz-YAWN . ARI What’s a lizYAWN ? Olive points. OLIVE ( sleepy ) A liz-YAWN . A... you know, one of THOSE things. SCIENCE CU: The sleeping lizard. Let's not have Elinor be the one that wakes up the owl. Have her look closer, see that it does seem to be sleep, she steps back, then the lizard wakes up and takes off. ELINOR (O.S.) Oh, a lizard! Its eyes are closed and it’s not moving. It seems to be sleeping. I’m going to get a closer look. Elinor leans into frame. The lizard’s eyes pop open. It scurries away with a ton of energy. BACK ON: The kids. ELINOR (CONT’D) Oops, sorry, lizard! ARI That lizard ran off with a LOT of energy. I bet it’s great at tag. OLIVE ( sleepy ) Right. We saw a sleeping lizard. CU: Olive’s notebook. She draws a sleeping lizard. BACK ON: The kids. They keep walking and reach a pond (or river - whatever makes sense for the geography of the place). They walk up to the edge and look down into the water. Change "anybody" to "sleeping animals in the water" ELINOR I wonder if there’s anybody in the water. CUT TO: A carp floating in a patch of reeds down at the bottom. ELINOR (O.S.) (CONT’D) I see a fish . It’s not moving. Is it sleeping ? SCIENCE CU: The carp’s head. It’s motionless, but its eyes are open (since fish don’t have eyelids). Lines 71-72. This exchange feels a little bit jumbled. Pace it out better? This fish moment should lead them wonder how fish can sleep if they can't close their eyes. That's the mini wonder/mystery that we leave open and resolve at the end. Have them look at her drawings to visually represent the mystery. ARI (O.S.) Hmm. It ’s not moving. It sure looks like it’s resting, but its eyes are open. It’s a mystery. A... fish-stery . BACK ON: The kids , who <SFX: GIGGLE>. ELINOR I don’t think fish have eyelids. How can they sleep if they don’t have eyelids? I always close my eyes when I sleep . Otherwise, I’d get PRETTY bored looking at my ceiling all night. Olive is drawing in her notebook. OLIVE ( sleepy ) Right. The carp fish is not sleeping because its eyes are open. CU: Olive’s notebook. Under the drawing of the owl, she’s drawn a toothy-looking shark. ELINOR (O.S.) Wait, Olive, did you draw a shark instead of a carp ? OLIVE (O.S.) Oops! The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. Olive erases it and draws a carp. BACK ON: The kids, who start walking again. BACK ON: The kids, who keep walking, approaching the school. Olive is triumphant. OLIVE (CONT’D) ( sleepy ) If fish don’t sleep, then maybe I don’t have to, either. That’s good to know. Okay, let’s go to the pool. ELINOR You mean the school? OLIVE Oops. That’s what I meant. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. Then Elinor looks thoughtful. Not sure we need the second sentence. ELINOR Hmm. I think there’s more to this sleep story. 4. EXT. SCHOOLYARD - DAY It’s recess, and we once again pan across the kids playing in the schoolyard. Olive is sitting under the same tree, reading her book. She’s squinting at the book, looking like she’s having trouble reading it. Ari and Elinor walk up to her. ELINOR Hey, Olive. OLIVE (sleepy) YAWN. I mean, hi. ARI Did you get to the part of the book where the princess saves the prince? OLIVE ( sleepy ) No. I’m having trouble reading. The words are really blurry on the page. I keep losing my place. ARI Hmm. Do you want to come play tag instead? OLIVE ( sleepy ) Sure. YAWN. Maybe running around will help wake me up. ELINOR Yay! Do you want to be It? OLIVE You bet I do . Olive puts her book down and runs after her friends. They <SFX: GIGGLE>. But as Olive chases them, she begins to slow down. OLIVE (CONT’D) ( sleepy ) Whew. I’m out of breath already. ELINOR Olive, are you okay? ARI Yeah, what’s up, Olive? OLIVE ( sleepy ) I don’t know. Why can’t I run as fast as I usually can? ELINOR Hmm. Let’s think. You can’t run as fast as usual, and it’s hard to read a book, and you keep getting confused. OLIVE ( sleepy ) Yup . That’s all true. YAWN. ARI Olive, I think your yawns are getting louder. If you yawn any louder, your trunk will fall off! ELINOR Wait. That yawn gives me an idea. I usually yawn when I’m sleepy. Ari, you slept a lot last night, right? ARI I sure did! ELINOR I did too! And we both have lots of energy. But Olive, you didn’t sleep very much and now you feel tired. Give the last two sentences to Elinor. OLIVE (sleepy) Oh. You’re right. Hey, maybe that’s what sleeping is good for. If we don’t sleep, we feel tired. Give this line to Ari. ELINOR Yeah, and we can’t do the things we usually do. OLIVE That makes sense. YAWN. MZ. MOLE walks up to the kids. She looks concerned. MZ MOLE Olive, are you okay? That was the loudest yawn I’ve ever heard. ELINOR Mz. Mole, Olive stayed up really late to read her book. She didn’t get a lot of sleep. ARI Yeah, and now she’s really tired. She can’t read her book well or play tag well. Consult with Sara if talking about "energy" is something kids will understand? Wonder if "so we don't feel tired" is better than "It gives us energy"? ELINOR We think maybe that’s why we need to sleep! It gives us energy. If we don’t sleep, it’s harder to do the things we need to do. Maybe instead of "gets a break" use "rest"? Add "When you wake up, you don't feel tired and can do all the