"Line Count - 154 (need to cut 34 lines....) Ari - 47 Elinor - 36 Olive - 43 Mr. Bat - 22 Mr.s Bat - 5 " 1. EXT CAMPSITE -- DAY My biggest note: We don't get to see the echolocation in action until page 7, that's probably a little late This opening section can probably be tightened. Can maybe open with the tent collapsing. Just need to establish that 1) they are cmaping and 2) what camping is. Shouldn't take more than a page and a half. "Great story - I've made suggestions on where we can cut lines to hopefully bring the page count to 13 Thanks" It’s a sunny afternoon in the forest, and ARI, ELINOR and OLIVE are on a camping trip with Ari’s family. We open as Elinor and Olive are finishing setting up their tents at a campsite(we can reuse the ones from the Light The Way episode). ELINOR There. All done. OLIVE Me too. How’s your tent going, Ari? We pan over to Ari as he puts on the finishing touches on his tent. ARI All set! I think I’m finally getting the hang of camping. At that moment, we hear a bit of chaotic noise. Next to Ari, we see MR. BAT having some trouble setting up the family tent from inside <SFX: OOF / URK /HMM>. ARI (O.S.) (CONT’D) Uh, Dad, do you need help? Mr. Bat’s head emerges from the tent, which is a jumbled mess. MR. BAT Thanks, Ari. That would be great. I haven’t quite figured out this whole tent thing yet. The tent collapses around him. MIRI (Ari’s baby sister), in MRS. BAT’s arms, <SFX: GIGGLES>. possible cut - ari offers help in line 4. here the kids can still do the action of going over to the corners of the tent - this action can still have Mr.B respond with line 7 ELINOR We’ll help you, Mr. Bat! The kids go over and hold down the corners of the tent while Mr. Bat continues to try to prop up the poles. MR. BAT Thanks, kids. You know, at home us bats usually sleep hanging from the ceiling... We see a thought bubble of Mr. and Mrs. Bat sleeping upside down at their house. MR. BAT (CONT’D) ... so setting up tents and sleeping on the ground is all very new to us. OLIVE That’s what makes camping an adventure! MR. BAT You’re exactly right, Olive. Camping is all about being out in Nature and doing things differently. ARI And, let’s not forget, having tasty camping snacks! OLIVE Well, Ari liking snacks is not THAT different. They all <SFX: LAUGH>. Mrs. Bat I’m so glad that you two could join us, Olive and Elinor. ELINOR Me too! I love camping. possible cut - we dont start into the main plot until mid page 3 so we can cut out some of this dialogue tocut the intro a bit shorter - we could instead have elinor express loving camping because they get to explore new places and see new things - combine line 14 and line 17 ARI My favorite thing about camping is cooking dinner over a campfire. cut OLIVE I really like reading a book in my tent. It makes the book feel even cozier. ELINOR I love to go exploring in a new place, so I can see new things. MR. BAT Well, we’ll go for a nice walk soon, just as soon as I (struggling with tent pole) finish.. setting ... up ... this ... tent ! The tent collapses again. Miri <SFX: GIGGLES> again. Mr. Bat (CONT’D) (poking his head out) I think we know what Miri’s favorite part of camping is. Miri continues to <SFX: GIGGLE> and the kids join in. MRS. BAT (setting Miri down and rolling up her sleeves) Oh dear. Why don’t you kids go play? I’ll help Mr. Bat. The kids look at each other smiling and run off. Ari Thanks, Mom! 2. EXT. FIELD -- DAY This entire sction can definitely be tightened quite a biy. You intention was great to introduce a new game slowly and carefully, but some kids will already know it (it's a pretty common game) and it's not that difficult to descibe. Maybe open with action, the kids playing, then one of them gets caught, then they can explain the rules as they change who's "it" "When we say Marco, you say Polo and you have to catch us, with your eyes closed". Do we need the blindfold? And I think the reference to the famous exploerer might be confusing. The kids walk a few feet away to a field (within eyesight of the camp) as they talk about what to do. Olive What should we do? Since elinor has the blindfold with her, (otherwise its a bit convenient that she happens to have one) lets have her line more about the fact that she was hoping to play with them. Ie. 