Nice second draft! Reads well, and feels nice and clear with the right tone. The voices on the dialogue are nice and feel like the characters, and the added moments are cute. Some notes below. Thanks 1. EXT. Animal town park -- day "Line Count - 118 Elinor - 33 Ari - 29 Olive - 22 Mrs. Hippo - 19 Ms. Llama - 8 Mr. Raccoon - 7" We see Animal Town Park on a beautiful spring d ay. All is quiet, until ELINOR and ARI can be heard in the distance. Just a few notes from me. Elinor (O.S.) Here it comes! ARI (O.S.) I got it... I got it... This is coming along. One overall note is that we'd like to make sure the kids never touch the litter directly for health reasons. We saw that it mentions using claw sticks which is great. Let's be sure to use those throughout. Otherwise, they should wear gloves to pick up the trash. (Olive's trunk included - we don't want her picking up garbage with that unless it's her own.) Additional notes below. A Frisbee disc then floats through the frame as Ari jumps up to catch it, but fumbles <SFX: WHOOPS>. At the last second, though, OLIVE jumps up from the bottom of frame and catches the Frisbee with her trunk . Go long' feels a little outside our age range. Can you think of something more appropriate? OLIVE (giggling) Not sure if preschoolers would say "Go long!" but it's not a big deal if you'd like to keep it. Looks like I got it. Go long! Elinor and Ari run away from Olive as she hurls the Frisbee with all her might, sending the disc across the park! Elinor and Ari race each other to catch up to the Frisbee. Elinor This one is mine! Please make sure the golf cart is not moving when she catches the frisbee. Ari Oh, no! Not this time! Ari flaps his wings, flying over Elinor as both kids <GIGGLE> back and forth at each other. Despite their best efforts, they can’t quite catch up to the Frisbee. As the Frisbee starts to descend, MRS. HIPPO suddenly rides into frame on a golf cart and catches the disc, then comes to a stop right in front of the kids, who are amazed not only by Mrs. Hippo’s great catch, but also by this golf cart! ELINOR Amazing catch, Mrs. Hippo! W ant to play with us? Mrs. Hippo is a jovial woman, with a Midwestern vibe to her (Think Edie McClurg ). She always wants to help out, no matter the situation, but right now, she’s got a job to do. Mrs. HIPPO Oh, I’d love to, kid do s , but I’m cleaning up litter in the park today. Confused, the kids look around and the park looks great. Somewhere in here we need to mention that the litter is trash on the ground. We haven't defined it well enough to distinguish it from trash in a trash can. Ari Litter? You mean, like trash? But... I don’t see any litter. MRS. HIPPO That’s because I already cleaned up this part of the park , so thanks a bunch , but I still have lots to do. Elinor K eeping all of Animal Town clean must be a big job. Second sentence: "And it's an important job." mrs. Hippo Oh, you betcha ! And an important one. Olive I wish we could help , but we’re just kids. What could we do? As Elinor and Olive think, Mrs. Hippo steps up with some garbage bags for the kids. Delete "for the kids" in the description above. Mrs. HIPPO Plenty! Anyone can pitch in to keep their town clean. Even the smallest things help . Elinor Really? Can we help you? MRS. HIPPO The more, the merrier, let’s go clean up the park! As the kids run off, excited , we: Dissolve to: 2. EXT. aNIMAL TOWN PARK -- DAY Now holding litter bags, the kids walk around the park with Mrs. Hippo, picking up any litter they find on the ground with claw sticks and putting it in big, paper bags. (NOTE: The litter is colourful and not gross). Ari Got one! Ari picks up a paper cup and throws it in his bag. As they walk, they find random candy wrappers or cans around. Elinor Where did all this litter come from? OLive Yeah? Everyone loves Animal Town. Why would they leave litter around like this? Add "it" before "may" Mrs. HIPPO Even towns as wonderful as Animal Town have litter. Sometimes, people drop litter by accident or it falls out of trash cans or may even get blown around by the wind... Suddenly, a paper bag blows through frame and Olive catches it with her trunk. Olive (O.S.) I see what you mean. As Elinor picks up a candy wrapper off the ground and puts it in her bag, she looks around and doesn’t see any more litter. Change first sentence to: "I don't see any more litter around here, Mrs. Hippo" Elinor It looks good around here, Mrs. Hippo. Where to next? MrS. HIPPO Actually, Elinor, we’re all done cleaning up the park . You kids were such a huge help, we finished early . Ari Aww ... but I really liked helping clean up Animal