things you like to do." at the end. MZ MOLE You’re right . Sleep is really important, especially when you’re a growing kid! When you sleep, your body gets a break and your energy comes back. When you wake up, you can do all the things you like to do. Don't need the "but" OLIVE But Mz. Mole, do ALL animals need to sleep? MZ MOLE Most of them do, but they don’t all rest in the same way. THOUGHT BUBBLE: a sleeping lizard. Can we use another animal here? The focus right now is to convey that not all animals rest in the same way. So this first example should be an animal that rests in an unusual (but cool?) way. MZ MOLE (CONT’D) For instance, a lizard might lie on a rock or a branch to rest. Then this line can just be "Whoa, cool" (or something) ELINOR We saw a sleeping lizard this morning! And then this line can give a second example of an animal that doesn't rest in the same way we do. This leads Elinor to extrapolate and wonder if maybe the fish was resting. MZ MOLE Did you see any other sleeping animals? THOUGHT BUBBLE over Elinor’s head: an owl sleeping on a branch. Lines 111-114: This leads to a cute pun, but I don't think we need these three lines. The idea of schedules sort of confounds the issue right now? ELINOR Yes. We saw an owl sleeping on a branch in a tree. It sleeps in the night and flies during the day! MZ MOLE A lot of animals sleep at certain times. They stick to a pattern. ELINOR Olive, if you stay up all night like an owl, then you’ll have to sleep during the day, and you won’t be able to play with us. ARI Yeah, you’ll have to play tag with a bunch of owls! Actually, that sounds like a real hoot. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. THOUGHT BUBBLE over Elinor: carp fish sleeping in the pond/creek. ELINOR Mz. Mole, we saw a fish earlier that looked like it was resting, but its eyes were open. Was it just sleeping in a different way? Maybe to cover our bases she should say, "…they can rest or sleep with…" MZ MOLE Yes! Fish don’t have eyelids, but they can sleep with their eyes open. The kids <SFX: WHOA>. OLIVE (sleepy) Hmm. Sleep is pretty interesting. And I guess it’s pretty important, too. Ari, Elinor, and Mz. Mole sing a sweet lullaby-style song about their discovery while we see a montage sleeping animals. ELINOR/ARI/MZ MOLE ALL: Why should you rest When you’re all tired out? When the night winds blow And the owls fly about? ELINOR: Your body needs rest So you can play. You sleep all night To have fun all day. ALL: Why should you rest When you’re all tired out? When the night winds blow And the owls fly about? ARI: When you sleep, You get more energy . Your body heals up, To feel as good as can be . ALL: That’s why you rest When you’re all tired out, When the night winds blow And the owls fly about. As the song ends, Mz. Mole, Elinor, and Ari realize that Olive has fallen asleep. ELINOR ( whispering ) Oh, looks like Olive finally fell asleep. Feel like we need a better kicker to end the episode. Maybe something related to her story book? E.g. I guess Olive decided to finish her story in her dreams… or something like that. Try to find a funny angle. ARI (whispering) I guess she decided that sleep sounded so interesting she couldn’t WAIT to try it out herself. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE> as we IRIS OUT: On Olive sweet sleeping face (maybe she snores through her trunk) <SFX: SNOOOORE> No more notes after this line. Remember to do a pass to find those kid voices. Thanks for the great work! THE END.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY 171: REST IS BEST Written by Rosemary Mosco Elinor’s Question: Why do I need to rest? Logline: When Olive decides she’d rather stay up late than sleep, her friends help to convince her that most animals need rest. Curriculum Goals: LS2c . Compare how the external body parts of animals and plants are the same and/or different. [The kids learn that some animals don't have eyelids, and that different animals rest in different ways.] LS4a . Observe the life cycle of familiar plants and animals. [The kids notice that some animals sleep at night and are active during the day, and others sleep during the day and are active at night.] SEP3b . Compare and contrast objects and events by describing similarities and differences in detail. [The kids observe and compare different resting animals.] Main Characters: Elinor, Olive, Ari, Mz. Mole Secondary Characters: Ms. Elephant Props: Butterflies, Olive's huge storybook, backpacks/satchels, Chicky the chickadee, Olive's notebook, great-horned owl, carp, butterfly, stool, small book about sleep, anole , cuckoo bee. Locations: Schoolyard, Olive's house (bedroom), sidewalk, river/pond. FIRST DRAFT: 17-Apr-20 SECOND DRAFT: 01-May-20 ARI ELINOR ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI OLIVE MS ELEPHANT MZ MOLE ELINOR/ARI ELINOR/ARI/MZ MOLE (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 2 1 3 4 5 6 THE END. INT CLASSROOM -- DAY SUNLIT FOREST CLEARING -- CONTINUOUS PARK -- DAY EXT -- PARK EXT -- LAKE WATERS -- CONTINUOUS EXT -- LAKE SHORE -- CONTINUOUS EXT -- LAKE WATERS -- A MINUTE LATER EXT. SIDEWALK NEAR OLIVE'S HOUSE DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. Order Title Location ELINOR ELINOR