"Overall: solid first draft. A few overall ideas: - Let's make sure to emphasize ""water"" with the 3Ss. We suggest below a way to do this as a running gag - We made a few tweaks to the structure to clarify a little bit: o The kids want to make a garden for Hazel o They arrive to discovery there's no yard: but that's OK, you just need the 3Ss (+water) and they already have seeds o They look around for spots with soil/sun/water and realize there's no soil in the apt (focus on soil here, we do sun later) o They look for soil, find it from Ms Llama, who also gives them a box to hold it [ reverse the current order ] o Now they just need sun: they figure out to use the balcony o they plant it (Olive says: ""and water"") o time shift to grown strawberry payoff - Character notes: let's keep Hazel positive, and replace Mr Lion's rug dusting with painting to bolster his character identity" 1. EXT. ELINOR’S YARD -– DAY Nice first draft One day, Elinor, Olive and Ari are playing catch with their friend Hazel, a very outgoing lioness, in Elinor’s backyard. This is the first time our audience will meet Hazel - do we want more of an introduction - doesnt have to be so on the nose - could open with Elinor ari and Olive playing in the yard and mrs.rabbit opens the back door "elinor, look who came to play!' They're excited to see her. She asks what they're playing and they tell her catch ' go stand over there and I'll throw it to you' - the rest can play out as is Elinor Here you go, Hazel. As Hazel runs to catch the ball, she stops when she see Elinor’s balance-bike in the yard. suggest 'wow - cool bike! can i ride it?' Hazel I got it! I got-- (then) Wow! A bike. Can I ride it? The balance bike belongs to olive - we established in 'turtle crossing' - olive can offer to show her Elinor Sure. Let me help you get-- As Elinor goes to help Hazel get on the bike, the little lioness once again walks away, now onto something else. Hazel Ooh , what is that awesome smell? Elinor, Olive and Ari look at each other, unsure what to do. OLIVE Boy, she sure has a lot on her mind. Elinor, Olive and Ari, follow Hazel as her nose guides her through Elinor’s yard and over to Elinor’s garden. Elinor Whatcha looking for, Hazel? Hazel I’m following a delicious, fruity smell that’s coming from... Right... (sniffs the air) Here! Hazel stops at Elinor’s garden and leans in for a full whiff of the strawberries. Hazel (CONT’D) Yep! This is what I was smelling. Do we need an adult to supervise berry picking in the garden? Might at least need a line where Elinor says her parents told her she can pick these strawberries. Olive Fresh strawberries smell sooo good! - her characteristics so far is that she gets distracted easily and does what she wishes. Are we playing this as its due to her being younger? Elinor They sure do. Hazel, would you like to pick-- Hazel? As Elinor looks around, Hazel has already picked a strawberry and is eating it, with red stains around her lips. Hazel They taste good too! ElINOR (laughing) Hazel, you have to wash the strawberries before you eat them. HAZEL Ooops . Sorry. (hopeful) But if we wash them first, then can we eat more...? Focus on flavor rather than size, since supermarket strawberries are huge but bland. Elinor Sure. Let’s pick some strawberries. As the kids go to pick, we push in close on a strawberry. Dissolve to: 2. EXT. elinor’s yard -- later We are still close on a strawberry and, as we pull out, we see the kids now sitting next to the garden with a basket full of strawberries, enjoying the fruits of their labor. we should have the strawberries now in a big bowl and not the same basket they put them in when picking - otherwise it'll look like they havent washed them - the new bowl will help clarify. Ari asking how did she grow them so big seems a bit old - maybe instead he just comments how they are the best and biggest strawberries ever. Line 16 she then asks - do you want to know the secret? - and continues to explain ari These are the best strawberries ever! How did you grow them so big, Elinor? ELINOR That’s easy. When I planted my strawberries, I just made sure I had the three S’s that every garden needs. add a reference to "brown soil" since you rely on it later hazel Three S’s ? As Elinor explains, she grabs a packet of seeds, a handful of soil and motions up to the sun to demonstrate. plenty of really nice Soil' sounds a bit old - maybe 'lots of really nice soil' ELINOR (leaning on the S sound) Yep. Lots of Seeds to plant - that the first S, plenty of really nice Soil, so there’s