Town. maybe a visual clue that the bags are not closed completely MRS. HIPPO Don’t worry , t here’s always plenty to do. But since we finished so early, I thought I might take my helpers on a cart ride around tow n ! Wha ddya think? The kids all celebrate as they run towards the nearby cart ! <SFX: YEAH! WHOO-HOO WALLA> E veryone puts their bags on the back of the golf cart a s we: Cut to: 3. EXT. Animal town - various (MONTAGE) We see a musical montage of the ecstatic kids (with seat-belts) riding around Animal Town with Mrs. Hippo. - They zig-zag through trees in the park. - Drive down the sidewalks in town, waving to the townspeople , who wave right back. - They go past th eir clubhouse , where kids play in the BG . - Finally, they are back in the park, <LAUGHING> as they zoom around the paths of the park, leaning into each other with every turn! 4. EXT. Animal town park -- day As the music fades, we see what the kids see: the park now has new pieces of litter here and there all around! Description above this line feels out of place. Change to: "As the music fades, they come back to where they started" Then move the rest ("we see what the kids see… etc.") to the end of the description after line 27. Ari Wow, Mrs. Hippo. My mom makes me clean my room all the time, but I’ve NEVER had this much fun! MrS. HIPPO Oh, thanks a bunch, Ari. You kids really made cleaning easy today. I’ve never been done so fast. Suddenly, Olive notices something. Olive Uh... I’m not so sure we’re done. Elinor then sees it too as they all step out of the cart. Elinor Oh, no! What happened? Olive There’s more litter in the park! Second sentence: "I wonder where it all came from." Mrs. HIPPO Remove the word "did" from the second sentence. But we haven’t been gone very long . I wonder w here did it c a me from . CU a piece of litter on the ground as Ari steps into frame and picks it up, examining it closely. He seems very serious all of the sudden. Ari There’s only one explanation for how all this litter got here so fast... (dramatic pose) Animal Town has ... a litterbug ! Give this line to Elinor. Olive A litterbug? ARI Yeah! Someone who leaves litter on the ground. In description below, trim to: "Olive then steps up in dramatic fashion" mrs. HIPPO A litterbug? No sirree . I mean, who would do such a thing? Elinor and Olive step out of the cart then Olive then steps up in dramatic fashion. Olive Dun, dun, duuuun ... it’s a MYSTERY! Elinor shakes her head, refusing to believe that. MRS. HIPPO Well, hold on, kiddos ! Maybe whoever left this litter did it by accident and doesn't know they did it. ELINOR You’re right, Mrs. Hippo! And if they don’t know they’re doing it... Ari They could still be doing it! Add "and fast". Also, in description below, change to something like, "Mrs. Hippo pulls out a garbage bag" or "Mrs. Picks up a piece of litter" (she already got off the cart) Olive We need to figure out where all this litter came from, fast. Meanwhile, Mrs. Hippo steps out of the cart. Change last sentence to: "I'll pick up the litter here and you kiddos look around town to see who might be leaving all this litter." Mrs. HIPPO Let's make this less about a hunt for a specific person. Could simplify to say, "I'll pick up the litter here and you kiddos look around town for clues about where the litter might be coming from." Great idea! So let's work as a team. I'll pick up the litter here and you kiddos look around town for who is helping and who might not be helping keep our town clean. She uses a claw to start picking up the trash. Description below: add "sparse" before " trail" ElinoR You got it, Mrs. Hippo. We’ll find out where this litter is coming from. (then, to Olive) So... where should we start? They look around and see a trail of litter leading to town. Olive I know! If you wanna find out where the litter is coming from, follow the litter. Let’s go! As the kids follow the trail of litter, they pick up each piece and put it in a bag as they head to town. Dissolve to: 5. ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY As the kids arrive on Main Street in town, they continue to pick up litter, which still lines the sidewalk. ari Looks like the litterbug came this way. ELINOR Sure does. Suddenly, the kids stop as Mz. Llama walks out of her shop with a big bag of kitchen scraps and dumps it right into a pile on the ground ! olive Look, there’s Mz. Llama ! What is she doing? ELINOR Is she... she looks like she’s putting her litter on the ground! Ari (gasp) Could Mz. Llama be the litterbug?! The kids all run over. 6. EXT. BACK OF MZ. LLAMA’S RESTAURANT -- DAY As the kids run over, Mz. Llama is just finishing dumping her bag of trash into the pile as three old, half-eaten tomatoes hit the pile with an SFX: PLOP, PLOP, PLOP . With each plop, our three kids’ heads each pop up behind Mz. Llama , one by one in unison with the PLOPS. As Mz. Llama finishes, she turns and smiles at the kids. "Add a line for Mz. Llama before this line: MZ. LLAMA Oh, hello kids." Elinor Hi , Mz. Llama . May we ask what you’re doing ? ARI Yeah, it looks like you’re putting litter on the ground . Mz. Llama Oh, goodness gracious, no Ari . This isn’t litter, it’s scraps of food for compost ing . See? Mz. Llama shows the kids her compost pile , which surrounded by three walls to keep the compost in place. "Lines 51-53: Let's change the order here to more like this: ELINOR Composting? MZ. LLAMA Yes! Whenever I have leftover fruits or vegetables or bread from my restaurant, I dump it here instead of in the trash. (mixing the compost pile) After a while, all that food turns into nice soil for my garden. KIDS Ohhhhh... MZ. LLAMA We call that, ""compost""" MZ. LLAMA (CONT’D) Composting is a great way to reuse old scraps of food and help grow new food in my garden. Elinor So you reuse old food to grow new food? Mz. Llama That’s right, Elinor. W henever I have leftover fruits or vegetables or bread from my restaurant, I always compost it rather than throw it away. Over time, all this food will break down and turn into... Mz. Llama opens a drawer on the the bottom of her compost pile and dark, rich compost comes out. Ari Compost! Whoa, that’s amazing . MZ. LLAMA (laughing) Yes it is. And compost works wonders in my vegetable garden. Would you kids like to help me spread it around? ari Hmm... sounds messy. I’m in. "Change to: ""Me too. Every little bit helps."" Also, in the description below this line, add something like, ""…using nearby garden tools"" to the end of it." olive Every little bit helps, right? As Mz. Llama takes a shovel full of compost from the bottom of her compost pile and dumps it in the garden, the kids get down in the garden and spread the compost around on the soil. Delete "be turned into compost" Elinor I can’t believe all that food can be turned into compost and go right back into the dirt like this. Delete this line ARI So... does composting mean you make less litter? Change to: "Yes, and it makes less trash because we're re-using the old food." (or something like that) MZ. LLAMA It sure does. ARI Phew... And here, I thought you might be the litterbug. MZ. LLAMA The what? Delete "It looks like" Elinor It looks like s omeone has been leaving litter around Animal T own. OlIVE Yeah, and w e want to find out w here it’s coming from . MZ. LLAMA Oh, no. Well, maybe whoever is doing it doesn’t realize they’re leaving litter around. It isn’t me, though . I always reduce, reuse and recycle. After all, we all have to do our part. OLIVE Yup ! It’s up to all of us to take care of our t own. Change to something more like, "Like Mz. Llama. Composting all this old food makes less litter!" ElINOR Just like Mz. Llama! She’s looking out for our town by composting all this old food and making less litter! Add an "um" at the beginning. Also, at some point, indicate the kids are finished spreading the compost. Maybe before this line? ArI Speaking of less litter, we still need to find the litterbug. Replace the "bye" with "Thanks for your help!" Mz. Llama Oh, right! You kids better get back to it. I can finish up here. Bye! Delete second sentence? ELINOR Bye, Mz. Llama. And thanks for helping our town. The kids walk out and Mz. Llama kneels in her garden as we: Dissolve to: 7. EXT. ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY As the kids walk away, they spot more litter down the street a bit, leading away from Mz. Llama’s shop. Add "Look," at the beginning of this line Elinor There’s more litter on the ground. Ari Let’s go! The kids pick up the remaining litter and look around, but that’s everything. The street is once again clean. Olive picks up the last piece of litter and holds it up. replace "it looks like" with "I think" Olive Well, it looks like we got it all. This is the last piece. The kids look up and they are standing in front of Mr. Raccoon’s shop. We haven't introduced the word "trail". Use "litter" instead ("The litter ends at …") olive (CONT’D) The trail ended at Mr. Raccoon’s shop. Maybe he saw something? As the kids look around, they see Mr. Raccoon standing next to his shop and using a hose on the sidewalk. There is a big, overflowing bag of litter next to him on the ground. elinor What’s he doing? He’s got a bag of litter. A BIG bag of litter! Elinor (CONT’D) And