"Cute first draft, and funly paced. Top notes are: - The dialogue feels a little stiff in a lot of places. On the next pass, try to focus on making it more kid natural, and try to make our main characters' personalities come through a little more. - I feel like our kids fade a little bit into the background in the first half of the episode. Think about how to put them more in front, and how to emphasize more their motivation and how they are affected by the problem of the episode. - I am not feeling 100% the Martha Cow character. It's not quite clear what her relationship is to the kids (there doesn't seem to be any relationship), and as a result it's almost like either her or the kids are replaceable? Think about the role that the adult character plays and how they relate to the kids. Is the adult there for themselves or for the kids? What's their motivation for doing this, and what are the kids' motivation, and why are they doing this together? She comes off as a little bit of a flaky stoner (?) character, so it feels a little strange that the kids are hanging out with her and walking around visiting houses and at night with her. - Here's a suggestion: what if we replace Martha with Sr. Tapir in this episode? Some advantages: a) It's a clearer dynamic: Sr. Tapir just loves music and loves to spread music and is organizing the kids to do the same. b) you could add an extra veneer to the story that is actually useful: Sr. Tapir can teach a few words in spanish, like ""verano"" and ""polilla."" c) There's an interesting opportunity here for the kids to shine by having them solve a mystery the adult can't, so that Sr. Tapir learns something from them too. Some specific notes below. Thanks!" 1. EXT. MRs. Dromedary’s HOUSE (FRONT DOOR) - LATE AFTERNOOn "cute episode General note - the script is sitting long - we need to cut about 1 - 1 1/2 pages Note: We have 2 songs here - we can only have 1 per episode ." ANGLE ON Elinor’s finger pressing a doorbell. <SFX: DING DONG> I like the curriculum to focus on patterns....patterns of day time/ night time could be highlighted more and pattern on light on moths come light iff moths go. I think the 70's cow character might be slightly overdone (young kids don't really know about the 70s language- so for little people who are learning language for the first time it can be a little confusing). but if others feel that brings fun to the story I'm OK with it. A front door swings open to reveal MRS. DROMEDARY, who looks delightfully surprised. MARTHA COW, ELINOR, OLIVE and ARI stand on the front porch as a choir, each with a giant smile and wearing a sun hat and sunglasses. Martha Cow blows a note on a chromatic pitch pipe (like a small harmonica). MARTHA And a one-y, and a two-y, and a one two three ... Line Count - 110 Ari - 20 Elinor - 32 Olive - 18 Martha - 23 Mr. Dog - 11 Mr. Bat - 4 Mrs. Dromedary - 2 Since this is paired with ""A Garden For All"" , we are going to have to get Mr. Dogs lines OR another Principle down to 5 lines. SUNNY SUMMER SONG ELINOR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song KIDS: A sunny summer song, A summer sing-along MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! ELINOR: We jump really high. Elinor jumps high. ARI: We flap and fly. Ari flutters up in the air for a moment. OLIVE: We try to touch the sky Olive raises her trunk and arms up to the sky. MARTHA: And now you know why Martha spreads her arms wide. Then everyone spreads their arms wide like shining suns. ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! The choir holds their last note while Mrs. Dromedary <SFX: CLAPS> in celebration. Martha Cow and the kids take a bow. This exchange doesn't come off as real, more like an info dump. Start with Mrs D: "Wow, thank you for that wonderful song. What's the occasion?" then kids can reply with the adult present giving some backup. perhaps she calls the kids something different than 'cool' since she just called Mrs.Dromedary 'coool camel' - lots of cools Martha Thanks Mrs. Dromedary. You’re one cooool camel. I’m having so much fun singin’ with these cool kids on our Super Groovy Summer Solstice Sing-along. Mrs. DROMEDARY Summer solstice sing-along? Feel like the concept of Solstice might be too complex to throw in here. Try just making it that they are out singing to celebrate summer. It's almost just an excuse for them to sing, which is their real motivation. "after line 5 - have they moved away from the door and now in the porched area? it reads 'and the carolers are on the front porch of Mrs. Dromedary’s house.' they were on the porch when they rang the doorbell and sang - i would assume they would still be in the same location " Elinor Today is the summer solstice. ANGLE ON: A wide view shows the sun shining low in the sky and the carolers are on the front porch of Mrs. Dromedary’s house. """It’s the day of the year with the most daylight."" reads a bit clunky - maybe 'It’s the one day of the year with the most daylight.""