"This came out nice, Kathy, nice job. I think the scenes with the kids and the baby are cute. Just a few notes from me below. To address PBS' notes I would suggest: - Make it a jump instead of a twirl that Olive is trying to do. Just a regular jump (not necessarily over anything), and then show Olive not able to get any kind of air and falling down when she tries. I think that makes the parallel with Miri closer because it's about strong legs. - Suggest replacing ""your body isn't ready"" with ""your arms and legs aren't ready (or strong enough)"" or ""your muscles aren't strong enough yet"" when it feels weird to talk about a girl in particular. - I'd love to keep the kids interacting with the baby on their own, and figuring things out on their own. That's part of the charm and what I think you wanted to model? Maybe make it more explicit that the mom is nearby, and have the kids check in with her from time to time. - For Sara's note, I would suggest adding a little bit about growth when the mom jumps in to explain. If you want to chat about it, let me know. Thanks! PS: I noticed about 10 typos, do a fine comb pass?" 1. EXT. PARK -- DAY "Line Count - 123 (cut 3 lines please) Ari - 40 Elinor - 35 Olive - 18 Ari's Mom - 10 Lola - 2" I think the story is fun and relevant but would like to focus in on the take away message. I wonder if you want to focus on the idea of 'life cycles' and that we grow and change over time (including but not limited to our muscles), babies do some things, young kids do some different things, big kids do others, and adults do things differently too - behaviors are different at different stages of life OR you could focus on the idea that we have designed protective gearbecause keeping our body safe is important. When your a baby you gave parents and big brothers to help keep safe as your learning new things and as you get older you might need helmets and knee pads. OR do you want to focus on the concept that some skills are 'learned skills' and what does a learned skill mean. I included NGSS language that might help? From grade 1: LS1.B: Growth and Development of Organisms: Adult plants and animals can have young. In many kinds of animals, parents and the offspring themselves engage in behaviors that help the offspring to survive. (1-LS1-2) The following is from 3rd grade ngss. LS3.A: Inheritance of Traits: Many characteristics of organisms are inherited from their parents. (3-LS3-1) Other characteristics result from individuals’ interactions with the environment, which can range from diet to learning. Many characteristics involve both inheritance and environment. (3-LS3-2)i. OLIVE (all suited up with helmet and pads)unsteadily roller-skates past ELINOR and ARI. The three friends are making their way through the park with MRS. BAT and Ari’s baby sister MIRI (in a stroller). OLIVE basically step-skates along the path. "General notes: -- We aren't sure the parallel experiences Olive and Baby Miri are having are playing clearly. Miri’s struggles are attributed to the fact that her legs aren’t strong enough. Olive’s issue could be that she just hasn’t practiced enough yet. And being able to twirl feels more like an issue with coordination and balance - less about strength. We also feel a little uncomfortable with directing phrases like “your body isn’t ready” to Olive – it feels like it takes on a different meaning to say this to a young girl rather than about a baby. If we want to draw the comparison between the two characters, we'd focus more on the fact that maybe their legs aren’t strong enough yet to do the things each one wants to do. It also might be worth considering a different activity for Olive that is more clearly strength related. Maybe Olive should be practicing her softball throw/pitch but she can’t quite throw it far enough yet. That would be related more directly to strength and kids would relate to it. -- We'd like Mrs. Bat to be slightly more in the picture than she currently is. The exchange around line 22 feels a bit strange: it doesn’t seem realistic that a young kid would suggest that his mom take a load off and leisurely read a book while he watches his baby sister. Her re-entry around line 84 feels a bit random, too, and she feels rather conspicuously absent when the kids get the idea to teach Miri to walk in line 57. (Feels