always room for the plants, that’s the second S, and loads of Sun to help the plants grow. Hazel Oh, three S’s , I get it! Although my favorite is the 4th S. ELINOR 4th S? Hazel takes another bite of a strawberry and gets up, doing a happy little dance. Let's emphasize the water more. "That reminds me: there is a fourth thing you need: water!" Then have Olive repeat it "Three S's … and water!" That can be a recurring thing, having Elinor say the 3Ss and Olive say "and water" Suggest 'yes, SSSSsstrawberries' really drag the 's' HAZEL (mouth full) Yep, strawberries! Nice moment. Elinor they should giggle after Olives line Well, I’d better water my garden so we can keep my strawberries healthy. Is hazel dancing as she eats a strawberry ? The action is unclear as she then has a line - is she saying this as she continues to dance? And ari is dancing too? Ari Good idea. While you do that, I’m gonna do... whatever Hazel’s doing. As Elinor takes a moment to water her garden, the others join Hazel in her dance. Hazel I wish I could grow yummy strawberries like these at my house too! Yes! I can't WAIT to grow my own strawberries Elinor sounds a bit old 'In fact, here. I'll get you started...' You can, Hazel. In fact, here. I’ll get you started with the very first S... a packet of strawberry seeds. Elinor hands Hazel the packet of strawberry seeds she had earlier. Hazel is very excited about this and now spins around in joy! As soon as you plant those seeds in your garden at home. Hazel Yes! I can’t believe I’ll be able to grow my very own strawberries! Uhh… good point. I don't have a garden at home! Olive Wow, so you have a garden at home too? Hazel stops in mid-spin as more juice runs down her chin. Hazel Uhh ... good point. Not really. Elinor then has a THOUGHT BUBBLE shows Elinor helping Hazel plant a garden. Elinor That’s no problem. We can help you start a garden of your own. As long as your parents are okay with it. Mr Lion gets excited about everything. That's why his art class is so fun. HAZEL (mouth full) Are you kidding? My dad loves strawberries. He’s gonna be so excited! Make the kids quest a bit clearer: "Let's head over to your house and start your strawberry garden!" then have H ask if they can also bring some strawberries for her dad. I dont think this will be clear to our audience - can we simplify so they understand her dad is Mr.lion? Perhaps save it for when we see Mr.lion in the next seq - then there will be a visual connection. ari Mr. Lion? His art class is the best! Elinor should say something about asking the parents if its ok to go... Elinor Let’s head over to your house and bring your Dad some strawberries! The kids run off with SFX: EXCITED WALLA. 3. EXT. HAZEL’S APARTMENT -- DAY The kids arrive at the apartment in the main area of town. HAZEL Here we are, home sweet home. The kids are a bit confused as they look at the storefront. over top of -> above Ari You live here? But this is a store? HAZEL Yep. We live over top of the store. My dad was very excited about it, of course. He likes paintig on the sunny balcony. Olive Ooh , you live in an apartment. That is sooo cool! Feels like the rug dusting is distracting; why not have him painting on the balcony instead? Reinforces who he is. HAZEL Yeah, we like it. As the kids come around to the side of the building, they see Hazel’s father, Mr. Lion, on the balcony on top of a store, dusting some rugs. Let's do "Hazel-basil" which is goofy and more neutral, instead of "Hazel-bug" which might not be interpreted positively by bug-haters. ELINOR Hi, Mr. Lion. As Mr. Lion beats the rugs, dust flies off of them, causing him to <COUGH>. Mr. Lion Oh, hey there, kids! Don’t mind me, just dusting some rugs on my balcony. (coughing) It’s a dirty job, but some lion’s gotta do it. Come on up, Hazel-bug. Ooh, I love strawberries. Red is a bold color, but these berries pull it off. Hazel Okay, Dad. Elinor is gonna help me build a garden to grow yummy strawberries. Mr. Lion Ooh , I can’t wait to eat ‘em. But Hazel, where are we going tomake a garden if you don't have a yard? Hazel See? I told ya he would love it. (then, giddy) I love being right! As the kids come around to the back of Hazel’s apartment, Olive notices that there’s no yard behind the building. this is a bit tricky - nature surrounds the outskirts of town - even being at the back of the apartement, there is lots of grass and trees - certainly areas to plant a garden. what reason would they not think to build one there? I understand the point is to show we can build a