?" Elinor (CONT’D) It’s the day of the year with the most daylight. Kids should be calling adults Mr. or Mz. should they not call her Mrs.Cow since she's an adult? Olive So we’re going around the neighborhood with Martha, singing a sunny summer song. This is a bit labored to set up the fun l9 joke. Maybe more natural as: How wonderful. I hope other people are home to enjoy your songs." MRS. DROMEDARY How wonderful. Has everyone else been home to hear your summer song? This is funny, but probably too complex for our audience. Suggest replacing it with another joke, or explain it more, and then lean into the awkwardness of explaining it. I'm not sure I get it? Ari Well, “summer” home. “Summer” not. ( beat ). Get it? Because it’s summer? The kids all share a <SFX: GIGGLE>. ELINOR To the next house! The trio and Martha hop OS. Crossfade to: 2. EXT. PORCH song MONTAGE (MRS. BEAVER’S FRONT DOOR, MR. RACCOON’s bakery, MZ . MOLE’s Front Door, The Ranger Station) -- MOMENTS LATER Note: This is a quick montage so that we hear the choir singing the summer song once through, while we see a montage of the choir visiting various neighbors. The sky is gradually getting darker as they go from house to house. ANGLE ON: a front door opening to reveal MRS. BEAVER who suddenly grins widely. A wide shot shows Mrs. Beaver enjoying the carolers’ music. cute montage ElinoR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song KIDS: A sunny summer song, A summer sing-along ANGLE ON: the bakery’s front door opening to reveal MR. RACCOON who grins widely. A wide shot shows the carolers on the sidewalk in front of Mr. Raccoon’s bakery as he enjoys the song. A couple Animal Town residents, MR. BUFFALO and MR. ANTELOPE, stand on the sidewalk holding their recently purchased baked goods and smile as they listen. MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! ANGLE ON: a front door in the ground, which opens to reveal MZ . MOLE. She pops her head up out of the ground to see Elinor’s feet as they jump high and back down. Mz . Mole watches the choir as they sing. ELINOR: We jump really high. ARI: We flap and fly. OLIVE: We try to touch the sky ANGLE ON: the door of the ranger station swinging open to reveal DEPUTY JACK MOUSE and MS GEE RAFFE (her body and tall neck but her head is OS). Jack Mouse looks grumpy but then (after a beat) gives a very tiny but still noticeable smile. MARTHA: And now you know why ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! END MONTAGE Crossfade to: 3. EXT. PATH - EVENING Martha Cow walks with Elinor, Olive and Ari along a path back to Ari’s house. Lines 12-17: Use these lines to explain a little more what motivates the characters and what the adult's relationship is with them. E.g. Have the kids comment how much fun that was, and have adult (Sr. Tapir?) encourage them and tell them they did great. ElinoR ( looking up) The sky is getting darker. The sun is now very low in the sky, almost about to sink below the horizon. Martha ( arms in the air, swaying and dancing a bit, carefree) I guess that’s the end of a super groovy, super sunny summer day. Ari pauses in his tracks. What makes him think of Mr Dog here? Add a "Wait" at the beginning, then also mention somewhere in the next few lines that Mr. Dog loves music, we HAVE to sing for him. Ari We never sang for Mr. Dog. We can sing to Mr. dog because he is a neighbor we don't want too leave out...not because he os cool. I get the joke and think kids might like it. I just don't want to give off the idea that only the 'cool' kids deserve singing too. Martha Oh you’re right. And Mr. Dog is one cooool cat. Ari Huh? He’s a dog. Ha! Martha It’s just a, a phrase that means he’s coool . Anyway, we have time for one more summer song. Let’s sing for Mr. Dog! Martha Cow and the kids hop OS. 4. EXT. MR. DOG’S HOUSE - NIGHT ANGLE ON: The moon shining in the sky. Suddenly Mr. Dog’s mouth pops into the frame to start howling. could trim some of this back and forth with Mr.dog see examples Mr. Dog Arwwwwoooooooooooo ! MR. DOG sits in a chair on his front porch, next to a vase of flowers, howling up at the moon. Elinor leads her friends up to the porch. They are still wearing their sun hats and sunglasses, even though Mr. Dog’s front porch is dark. Mr. DOG (CONT’D) Arw Arwwwoooohhhhooooo ! Mr. Dog turns to his friends. MR. DOG (CONT’D) Well, hello there. Elinor What are you doing, Mr. Dog? could remove ' How are you all doing this fine evening?' Mr. Dog On these beautiful