like that’s the kind of thing we’d want them to OK with Mom before going ahead and doing.) Mrs. Bat could have a bit more of a guiding hand in Elinor and Ari’s attempts to figure out the answer to Elinor’s question. For example, perhaps around line 57 she could suggest that Miri might not yet be ready to learn how to walk, but that the kids can certainly try to show her how as long as they’re gentle. That might prompt Elinor to wonder, what does that mean that she’s not ready yet? (Oh, it’s that her legs aren’t strong enough.) -- We also noticed that there is a lot of direct address happening between the characters, most notably in scene 2. Nearly every line from 15-25 have the characters addressing each other by name: Let’s settle down here, kids / Good idea, Mom / I’m glad you’re thinking about your sister, Ari; etc. We'd like to try to pare back on this." Olive I’m doing it, I’m doing it, I’m doing it! ElINOR Wow, way to go Olive! Ari Who-hoo!! It’s Olive the awesome roller-skating elephant. OLIVE Look at me…whoooaaa! Olive loses her footing and comically lands in a heap. Ari’s mom Oh, dear. Ari and Elinor rush to her. ELinor Are you all right, Olive? They help their friend to stand. OLIVE Yeah I’m fine. Thanks to my gear. Olive shows off her pads proudly, even <SFX: KNOCKING> on her helmet. ArI Whoooa. Very cool. OLIVE Uh-huh. The pads protect me while I get the hang of these roller skates. Olive skates off unsteadily. Elinor (calling) You’re doing great! OLIVE (calling back) Thanks, Elinor. Elinor and Ari continue walking beside Ari’s Mom and Miri in the stroller as Olive step-skates on ahead. Ari’s Mom Those pads could have helped you when you were a baby Ari. You fell down all the time.. ArI What, me? But I never fall do- whoooah ! At that moment Ari trips on a twi g, does a flip in the air and lands on his feet. Miri laughs her head off! <SFX: BABY GIGGLES> ArI (CONT’D) (covering) I MEANT to do that! (to Miri) Yeah, I know. I’m the best big brother ever... Ari basks in the <SFX: BABY GIGGLES>. (NOTE: Miri is about 10 months old, a real little rug rat, she does lots of cooing, babbling and has a crazy baby-laugh). 2. EXT. GRASSY NOOK - PARK The group walks up to a nice grassy spot. ARI’S MOM Let’s settle down here, kids. ARI Good idea, Mom. Miri can crawl around here all she likes. ARI’S MOM I’m glad you’re always thinking about what your sister needs, Ari. Mrs. Bat gets the kids settled on a blanket, Miri included (out of her stroller). Meanwhile, Olive sees something interesting in the near distance. <SFX: Ohhh> ANGLE ON: a flat dirt area (designed to be very compact so the surface is solid). There are a few small wooden ramps and some older kids skating there. OLIVE Oooh , there’s the skate-park. (to Ari’s Mom) Mrs. Bat, can I go practice my skating over there? ARI’S MOM Of course, Olive. Go ahead. Olive skates off (it’s not far). OLIVE Be back soon! ElINOR Have fun, Olive! Ari looks at Mrs. Bat as she takes out toys for Miri (including a ball and a rattle). Ari Hey Mom, why don’t we watch Miri. You can go take a rest. ARI’S MOM Are you sure? Elinor Of course, Mrs. Bat, we love playing with Miri. ARI’S MOM OK, I’ll be right over there reading my book. Mrs. Bat sits down at an adjacent park bench and takes out her book. Ari and Elinor sit down next to Miri on the blanket NOTE: Miri can sit up on her own. ANOTHER NOTE: All through this scene and the next, Ari’s Mom is visible, watching and sometimes smiling when the going gets cute. Ari (to Elinor) There’s nothing more fun than making Miri laugh - WATCH. ANGLE ON: Ari who makes a silly face. Miri laughs with delight <SFX: BABY GIGGLES> ElINOR Oh yeah, I can beat THAT, Hey Miri... (covers her face with her ears, then peeks out) PEEK-A-BOO! Miri thinks this is hilarious!! <SFX: BIGGER BABY GIGGLES> ARI Niiice. But laughing isn’t the only thing Miri can do . Miri... Ari waves at Miri - she waves back. <SFX: BABY COOS> ELINOR Whu? I didn’t know Miri could wave. ARI I taught her, I teach her lots of things. Like... Ari blows a raspberry <SFX: BRRR> , Miri does too <SFX: BRRR> . They all <SFX: LAUGH> ELINOR (giggling) AMAZING! What else can she do? ARI Uhhmmm..Oh , watch this!! Ari shakes Miri’s rattle like a mariachi dancer <SFX: SHUCK, SHUCKA, SHUKA>, then he gives it to Miri who shakes who it like a pro, <SFX: SHUCKA, SHUCKA, SHUKA> laughing <SFX: BABY GIGGLES> all the way. ElINOR What a smart baby. Let me try to teach her something. (to Miri) Hey Miri, can you catch the ball? Elinor sits in front of Miri and rolls her a ball. She stops it, <SFX: COOING> proudly. ElINOR (CONT’D) Way to go Miri! Then she rolls it back! ELINOR (CONT’D) WHOO-HOO! Did you see that? She rolled it back! ArI (proudly) Yep, my little sister is GREAT at learning things. 