garden anywhere, even on a balcony - so perhaps we avoid having them run to the backyard where it causes this issue - they can run inside and head up - then they can realize she doesnt have a backyard outside her home - and thats becomes the issue Olive But Hazel, how are you gonna have a garden if you don’t have a backyard? HaZEL Ohhh...good point. Hazel seems puzzled at first, but Ari reassures her. After this, Olive says: "And water!" Ari Don’t worry Hazel. I’m sure... we can figure something out, easy-peasy . As the kids enter the building, Elinor is confident. Again, i feel elinor is sounding a bit old as she explains a few things Elinor For sure. After all, you can have a garden anywhere as long as you have seeds, soil and sun. 4. INT. HAZEL’S APARTMENT -- DAY The kids enjoy some more strawberries with Mr. Lion. "Hazel takes off" where to? Aren't they inside her apt? MR. LION Oh, Hazel-bug, you were right! These strawberries are just plain tickling my tastebuds ! I can’t wait ‘till you can plant some of your own. back to my painting reads 'hazel takes off' - remove as shes still there when elinor starts to walk around the apartement discussing where to plant the garden HAZEL Me either. Let’s do it! Hazel takes off, leaving everyone behind as Mr. Lion grabs another strawberry. … place for Hazel's garden. MR. LION Well, I’d better get back to my rugs, but thanks for bringing some color to my day, kids. Have fun. As Mr. Lion gets up, Elinor leads the kids around the apartment. 50-59: Let's use this section to reinforce what they need. Give l50 to Olive, and then have Elinor repeat the 3Ss, and Olive chime in with "and water". Then Ari start thinking outloud about where in the apartment has the 3Ss. Hazel can make some suggestions (sink, bathtub) and they should evaluate each for whether it has soil/sun/water. They notice that none of these spots have soil, so they decide they need to go into town to get some soil. Elinor Okay, so we need to figure out the best place for a garden inside the apartment. Hazel How about if we put it in our kitchen sink? There’s plenty of room for a garden in there. Elinor and Olive look at the sink and see dishes in it. olive Yeah, there’s plenty of room, but how would you wash your dishes? Hazel Oh... good point. Hazel then takes off before the kids can even say anything. ari How about... Hazel? Hazel (O.S.) I got it! This way! As the kids run across the room, Hazel points into her bathroom (which we don’t see). HAZEL (CONT’D) Here is an even bigger place to put a garden: our bath tub. Hazel is proud of this suggestion, but Olive and Elinor aren’t so sure. Elinor But there’s no sunshine in your bathroom, so your garden would be missing one of the three S’s . Hazel (disappointed) Ooh , that’s no good. Without sun, my strawberries won’t grow. There’s nothing in my apartment big enough to fit a garden. Olive You know, my Mom has lots of plants inside the house, and her plants are always in a pot or a box, so maybe that could work for Hazel’s garden? I already have the first S, seeds, so the second S is some Soil! ELINOR That’s a great idea, Olive! Why don’t we go into town and find the things we need for the garden. The wagon is upstairs in the apartment? Maybe have it be outside and Mr Lion reminds them to bring it as they walk past the balcony. some rich, healthy soil!' sounds too old hazel Starting with the second “S”, some rich, healthy soil! why does he have the wagon already? they dont tell him until after that they are going to look for soil. delay until they mention it and he can suiggest taking the wagon ARI Now this is my kinda mission! Looking for dirt! Mr. Lion then pops in, towing a red wagon. Mr. LION Hey, kids. You heading out? HAZEL Yep! We’re looking for soil. MR. LION Then you’d better take the wagon. Good luck! Hazel drags the wagon with her as the kids head out. 5. EXT. ANIMAL TOWN main street –- DAY With the wagon in tow, the kids walk around Animal Town. Suddenly, Ari sees an empty field nearby. Ari Look! There’s plenty of dirt here! Ari and Hazel run over and try to dig up the dirt with their hands, but the red dirt is really hard to dig up. Elinor Hmm... this soil is probably a little too hard for plants to grow in. Olive What we need is good, healthy brown soil like Elinor has in her garden. 66-82: Since they are out looking for soil, I think it makes more sense to find the soil first, and then the box to bring it in. Please swap that order, sorry! HAZEL Gotcha , brown soil. This way! Hazel once again takes off and the others follow closely behind, struggling to keep up with the energetic lioness. HAZEL (CONT’D) Hey, look! A box! Will this work for my garden? 