summer nights, I just love howling at the moon. ( beat ) How are you all doing this fine evening? Also a tricky pun. Explain it and lean into the awkwardness. Ari Don’t you mean... “Howl” are you doing this evening? ( beat ) pulls a flower from the vase. i believe this has come up ibefore - we avoid pulling out living plants Mr. Dog Ahh good one Ari. Mr. Dog pulls a flower from the vase and tucks it behind his ear. remove 'We’re great' Olive We’re great. We’re here to sing you a summer song. Mr. DOG A song - now that sounds lovely. Let me turn on some light so I can see your faces. Mr. Dog flicks a light switch, and the porch light turns on (which is directly over the carolers), illuminating the carolers grinning faces. Mr. Dog sits back to enjoy the music. MarTHA This is our Super Groovy Summer Solstice Sing-along. And you are our last stop. Ready kids? Suddenly a single moth flutters in and lands on Martha’s right ear. ElinoR Martha? There’s a, a MOTH on your ear. MarthA ( intrigued ) Really? Cooool . ( she lifts her hoof to toward her left ear) Where is it? Here? Elinor No, other side. Martha Over here? She lifts her right hoof toward her right ear, but the moth flutters up toward her hat instead. OLIVE Now it’s on your hat. ( two more moths flutter in above Martha’s hat). Uh, now there are three moths on your hat. Martha (Carefree) Groovy. Let’s sing. Martha Cow blows a note into her pitch pipe. Martha (CONT’D) And a one-y, and a two-y, and a one two thr thu thu thwppp ...” ( several new moths fly right by her mouth) Sorry, let’s try that again. Martha takes a deep breath and leans toward her pitch pipe, but just then a whole bunch of moths fly around her face and she pauses to blow them away from her mouth. Elinor, Olive and Ari <SFX: LAUGH> as bunches of moths flutter around their faces too. <SFX: MOTH WINGS FLUTTERING> Wow, that's a lot of moths! ElINOR There are a lot of moths here now. A group of moths fly near the porch light and around Mr. Dog too. "perhaps she says 'Thats Okay here we go...' so shes responding to elinors line in 35 then cut 'And a one-y, and a two-y, and a one two three. (deep breath) We’re here to... '" Martha Okay here we go. (She blows a note into her pitch pipe.) And a one-y, and a two-y, and a one two three. ( deep breath) We’re here to... Elinor turns her head and flaps her ears to try and duck away from the moths flying around her face. She cuts Martha off. ELINOR (laughing) Wait! OLIVE ( laughing while yelling) Uhhaaaaack ! Martha looks at Olive, who uses her trunk to brush away some moths from her face. We see a wide shot of the porch with dozens and dozens of moths around the choir and Mr. Dog, just fluttering around, but the densest bunch of moths are near the porch light. The kids and Martha gently try to brush the moths away from their faces. Not sure we should describe moths as groovy since they are what we are investigating...unless Mrs.Cow calls themGroovey and Elinor says something like "your right Mrs.Cow moths are really interesting!" to help clarify. Martha Moths are groovy, but they sure make it hard to sing. This line feels a little awkward/odd. Find a cleaner way for them to leave? OLIVE ( still laughing and brushing moths away) Let’s come back, uh, another (gently swatting) time. Olive, Ari and Elinor hurry off the porch. Mr Dog needs a line here somewhere to mark their departure great saying from mrs.cow! Martha Uuuh okay, Tootamoooo Mr. Dog! Martha follows after the kids. 5. EXT. PATH – NIGHT The kids and Martha walk back to Ari’s house. They are still wearing their hats but have taken off their sunglasses. The moon is bright enough to light up their path. "Try to involve the adult here (Sr. Tapir?) a little more here. It's a little odd that they disappear. Keep the kids in the forefront leading the discussion, but have the adult engage. E.g. Sr. Tapir is out of his expertise, so he's following the kids' lead. Add a little motivation here. Maybe the adult can say, ""That's too bad we didn't get to sing for Mr. Dog."" then a kid can say, ""Yeah, we sang for everyone else in the neighborhood.""" Elinor Why are there so many moths around Mr. Dog’s porch? Ari I dunno . Olive Dun, dun, dunnnn , sounds like a mystery, (beat) a moth mystery. Add a line before this one to set it up: we didn't see any moths at any of the other houses. Maybe a "we need more observations" here ELINOR Let’s figure it out! ( thinking ) What happened on Mr. Dog’s porch that was different than the other porches where we sang? thought bubble visual style - we've established that we trk-up above the characters (who are then no longer in frame) for the thought bubbles - we can have both examples within the same bubble - then we trk back down to