it looks like he’s pouring water all over the sidewalk. Ari (gasp) Could Mr. Raccoon be the litterbug? ELINOR (not convinced) Hmm... Let’s go ask him. ARI Mr. Raccooo ... As Ari calls out , Mr. Raccoon turns and accidentally sprays him with water, causing Ari to turn around as water drips off of him. A very apologetic Mr. Raccoon then runs over to the kids. Let's make sure it's just a little bit of water that gets Ari and please not in his face. Mr. Raccoon I am so sorry, Ari! I didn’t even see you there! Here you go! Mr. Raccoon grabs a towel off his apron and gives it to Ari to dry off. Add "Hi, Mr. Raccoon" to the beginning, and delete Mr. Raccoon from the end of the line. Elinor We're trying to figure out who is leaving litter around Animal Town, Mr. Raccoon. MR. RACCOON Ah yes, I saw a lot of litter here in front of my shop. It took me quite a while to pick it all up. That’s what’s in this bag. change "trail" to "litter" Olive Well, that explains why the trail ends at Mr. Raccoon’s shop. Ari Oh, I thought maybe you were the litterbug, Mr. Raccoon. MR. RACCOON Oh, not me . I always try to keep everything clean. That’s why I’m spraying down my sidewalk, to clean up where this litter used to be. But don’t worry, I’m using rain water. The kids all look up at the clear, blue sky. ELINOR But... it’s not raining. Mr. Raccoon gestures to a rain barrel on the side of his shop that the hose is connected to. MR. RACCOON That’s true, but I get my water from a rain barrel. Olive A rain barrel? Mr. RACCOON Yes, it’s right over there - take a look. The kids go over and check out Mr. Raccoon’s rain barrel. As Mr. Raccoon explains how a rain barrel works, we see a THOUGHT BUBBLE over his head. This could be clearer. Something like "The rain barrel collects water every time it rains and saves it for later. That way, when I wash my sidewalks or water my grass, and I'm not wasting new water. I'm re-using rain water. Saving water is one way we help keep our town clean." Mr. Raccoon (CONT’D) The Rain Barrel collects water every time it rains and I use that water to wash my sidewalks or water my grass so that I’m not wasting any water. After all, we all have to do our part to keep Animal Town clean . Meanwhile, as they walk back to the front of the store, Ari is relieved that Mr. Raccoon is clearly not the litterbug. Change to something like, "Phew! I'm glad you're not the litterbug, Mr. Raccoon" Ari We sure do. As they reach the front of the store , Olive spots another piece of litter on the sidewalk. Olive Hey, there’s new litter on the sidewalk! Ari But the sidewalk was just clean. That means it must be the litterbug! Elinor Whoever is leaving this litter must be nearby. See you later, Mr. Raccoon! MR. RACCOON Good luck, kids. Great job keeping Animal Town clean. Ari Thanks, Mr. Raccoon! As the kids run off, they pick up the litter from in front of Mr. Raccoon’s store, then see a few more up the street. ELINOR The litter is coming from that way! Suddenly, another piece of litter flutters down the street from around the corner. The kids follow it around the corner just in time to see another piece fall off of something and onto the ground. Change last sentence to: "It looks like the litterbug is…" Ari Oh, we’re so close! Come on. We’re about to find out that the litterbug is... As the kids come around the next corner they see Mrs. Hippo driving the cart, then see a piece of litter fall off the back of the cart. ELINOR (confused) Mrs. Hippo? Mrs. Hippo turns to see the kids and stops the cart. When she stops, another piece of litter falls off because the litter bags aren’t closed up properly, but Mrs. Hippo has no idea. Mrs. HIPPO Oh, hey kid do s ! I’ve been looking all over for you , dontcha know . Did you figure out where all that litter is coming from? There is a bit of inconsistency here and through Line 106. Here they say it's coming from Mrs. Hippo but in line 103, Olive says that "we" didn't close the litter bags properly. It might be better if they all own this mistake since they were helping her. It might be nice especially because its something they can all help fix. ELINOR I think we did, Mrs. Hippo. It’s coming from... you. Mrs. Hippo is in disbelief. MRS. HIPPO Me? But, what do you mean?! Olive , Ari and Elinor walk to the cart to show Mrs. Hippo the opened bags. As Olive explains, a THOUGHT BUBBLE appears above her head of the kids driving around and litter falling off the back of the truck. Olive It looks like we didn’t close the litter bags properly . Elinor S o when we drove around town, the litter fell out and went everywhere. MRS. HIPPO Oh, I didn’t know I was