6. Ext. Mz. Llama’s yard -- continuous Suddenly, Hazel stops next to a wooden square box in front of Mz. Llama’s place. The others nod in agreement. olive It sure will. This box is perfect for an apartment garden. Ari sees Mz. Llama planting a new tree behind her store. ari Mz. Llama, is this your wooden box? MZ. LLAMA It is, but if you kids want it, that’s fine by me. I was planning to recycle it anyway. Before the others can even react, Hazel has already picked up the box over her head and is loading it into the wagon. Hazel Great, let’s load it up. As Hazel loads up the box, Elinor also notices that Mz. Llama has dug a big hole in the ground to plant the tree and she has a pile of good, brown soil, so she approaches Mz. Llama. Elinor That’s a beautiful tree, Mz. Llama. MZ. LLAMA Thanks, Elinor. I just dug this hole to plant it in. Ari Well... what are you gonna do with all that brown soil? MZ. LLAMA I’m not sure, but if you kids need it, you can have that too. ELINOR Thanks, Mz. Llama. I’ll just get this-- Once again, before Elinor can even react, Hazel comes running into the frame towing the red wagon, which is loaded up with a box full of soil. HaZEL Way ahead of you. Let’s go build this garden. ARI Wow, she is fast. Thanks, Mz. Llama. The others follow behind Hazel as Mz. Llama waves to them. Hmmm -- did they carry it up the stairs? We can cheat this I guess. MZ. LLAMA Have fun, kids. 7. INT. HAZEL’S APARTMENT -- DAY The kids arrive back inside Hazel’s apartment with their box full of soil. Elinor Okay, so we have our first two S’s , seeds and soil. All that’s left is the final “S”... Sun. HAZEL So let’s find a nice, sunny spot in the apartment. Go! As Hazel runs off, we see a quick MONTAGE set to fun, bouncy music where the kids try out various spots and find reasons why each spot won’t work. First up, the kitchen table. "No sun" feels too strong. Maybe "Not enough sun" Olive How will you eat? Next, under the kitchen table. Ari No sun. Next, Hazel places the garden next to the couch. or suggest Hazel turns on a flashlight instead Elinor Still no sun. Hazel places the garden in the dark closet and we see nothing. A beat later, Elinor pulls on a chord, which puts some light in the closet, where she and Hazel stand. Elinor (CONT’D) REALLY no sun. Finally, Hazel puts the garden on top of her toy box. ari How will you get to your toys? HazEL Ohh . Good point. As the music fades, the kids are stumped. OLIVE I don’t know, Elinor. I’m not so sure there really is a good spot for this garden in Hazel’s apartment. Elinor sees disappointed Hazel flashes her puppy dog eyes. Elinor There has to be a perfect, sunny spot somewhere. We just haven’t found it yet. Right on cue, Mr. Lion comes back in from the balcony. MR. LION Whew. It’s so hot out on the balcony with all that sun shining on you. ELINOR That’s it! The balcony gets lot of sun. Olive Mr. Lion, would it be okay to go out and see if the balcony is a good place for Hazel’s garden? MR. LION Sure! Way to think outside the box, or should I say, outside the apartment. Mr. Lion laughs at his Dad joke, but he’s the only one. Mr. LION (CONT’D) Well, you kids should never go out on the balcony by yourselves, but since this is for such a good cause, I suppose I could head on out again with you. Hazel heads out first, of course! Hazel Yay! Let’s go! 8. EXT. BALCONY -- DAY The kids go out on the balcony and quickly discover that Elinor was right! hAZEL (CONT’D) Elinor, you were right. This is the perfect place for my garden. Mr. LION Agreed! And might I say, a garden out here will really spruce the place up. As it finally looks like this garden of her own is about to become reality, Hazel dances for joy. HAZEL Thank you soooo much everybody, for all of your help with this garden! ELINOR You’re welcome, Hazel, but we’re not done yet. We still have to make the garden. reads 'wooden barrel' - but its a wooden box HAZEL That shouldn’t be too hard because now we have all three S’s: Seeds, soil and sun. SONG MONTAGE: As the music rises, Elinor and her friends sing a song about the three S’s . As they sing their song, the kids dance and help Hazel set up an amazing new garden right in the wooden barrel on the balcony and plant the seeds! The rhythm of Hazel's chorus doesn't feel like it matches with the others. ELINOR, OLIVE, ARI, HAZEL ELINOR: You can build a garden anywhere A balcony, a yard or here or there As