the characters Ari ( thinking ) I know. It was night time when we were at Mr. Dog’s porch but it was daytime at the other places. In a THOUGHT BUBBLE, we see the kids and Martha standing on Mr. Dog’s porch (at night) over Ari’s left shoulder, and we see the kids and Martha standing on Mrs. Beaver’s porch (during the day) over his right shoulder. The bubble pops. Have one of the kids come up with the idea first before this line: "Maybe moths only come out at night?" Then Olive can confirm without the bubble: "I think you're right. I remember reading that in my Nature Book. Most moths only come out at night." we've never treated her book this way - having a thought bubble show her looking at the book - she can either take out her nature book to read this or she can just share it but saying "i read once that......" Olive ( excited ) I have a book all about insects that start with the letter M, like moths, mites and millipedes. In a THOUGHT BUBBLE, we see Olive’s insect book over her shoulder. She opens it, and we see a diagram of moths by the moon, and butterflies by the sun . It's a bit much to get into the differences between butterflies and moths this late in the story. I think we can delete this line. Olive (CONT’D) Most moths come out at night, while most butterflies come out in the daytime. The bubble pops. ELINOR That’s SO interesting. watching or observing...let's establish they want to observe moths to find out about why they are getting inthe way of their singing Martha Coool . So night time is the right time for watching moths. ElINOR Let’s watch and wait and see if moths show up. The trio and Martha all stand still and look around. Ari flutters up into the sky and looks around from up high. One moth flutters past his face in the moonlight and keeps going. Second sentence is odd/too adult? Try "Something must have made a lot of them come out in Mr. Dog's house." Second sentence is odd/too adult? Try "Something must have made a lot of them come out in Mr. Dog's house." Ari There’s one! ( he looks around, but sees no others) but that’s it. ". So that’s not the whole story" sounds too old <- agree. this could be a "we need even more observations" instead Elinor Huh, it’s night time, but there aren’t a lot of moths here. So that’s not the whole story. Ari lands next to his friends. 54-59 is much clearer Maybe...would be better than "i know" for science reasons and past scripts Ari I know. Mr. Dog was howling on his porch. Elinor Right. Maybe moths like howling. Martha Groovy idea. The kids and Martha all look up at the moon and howl. Martha throws her hooves toward the sky and sways while she howls. love EliNOR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA “ Arwwwwoooooooooooo ! Arw Arwwwoooohhhhooooo !” haha Haha! Mr. Dog (O.S.) ( after a beat, from far away) Nice howling! The kids and Martha stand still and look around intently. No moths show up. No moths. That's not it either. Hmmm Elinor No moths. That’s not it. Hmmm . 6. EXT. ARI’S HOUSE (FRONT PORCH)-- MOMENTS LATER The kids and Martha hop up to Ari’s front door. The porch light is off. I noted above that we shouldnt have mr.dog pulls a flower from the vase - but since we need to draw attention to the flowers, we could have him shift it to make room for the kids perhaps - as they are gathering up on the porch "here, let me make you some room' - ext.location - the porch is rather narrow so this would make sense visually OLIVE I remember something else. Mr. Dog had flowers on his front porch. Elinor Right. Maybe moths like flowers. Martha Where can we find some flowers? Ari thinks for a quick moment. Ari I’ll be right back. CUT TO: 7. Int. ARI’S KITCHEN - NIGHT MR. BAT is about to pour fresh water into a vase full of flowers on the kitchen table, as Ari quickly runs into the room, grabs the vase of flowers and is gone in a flash. Fun. But how does Ari know his dad is about the put some flowers in the vase? Maybe he's just sitting in the couch and Ari snags the vase next to him? Ari ( quickly ) Hi dad. Bye dad. Mr. Bat is left standing with his arm in the air and briefly pours water on an empty table. Cut to: 8. EXT. ARI’S HOUSE (FRONT PORCH)-- MOMENTS LATER Ari comes back through the front door with the vase of flowers. He carefully sets the vase down on the porch. Elinor Let’s see if any moths show up. The kids and Martha hold still, watching the flowers intently, but no moths come. Second sentence is odd/too adult. Olive No moths. That’s not the answer. Use past tense "Why were..." Elinor So why are there so many moths around Mr. Dog’s porch? Just then, Mr. Bat peeks his head outside the front door. Mr. Bat It’s pretty dark outside kids. ANGLE ON: Mr. Bat’s finger flipping on the porch light switch. The