spreading more litter around. maybe "we" just made a mistake...she didn't do it alone Ari It’s okay, Mrs. Hippo. You just made a mistake. Don’t worry, I make ‘em all the time. Suddenly, Ari trips over and falls behind the cart. A beat later, he pops up, just fine. Ari (CONT’D) See? Mrs. Hippo starts to tie the bags up tight. MRS. HIPPO Well, it won’t happen again. F rom now on, these bags will be tied up tight! Elinor then steps in to help Mrs. Hippo tie the bags. Change "Way to go" to "Here," and delete "because" Elinor Way to go, Mrs. Hippo! I’ll help you because, after all, we can all pitch in to make our town cleaner. Mrs. HIPPO Y ou can sure say that again. I think we can delete this line. ELINOR We will! Elinor smiles as the music fades up and the ditty begins. During the song, the kids demonstrate the various ways they saw in the episode to help the environment. delete "laying" Elinor/ari/olive ELINOR: To keep your world nice and green, You just have to keep it clean, Follow these steps and you will see Helping is easy as can be. OLIVE: When you’re done with fruit don’t throw it away, Compost that all night and day, It makes less litter and that doesn’t hurt, ‘Cause compost really helps the dirt! ARI: When watering plants don’t use a hose, There’s a better way that everyone knows, Catch some rain as it falls from the sky, And use that water when your plants get dry! ELINOR: Here’s one more thing that you can do, To keep the world looking good as new. When you see litter laying on the ground, Throw it in the cans that are all around! ALL: To keep your world nice and green You just have to keep it clean Follow these steps and you will see Helping is easy as can be! 8. EXT. ANIMAL TOWN PARK -- DAY As the song ends, the kids walk back through the very clean park with Mrs. Hippo. MRS. HIPPO Thanks again, kids. You helped me clean up, and reminded me to keep my litter in the trash bag. Add "help" before "keep" Olive No problem, Mrs. Hippo. We love to keep Animal Town clean. elinor Yeah, because no matter how old you are, EVERYONE can do their part to keep their t own beautiful! Just as Mrs. Hippo says that, a snack wrapper falls onto the ground right near Mrs. Hippo and the kids. As they look over, they see standing next to the wrapper . A sheepish Ari picks up the wrapper and puts it in a nearby trash bin. In description above, I think you need to clarify they see Ari. Also add that he's munching on the snack. Ari Whoops! Sorry, I dropped some litter, but d on’t worry, I’m doing my part. As the kids laugh, we: FADE OUT.

EWW156 "The Litterbug" D2 12/20/19 .

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EWW156: The Litterbug By Michael Foulke Elinor’s Question: Who is the Animal Town litterbug? Logline: Elinor and her friends help Mrs. Hippo, the Animal Town custodian try to find a litter bug, who is leaving trash all over Animal Town. Curriculum Goals: ES3: Understand that things people do to live comfortably can affect the world around them, but they can make choices that reduce their impacts on the land, water, air, and other living things: b. Demonstrate an awareness of and the ability to discuss in simple terms the need for conservation, recycling, and respect for the environment c. Participate in simple activities to care for the environment (Elinor and her friends pick up the litter in Animal town and the determine to find the source.) SEP4: Analyzing and interpreting data a. Collect, describe, and record observations in greater detail and in various ways b. Use the 5 senses and simple tools to gather and record data c. Record observations to describe patterns and/or relationships in the natural and designed world(s) in order to answer scientific questions and solve problems. d. Talk about and reflect on what happened during an investigation or when solving a problem, and why it might have happened MAINS: Elinor, Ari, Olive SECONDARY: Mrs. Hippo, Mrs. Llama, Mr. Raccoon LOCATIONS: Animal Town Main Street, Park, Mrs. Llama's Restaurant PROPS: Golf Cart, Trash, Trash Bags, Old Food, Compost, Hose Outline: October 31, 2019 First Draft: November 28, 2019 Second Draft: December 20, 2019 Olive Elinor Ari Mrs. Hippo ELINORE Mrs. Llama Air Mr. Raccoon Mz. Llama (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 3 4 7 EXT. ANIMAL TOWN PARK -- DAY ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY EXT. ANIMAL TOWN MAIN STREET -- DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY MAGIC HOUR DAWN DUSK SAME SAME TIME CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. SMASH CUT TO: CUT TO BLACK. TIME CUT: Order Page Intro Location Time Color Scene #