'Well, i was hoping we'd try a new game i just learned. Wanna play!?' ELINOR Oh, I just learned a really fun game, want to play it? OLIVE Sure, what’s it called? ELINOR It’s called “Marco Polo.” ARI Who is Marco Polo? ELINOR He was a famous explorer! combine 28 and 20 Olive "Ooh, I love it! How do you play?' OLIVE Ooh , I love it! Let’s play. cut ARI Yeah! But... how do you play? ELINOR Well, it’s kind of like tag. But, you play with your eyes closed. OLIVE With your eyes closed? Elinor pulls out a blindfold she brought along. ELINOR Yeah, here’s how it works. If you’re “it” you wear this blindfold. ari So you can’t see. ELINOR Right. perhaps.. 'Wait... if you can’t see, how do you tag someone?' OLIVE Wait... if you can’t see, how do you tag anyone else? Olive pantomimes randomly tagging the air. ELINOR That’s the fun part. If I’m “it” and I say “ marco ”, then everyone else has to say “polo.” ARI I get it. So when you hear them say “polo”, you can tell where they are, without SEEING them. ELINOR Yes! OLIVE Sounds fun. Can I be “It” first? Elinor puts the blindfold on Olive. From Olive’s POV , we see the blindfold go over her eyes. Everything is dark for a moment. Back to the outside view, Olive is waving her arms around. OLIVE (CONT’D) Wow, I can’t see anything! Ari does a silly dance. ARI Did you see that? OLIVE Nope. He does a sillier dance. ARI How about that? OLIVE I got nothing. ARI Wow, that’s a good blindfold. ELINOR Ok , but can you HEAR us? Olive points to Elinor. OLIVE Yes! I can HEAR that you are right there. Ari is flying off to the side. ARI Ooh ! Can you hear me? Olive perks her ears up and points to Ari with her trunk. OLIVE Yes! You’re way up there! Hey, no flying! Ari lands. They all <SFX: GIGGLE> maybe for more fun 'CooL! its like you have super powers!' ARI Cool, I like this game. ELINOR Ready to play? OLIVE I’m ready! Elinor and Ari walk to new places. OLIVE (CONT’D) Ok , here I come! Olive takes a few tentative steps, and walks around with her hands (and trunk) in front of her. OLIVE (CONT’D) Marco! ElINOR/ARI Polo! Olive moves in the direction of Ari, who scrambles out of the way. Ari and Elinor <SFX: GIGGLE>. OLIVE Marco! ELINOR/ARI Polo! Olive moves towards Elinor, who dodges, and Olive grabs a bush instead. OLIVE Got you! She lifts up the blindfold. OLIVE (to bush) (CONT’D) Oops, you’re a bush, not my friend Elinor! They laugh. OLIVE (CONT’D) Wow, that’s hard! ARI Can I try being it? ELINOR Sure! Olive hands him the blindfold. He ties it on as the girls find their places. ARI Get ready, here I come. The girls smile and suppress their <SFX: GIGGLES> as Ari holds his arms out. As he starts walking, he moves much more confidently than Olive did. ARI (CONT’D) Let’s see... where are you... He walks straight to Elinor and tags her. ARI (CONT’D) Got you! When bats use Echolocation I believe they send out clicks to receive them back so they know where objects are. By not having Ari say Marco, it is not a good representation of his skills. OLIVE Wow! You didn’t even say Marco. ELINOR Page 7 and we just see the Echoclocation now. Perhaps it could be be sooner. Yeah, how did you find me so fast, Ari? Ari shrugs. suggest 'I just kind of ... heard you were over here?' since he's now standing with elinor ARI I just kind of ... heard you were over there? ELINOR But I was totally quiet! I never said Polo. ARI Hmm, you’re right. I’m not sure. Let’s try again? He puts the blindfold back on and the girls find their places. ARI (CONT’D) Marco! ELINOR/OLIVE Polo! He heads right for Olive, who dodges out of the way and goes behind the bush. Ari easily follows her around the bush and tags her. ARI Got you! OLIVE But... how? How did