porch light comes on and the kids and flowers are illuminated. maybe "And the flowers do look nice there" as if finishing his thought Mr. Bat (CONT’D) The flowers do look nice there. Mr. Bat goes back inside. After a moment, a few moths flutter up toward the porch light. Elinor ( pointing at the porch light) Look! Moths! The kids and Martha look at the light, while more moths flutter up toward the porch light. <SFX: MOTH WINGS FLUTTERING> Break up this line after the first sentence. Add a thought bubble flashback to illustrate it, and then give the second sentence to another kid or Sr. Tapir. Ari (flying up a bit toward the porch light because he’s excited) My dad turned on the porch light (pointing at the light) and then the moths showed up. Mr. Dog turned on his porch light and the moths showed up. Elinor Right. Maybe moths like the porch light. ( looking at her friends) We need MORE observations! SONG MONTAGE: MAYBE IT’S THE LIGHT Elinor, Olive and Ari sing a song while they test whether the moths are attracted to light. Elinor sings as she looks up at the moths fluttering around the lit porch light. Ari turns the porch light off, so the kids and Martha are in the darkness. The moths flutter away in the darkness. Not sure that we can or want to have a second song in the episode. The other three musical moments are probably enough already. Just have the kids experiment without a song by switching the light on/off, then Olive takes out a flashlight from her bag and tries it too. It should be a moment of wonder. The line "Maybe that's the reason why the moths shows up tonight" feel a little off. Maybe that's the how we can find them at night or something like that. ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI ELINOR: Maybe it’s the light, maybe it’s the light, OLIVE: Maybe that’s the reason why the moths showed up tonight. ARI: Let’s do a test, and watch all the moths ELINOR: When we turn the lights on and then turn the lights off. Ari turns the porch light on. When the porch light turns on, lots of moths flutter in and fly up toward the porch light. When the porch light turns off, the moths flutter away from the light into the darkness. Note about the music: We suggest a short musical rhythm/interlude (like a four count or more) after the phrase “Lights on” to allow time for moths to start flying in toward the porch light. This will give the kids time to observe the moths before Olive says “The moths fly in and stay.” We suggest the same type of structure after the phrase “Lights off” to give visual time for the moths to fly away. Also, we imagine that the following chorus is more of a spoken chorus, compared to the verses which are sung. That way Elinor can declare “Lights on!” Olive can say enthusiastically “The moths fly in and stay.” ELINOR: Lights on! OLIVE: The moths fly in and stay. ELINOR: Lights off! OLIVE: The moths all fly away. Elinor sings outside under the moonlight. ELINOR: Maybe it’s the light, maybe it’s the light, Maybe that’s the reason why the moths showed up tonight. Let’s try again and watch all the moths When we turn the lights on and then turn the lights off. Elinor, Ari, Olive and Martha stand close together on the lawn next to Ari’s porch, holding their flashlights at chest height and pointed up. Then they turn flashlights on and off, to watch what the moths do. When the flashlights turn on, the beams of light illuminate everyone’s faces. (The moths fly into the beam of light when the flashlight is on, fly away when the flashlight is off, etc.) ELINOR: Lights on! ARI: The moths fly in and stay. ELINOR: Lights off! ARI: The moths all fly away. Elinor sings the final lines with the porch light shining bright behind her head and moths fluttering around her. ELINOR: Yes it’s the light, yes it’s the light, The light is what brought all the moths to us tonight! A single moth flutters toward the camera and fills the screen. Moth wing wipe to: END SONG MONTAGE Elinor, Olive, Ari and Martha stand in the moonlight on Ari’s porch. Patterns are used for predicting in science Elinor could say something like: "I notice..light on, lots of moths, no lights, no moths, lights on what do you think will happen?" Then have someone answer. Then she could say "that's a pattern" ELINOR It’s a pattern! Every time we turn on a light... OLIVE ( excited , because they are solving the mystery) ...the moths fly in toward the light. Elinor Every time we turn off the light... Olive They fly away. The moths like Mr. Dog’s porch light. We finally solved the, dun, dun, dunn (beat) moth mystery. Mr. Bat comes out onto the porch. Mr. Bat What moth mystery? ElinoR We wanted to know why so many moths were flying around Mr. Dog’s porch. ari ( excited ) And we figured