3. EXT. SKATING AREA - DAY Meanwhile Olive is diligently practicing her roller-skating , slowly getting the hang of it. OLIVE (to herself) Step, step, step, roll, roll, roll... Her strides are getting bigger. OlIVE (CONT’D) Wheee , I’m really starting to get the hang of this. Suddenly, THREE BIG KIDS zip by, also on skates including LOLA (Koa’s sister). OLIVE (CONT’D) Whoooooaaa ! One of them stops and speaks to Olive. The other two big kids start doing tricks a little way off. https: // www.youtube.com / watch?v = ZwQnfKxJ2X8 . Don’t think we need Lola to say “kid” here. Lola Hey kid, you’re in my little brother Koa’s class, right? OLIVE Uh-huh. My name is Olive. Lola skates around Olive in wide graceful loops as Olive step-skates, determined. LOLA Nice to meet you Olive, I’m Lola. I see you’re a roller-skater too. OLIVE Yep. Olive skates a little more fluidly, proudly showing off. LOLA Niiiice . Suddenly Lola does a truly amazing twirl. Olive is gob-smacked. OlIVE <GASP!> How did you do THAT? LOLA (nonchalant) It just takes a little practice. Lola skates off to join her friends. LOLA (CONT’D) Keep skating, Olive. You’ll get the hang of it. BACK ON: Olive’s determined little face. OLIVE (determined) I just have to do that twirl. 4. EXT. BLANKET – DAY Elinor is sitting on the blanket, rolling the ball to Miri. NOTE: All through this scene we can catch small glimpses of Olive in the background practicing her roller-skating (she’s getting better), and trying to twirl (which she can’t do). We can also see Ari’s mom glancing up and smiling appreciatively. ElINOR Here ya go, Miri, catch the bally, bally, ball. Miri misses the ball, it rolls away. <SF: BABY UH-OH WALLA> So she turns over and she goes crawling after it. ARI Whoops, there she goes . Come on back, Miri. Miri reaches the ball, picks it up and immediately starts chewing it. Ari gets up and walks after Miri . He picks her up (or gently guid es her as she crawls ) back to the centre of the blanket. Elinor looks at her curiously. ELINOR Hmmm, I wonder why babies crawl? ARI Uhhh , to get places? Let’s have Elinor say, “No, I mean why does she crawl instead of walk.” ELINOR No, I mean crawl instead of walk. Ari looks puzzled. Ari Huh, I never thought of it before. Miri tries to crawl away, but Ari stops her. <She SFX: GIGGLES>. Elinor Look at Miri. She has two legs just like we do. But instead of walking, she crawls. ARI Hmm, maybe she hasn’t learned how to walk yet. Elinor (gets an idea) I know! Let’s teach Miri how to walk. S he’s really good at learning things. Ari Yeah, we taught her how to make funny faces, how to play the maracas and throw a ball. I’m sure we can teach her how to walk. EliNOR Come on Miri, let’s try it . The baby holds onto Elinor’s fingers as Elinor gently lifts her into a standing position. ElINOR (CONT’D) You did it, Miri, you’re standing. Now all you have to do is WALK. Miri wobbles unsteadily as Elinor holds her up and Ari demonstrates. ARI It’s not hard at all, you just put one foot in front of the other like this, see? Step. Step...whoooaa! Ari trips over the picnic basket, does his famous flip and lands on his feet. ARI (CONT’D) I meant to do that. Miri <SFX: BABY GIGGLES> as she loses her balance and sits down. ELINOR (giggling) You sure do make your sister laugh, Ari. ARI (getting an idea) I know, I’ll show her by moving our feet together. Ari lifts up his sister from behind and puts her feet on his feet as he demonstrates. ArI (CONT’D) This is how you do it, Miri, step, step. Now you try! Ari lets her go, she steps off his feet, and takes one...two steps... ARI (CONT’D) She’s doing it she’s doing it she’s... Miri balances for half a second and then lands on her bottom again, <SFX: GIGGLING>. ARI (CONT’D) ...not doing it. Seems a little awkward for Elinor to say that Miri “can’t seem to learn to walk” – it sounds adult-like. Maybe, “Aww, Miri isn’t learning to walk…” ElINOR Aww , Miri can't seem to learn to walk like she learned to throw the ball or play the maracas. ARI I wonder why not. ELINOR Hmmmm. We need more observations. 