long as you have these three special things You can have all the joy that a garden brings. Olive pulls out the packet of seeds and places them in little holes in the garden. OLIVE: The first thing to get are your favorite seeds To grow fruits or veggies or whatever you need. Ari then carefully covers the seeds with soil ARI: The next thing is soil straight from the ground You can dig it up or buy it, it’s all around. Hazel points up to the sun above, which shines down on the garden. HAZEL: Once your seeds are planted, you’ll need sunlight To make your plants grow big and bright. With the garden now planted, we pull out and watch the sun rise and set, and rise over the balcony. Needs to be clearer that time has passed here; use some dialogue. (CONT’D) ELINOR: You can build a garden anywhere A balcony, a yard or here or there, As long as you have those three, special things-- Olive then comes in with a watering can, interrupting Elinor. OLIVE: (spoken) And water. Can’t forget water. Hazel then jumps into frame, finishing the song. Hazel-basil HAZEL You’ll have all the joy that a garden brings! As the songs ends, we: DISSOLVE TO: 9. EXT. BALCONY –- DAY (LATER) Mr. Lion and the other kids watch as Hazel waters her garden, which now has its very own strawberries growing! MR. LION Oh, Hazel-bug, I am so proud of you for taking such great care of your garden. Elinor Me too. Your strawberries look great. ari And it looks like they’re just about ready to be picked. HAZEL Way of ahead of you, Ari. Hazel then pulls out a bowl of strawberries. Hazel (CONT’D) Have a fresh, yummy strawberry. (then, to Elinor) And don’t worry, I already washed them. Hazel WINKS at Elinor, who smiles, as everyone grabs a strawberry. ARI Don’t mind if I do! Each of the kids, and Mr. Lion, take a bite and it’s clear they’re very tasty. Olive Mmm , these are great, Hazel. on your own balcony garden! Elinor Yeah. I couldn’t have done a better job myself. HAZEL Well, there’s nothing sweeter than strawberries you’ve grown yourself... on your balcony. As the kids <LAUGH> and eat more berries, we: FADE OUT.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EWW169: A Garden for All! By Michael Foulke Elinor’s Question: Where can Elinor’s friend Hazel the lioness grow a garden of her own in her apartment? Logline: Elinor and her friends help Hazel figure out the best way to start a garden and grow her very own strawberries in her apartment. Curriculum Goals: LS5 . Begin to understand that animals and plants depend on other living things and nonliving things in the environment to meet some of their needs: b. Identify the habitats of familiar animals and plants in the environment c. Recognize that each kind of living things has a habitat that has resources to meet its unique needs (Elinor and Hazel learn they need soil, sun and space to grow strawberries) ET1 . Begin to understand that asking questions, making observations, and gathering information are helpful in thinking about problems, and that it is important to clearly understand the problem before beginning to design a solution (Elinor and Hazel learn what they need to have before they can design a rooftop garden to grow strawberries – soil, sun and space) SEP4 . Analyzing and interpreting data a. Collect, describe, and record observations in greater detail and in various ways b. Use the 5 senses and simple tools to gather and record data c. Record observations to describe patterns and/or relationships in the natural and designed world(s) in order to answer scientific questions and solve problems. (Elinor and her friends observe what plants need to grow, then try to replicate the conditions in Hazel's apartment). MAINS: Elinor, Ari, Olive SECONDARY: Hazel, Mr. Lion, Mrs. Llama LOCATIONS: Elinor's Yard, Hazel's Apartment, Animal Town Main Street, Mrs. Llama's Yard PROPS: Seeds, Barrel, Soil, Strawberries, Rug Outline: March 25, 2020 First Draft: April 9, 2020 Olive Elinor Ari Mrs. Hippo ELINORE Mrs. Llama Air Mr. Raccoon Mz. Llama Hazel Olive/ari Mr. Lion Ari ELINOR/olive/ari (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 3 4 7 10 EXT. ANIMAL TOWN PARK -- DAY ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY EXT. ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY ELINOR'S YARD INT. HAZEL'S APARTMENT -- DAY INT. HAZEL'S KITCHEN DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY MAGIC HOUR DAWN DUSK SAME SAME TIME CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. SMASH CUT TO: CUT TO BLACK. TIME CUT: Order Page Intro Location Time Color Scene #