you know I went around the bush? ELINOR Is the blindfold working? They check and it looks good. ARI I couldn’t see a thing! OLIVE You’re so good at this game, Ari. Is this really your first time playing? "this joke is vague - not sure our audience will undertsand - suggest cutting We can maybe still have olive as in line 77 and he gives a simple answer or we cut her question and go to elinors line 79 - but cut 'I get it' " ARI I never even HEARD of this game before. Ha ha, get it? ELINOR (giggling) I get it. But I wonder how you were able to find us so well. OLIVE Yeah, even when we were super quiet? ELINOR Hmmm , we need more observations. Ari, do you have an extra eye somewhere? They check his head and forehead for a third eyeball, but don’t find one. possible cu - 82 and 83 - due to locations we will set - we may not be able to see Miri from where they are standing - plus line 83 sounds a bit defensive OLIVE Nope. Was Miri giving you secret clues? They look over at Miri. ARI She wouldn’t do that... and, she’s asleep. We see Miri snoozing in her stroller. ELINOR So how did you do it? ARI (shrugging) I dunno . I can just.. hear where things are? Just then, Mr. Bat comes over. MR. BAT Good news kids! The tent is all set up, so it’s time to go for a walk! The kids <SFX: YAY! AWESOME!> and run off to follow Mr. Bat, except for Elinor, who hangs back a little, still a bit puzzled. 3. EXT CLIFFS -- LATE AFTERNOON A cross-fade later, Mr. and Mrs. Bat lead the kids on a walk with Miri in the stroller (or in a baby carrier). Mrs. Bat takes out some baggies of trail mix. MRS. BAT Here, pass these out to your friends, Ari. OLIVE Looks good. What is it? Ari passes them around. ARI It’s called “trail mix” ELINOR What’s that? ARI Chocolate chips and other stuff. OLIVE What other stuff? ARI I dunno . I only eat the chocolate chips. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE> as they munch on the trail mix. ELINOR I love going for a walk in a new place. MR. BAT Well, I’m excited to show you all something REALLY extra cool. They come around a bend and up to a lookout spot (with wooden guard rails) at the edge of a modest canyon. It’s a nice view, and they can see pretty far down the canyon as the sun is low on the horizon. Across the canyon (not too far away) is a tall flat cliff face. OLIVE Wow, what a nice spot. It’s SO beautiful here. MR. BAT Look at those smooth, tall rocks. ELINOR Wow, I’ve never seen rocks like that before. Ari goes to pop a chocolate chip in his mouth, but misses. He scrambles, but the chip falls over the edge. ARI Oh NOOOO ! A moment later, his echo returns <SFX: (ECHO) OH NOOOOO...> . The kids are all really surprised. ARI (CONT’D) Who said that? Mr. Bat smiles. MR. BAT Watch this, and you’ll figure it out for yourself. He cups his hands towards the cliff. MR. BAT (CONT’D) HELLO! A moment later his <SFX: (ECHO) HELLO...> returns. Olive and Elinor are amazed, and try it themselves. ELINOR HELLO I’m Elinor! <SFX: (ECHO) HELLO I’M ELINOR...>. The kids <SFX: LAUGH>. Olive <SFX: TRUMPETS> towards the cliff and it <SFX: (ECHO) TRUMPETS> back to her! ELINOR (CONT’D) How is that happening? ARI It’s like the rocks are talking back to us. MR. BAT Haha , in a way, Ari. What you’re hearing is the sound of your voice bouncing off the rock and coming back to us. That sound is called an ‘echo’. We see a thought bubble that illustrates sound as wiggly waves being emitted from the kids. One of the wiggly lines bounces off the cliff and comes back. OliVE Echo. I like that word. "clarify - so he doesnt yell 'That’s so neat! Who’s the coolest bat in town? before yelling 'Ari!' - then the echo responds 'Ari' ? " ARI That’s so neat! ( trying it himself) Who’s the coolest bat in town? ( pauses to wait for the echo, then) Ari! The cliff echoes back <SFX: ECHO ARI’S LINES>. Ari (CONT’D) Hey, the rocks agree with me. The kids <SFX: GIGGLE>. Elinor tries again. This time, she closes her eye in her effort to make it louder. ElINOR CAMPING IS FUN! The canyon echoes back <SFX: (ECHO) CAMPING IS FUN...