it out. Moths fly (Ari flutters up toward his porch light) toward the light. suggest cutting 'Oh I remember reading about this in a magazine about insects that start with the letter M. (beat) Moths are attracted to light' this sounds like something Olive says - Mr.Bat can just share some knowledge Mr. Bat Oh I remember reading about this in a magazine about insects that start with the letter M. ( beat ) Moths are attracted to light. Some scientists believe it’s because the moths think the lightbulb is the moon or the sun, but no one really knows why. Break this after the first sentence. Add a beat in between from the outline where the kids turn off the porch light so as not to confuse the moths. ElinOR It really is a moth mystery. ( to her friends) Hey, I know how we can finish singing our summer song for Mr. Dog. DisSOLVE TO: 10. EXT. MR. DOG’S HOUSE (FRONT PORCH) – NIGHT ANGLE ON Elinor’s finger pressing Mr. Dog’s doorbell. <SFX: DING DONG> The kids and Martha wait patiently on the porch, wearing their sun hats, underneath the bright porch light. Lots of moths flutter around them. Mr. Dog opens his front door. Mr. Dog ( smiling ) So glad you’re back. Elinor Mr. Dog, we’d love to sing for you, but first, would you turn off your porch light? Ari Moths like the light, and they’re making it hard for us to sing. MR. DOG Okay. Lights off. Mr Dog turns off the porch light, so that the choir is standing in the dark, and the moths flutter away toward the moonlight. When the moths are gone, MARTHA Groovy. Martha Cow blows a note on her chromatic pitch pipe. Martha (CONT’D) And one-y, and a two-y, and a one two three ... SUNNY SUMMER SONG In this third time, adjust the lyrics (you can do that, it's allowed): change sunshine to "night" and sunny to (something), and change the other lines to talk about the lesson the audience learned about moths (make the flapping and flying about moths attracted to light, and the "now you know why" to "now we know why". Could this song tell a little more about the pattern of night and day and how the sun stays out longer and longer until the summer solstice. ELINOR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song KIDS: A sunny summer song, A summer sing-along MARTHA: We’re here to sing a sunny summer song ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! ELINOR: We jump really high. Elinor jumps high. ARI: We flap and fly. Ari flutters up in the air for a moment. OLIVE: We try to touch the sky Olive raises her trunk and arms to the sky. MARTHA: And now you know why Martha spreads her arms wide. ALL: To celebrate the summer sunshine! Give the pun to Ari. Third time's the charm :) Mr. Dog ( clapping and smiling) That was wonderful. “Howl” about we all celebrate by howling together? No more notes after this line. Thanks for the great work. Let us know through Kathy if you have any questions or want to discuss replacing Martha. Ari Good one, Mr. Dog. Mr. Dog ( tilting his head back) Arwwwwwhoooooooooooo ! Martha Cow and the kids all join in, howling at the moon. Elinor, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA Arwwwwwoooooooooooooooooo ! A moth flies in front of the moon and then toward the camera until it fills the screen. BLACK OUT THE END

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EWW 168 A Moth Mystery By Laura Sams and Robert Sams Elinor’s Question: Why are there so many moths around Mr. Dog’s porch? Logline: The kids go summer caroling around the neighborhood, but when they get to Mr. Dog’s porch, there are so many moths flying around that they can’t finish singing their summer song. Curriculum Goals: ES2: Understand that plants and animals (including humans) can change their environment (Elinor and her friends realize they can turn off Mr. Dog’s porch light and the moths won’t gather around). SEP 4: Analyzing and Interpreting Data c: Record observations to describe patterns and/or relationships in the natural and designed world(s) in order to answer scientific questions and solve problems. (Elinor and her friends identify the pattern of moth behavior,that they cluster around lights, and solve the problem by turning off the porch light). FIRST DRAFT: March 23, 2020 SECOND DRAFT: POLISH DRAFT: FINAL DRAFT: ELINOR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTH ELINOR, OLIVE, ARI, MARTHA MRS. DROMEDARY Martha Ari Olive Elinor Mr. Bat Mr. Dog All (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E EXTERIOR - MR MOOSE'S HOUSE (FRONT DOOR) MR. DOG'S HOUSE DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY MAGIC HOUR DAWN DUSK SAME SAME TIME LATE AFTERNOON CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. SMASH CUT TO: CUT TO BLACK. TIME CUT: Order Page Intro Location Time Color Scene #