>. Elinor opens her eyes and turns towards the cliffs. ELINOR (CONT’D) Hmmm . That is so interesting. ARI What is it Elinor? ELINOR If I close my eyes and shout, I can tell where the rocks are from the echo. ARI That makes sense. The sound bounces, and then you hear it coming (pointing) from there. OLIVE Ooohh . If we were playing Marco-Polo with the rocks, you could tell where they are. ELINOR Yeah, if you shout ‘marco’ , you would hear the echo. OLIVE I have to try this. Elinor gives her the blindfold and she puts it on. ( or just shuts her eyes). Olive points in a general direction. i think Olive could just close her eyes OLIVE (CONT’D) MARCO! The cliffs <SFX: (ECHO) MARCO...> back and Olive turns and points at the cliff. OLIVE (CONT’D) The cliffs are that way! Elinor makes a connection. perhaps this is more of a comparison - otherwise seems like she's made the connection very quickly - ex.'Its kinda like how Ari found us when we played Marco Polo' ELINOR Wait, is THAT how Ari found us when we played Marco Polo and we didn’t make any sounds? OLIVE Were you using echoes, Ari? ARI Was I? could combine line 23 and 24 as they are almost saying the same thing- ELINOR I didn’t hear him making any echoes. OLIVE Yeah, and he found us without even saying “Marco”. ARI I just... heard where you were. Maybe I have a special bat-sense? Mr. and Mrs. Bat look at each other knowingly. MR. BAT That’s right Ari, you do. You have a special bat echo. in line 50 i suggest a fun loine about super powers - we can revisit it here -'Really? i do? Its like I have super powers!'..Uh, how does it work?' ARI Really? I do? I mean, of course I do. Uh, how does it work? could combine 128 and 130 - cut line 29 MR. BAT Bats can make a special noise that makes echoes. possible cut ARI Like this? <nonsense sound> MR. BAT Haha . That’s a funny noise. I mean a special noise that most animals can’t hear. ELINOR Wow, really? MR. BAT Yes! Only bats can hear it (he wiggles his ears), and we use it to tell what is around us. We see a thought bubble that shows Mr. Bat walking in the forest, a sound coming from Mr. Bat bouncing off trees and rocks (similar to the echo visualization earlier). The kids are <SFX: AMAZED WALLA>. ELINOR Why can bats do that? MR. BAT Well, lots of bats like to fly at night. Can you guess why this special echo would be helpful? The kids think for a bit <SFX: HMMM> . Olive I know! Because it’s dark at night and you can’t see! It’s like closing your eyes. Mr. BAT That’s right. This special echo helps bats find things in the dark, like food. ARI Ooh , night snacks! They <SFX: LAUGH> and then kids sing to recap. ElINOR/OLIVE/ARI We say Echo! Echo! The rocks say “Echo”! (last word is echoed) We say “Hello! Hello!” The rocks say “Hello!” ( last word is echoed) ELINOR I can use my eyes to see what is right in front of me. OLIVE: But bats can make a special sound To help them know What’s around. ALL: Bats use echos And special ears So they can tell What’s far and near We say Echo! Echo! The rocks say “Echo”! (last word is echoed) We say “Hello! Hello!” The rocks say “Hello!” ( last word is echoed) Ari’s stomach grumbles. MR. BAT You don’t have to echo that Ari, I know what that means: it’s time for dinner! Over <SFX: LAUGHTER/AWESOME> merriment, they head back to camp. 4. EXT CAMPSITE -- EVENING It’s later, and everyone is sitting around a nice campfire, roasting veggie dogs on their long sticks. veggie dogs' visually this will still look like a hotdog (meat) should we have them roasting marshmellows instead - or vegetables? OLIVE I think mine is ready. ELINOR Mine too. ARI Hmm, mine needs another minute. I like it extra cooked. MR. BAT You mean extra burnt? S&P - reads the take the food off the fire and eat - we will need to make sure its cooled down and safe - perhaps we rework where Mrs.Bat is preparing the food - or takes the food from them once they are done roasting to prepare it for them to eat - we then have the scene of ari and the book - when he returns Mrs.bat has the food on little plates for them - he can explain that the trail mix is for desert! OR if we need to cut more lines, lets return to the campfire and they are all relaxing - Not cooking any food. a few lines on how delicious dinner was (so we explain that they ate) and continue with 145 "It was so nice having dinner by the cozy campfire' - then continue as we have it ARI No, I like it burnt just right. They <SFX: LAUGH>. Ari takes his food off the fire and they all munch and enjoy. 'Oh thats remnds me - I want to read my book by the fire' - dont need to repeate 'cozy campfire' MRS. BAT It’s so nice to have a cozy campfire dinner. OLIVE That reminds me! I want to read my book by the cozy campfire. MRS. BAT Great idea, Olive. OLIVE But, I left my book in my tent. She looks over into the darkness. OLIVE (CONT’D) And.. It’s pretty dark over there. ARI I’ll get it for you. Bats are great at getting around in the dark. He navigates confidently to Olive’s tent, humming the tune from the ditty. Elinor looks at him and we see in a thought bubble what she’s thinking: she imagines Ari walking and the sound waves bouncing off the things around him. Ari then comes back, with an extra bag of trail mix in hand. ARI (CONT’D) Here you go, Olive. He gives Olive her book. MR. BAT And what else did you find? ARI An extra bag of trail mix. Like you said dad, bats are good at finding food in the dark! MR. BAT I’ll echo that! They all <SFX: LAUGH> as the view pulls up into the starry night sky and we... Fade out.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EWW160: ECHO LOCATION Written by Jorge Cham and Daniel Whiteson Question: How does Ari know where things are when he’s blindfolded? Logline: The kids learn about echo-location Curriculum Goals: LS2 . Understand that animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs. a. Identify body parts of animals and their function c. Compare how the external body parts of animals and plants are the same and/or different d. Explore how different external features of an animal help it survive in its environment. (Elinor and Olive learn that Ari’s ability to make high-pitched sounds and his sensitive ears give him a special skill – echolocation). SEP1 . Asking questions (science) and defining problems (engineering) a. Demonstrate curiosity about the greater world outside of their local environment b. Ask more complex questions about observable phenomena c. Ask and/or identify cause and effect questions that can be answered by an investigation (Ari, Elinor and Olive wonder about how their voices are bouncing back near a cliff face. so they do an investigation that leads them to the idea of echoes). SEP3 . Planning and carrying out investigations b. Compare and contrast objects and events by describing similarities and differences in detail c. Demonstrate an ability to make and test predictions based on background knowledge and experiences. (Elinor and her friend contrast the echoes they all can hear with Ari’s echolocation abilities). SEP6 . Constructing explanations (science) and Designing Solutions (engineering) a. Use background knowledge experiences, and data to construct reasonable explanations and theories of natural phenomena (science) b. Look for and describe patterns and relationships in natural phenomena (science) (Elinor, Ari and Olive use their knowledge they’ve gained experimenting with echoes to understand Ari’s echolocation) FIRST DRAFT: January 13, 2020 ARI ELINOR ELINOR-ECHO ElINOR/ARI ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI MIRI MR DOG MR RACCOOn Mr. Bat Mr. BAT Mr. Bat-ECHO MRS HIPPO Mrs. Bat Mz mole MZ. MoLE OLive OLIVE-ECHO OLIVE/ELINOR OLVE (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) (comically loud WHisper) (to olive) (STUFFY NOSE VOICE) (TO MRS HIPPO) (ECHO) (blindfolded) INT EXT I/E 1 INT ARI'S LIVING ROOM / DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.