4. EXT. SKATING AREA – DAY Olive is practicing, determined. Olive Skate, skate, turn--whoops . Olive stumbles then looks over at Lola. ANGLE ON: Lola does a perfect twirl again. Change "...it's not" to "it doesn't look..." OlIVE (CONT’D) (to herself) (SIGH) Okay, Olive, it’s not that hard. Just do like Lola does- practice. Skate, skate, skate, turn...whooops . She tries it but falls. ANGLE ON: Her puzzled little face. OLIVE (CONT’D) (puzzled) Why can’t I do this? 5. EXT. BLANKET -- DAY Ari is holding a happy Miri up by the hands <SFX: BABY COOS> and as she wobbily stands. This scene has some nice observations and science, , but dialogue lines 53-82 feel a little bit stiff and a bit long. 2.5 pages of dialogue seem like a lot. Do a loosening/editing pass? Try to cut half a page or more? ArI See. She’s kinda standing when I hold her up, but when I let go of her... Miri sits on her bum and <SFX: BABY GIGGLES>. This might be another spot where it would be better to have Mrs. Bat involved and handling Miri. It didn't feel quite right for Ari to handle her in this way at Elinor's request. ElINOR That is soo interesting. Can you stand her up again, Ari? Ari does. Elinor looks closely. <SFX: HMMMM> ANGLE ON: Ari’s solid kid legs, beside Miri’s wobbly rug-rat legs. ELINOR (CONT’D) Her legs are really wobbly and wiggly compared to yours, Ari. ARI Maybe she ate too much spaghetti and now she ’s a floppy spaghetti baby . THOUGHT BUBBLE: shows Miri with eating spaghetti, then flopping over . EliNOR I’m not sure that’s the problem. THOUGHT BUBBLE BURSTS. Miri sits down. Elinor looks back and between Ari’s legs and Miri’s legs. ELINOR (CONT’D) It looks like Miri’s legs just aren’t as strong as yours, Ari. Ari looks down. Ari Well, I do have super-strong legs. Mom's re-entry here does feel a little sudden. Try a few edits: in 81, add "Maybe" at the beginning of line. Then add a line for Ari: "I think you're right, Elinor." Elinor We don't want to imply 'small' is weak... You need strong legs to walk and Miri’s are still kind of small. At this moment Ari’s Mom comes over. Then on this line, delete the second sentence. ArI’S MOM Nice observing, kids . You’re right. Then here, change it to "Is that why Miri can't walk, Mrs. Bat? Because her legs aren't strong enough?" (or something like that). ElINOR We are? ARI’S MOM Maybe say, “…and her body’s just not ready yet.” Yes, Miri’s still a baby and her body’ s just not ready. (to Ari) You couldn't walk when you were Miri’s age either, Ari, that’s why you fell down so much. ANGLE ON: Ari - MIND BLOWN. ARI Whuuuut? This reads as a fragment. Can we say, “You couldn’t talk, or run, or fly, either.” Ari’s mom Or talk, or run, or fly. ARI Or FLY? REALLY? ! I don’t remember that. ARI’S MOM But as you got bigger and grew stronger, finally your body was ready and you were able to do all those things. Elinor So when will Miri learn to walk? ARI’S MOM Very soon. She’ll get bigger and her legs will get strong enough to hold her up. Then she’ll start walking, and even running. ARI Really? As fast as me? Ar i ’s mom Maybe faster, who knows? In the meantime you kids have an important job to do. ElINOR What’s that? Suggest adding an SFX of how Olive is doing (Oof! Aww... etc.) below this line. Ari’s mom Encourage her! Help Miri practice standing and taking little baby steps so when her body IS ready, she’ll know what to do. CUT TO: Olive, at the skatepark, flops one last time . Then she gives up, gets up and skates back towards the blanket . BACK ON: Olive arrives at the blanket , defeated. NOTE: She's definitely skating better tha n she was before. ElINOR Hey, Olive. How’s the roller skating going? OLIVE Not good. Olive sits down, dejected. ARI Well, I think you’re skating great. ( Miri makes a happy <COO> ) So does Miri. OlIVE Yeah, well, I guess I can roller-skate a little, but I wanted to do a twirl, like Lola . ANGLE ON: Lola, twirling again. ElINOR Wow, that’s amazing. OlIVE I know. But when I tried to do a twirl like that, I just couldn’t. Olive gets up to demo. Agree this can be worded better, and in the present tense? Now that it's a jump instead of a twirl, we can be more explicit, e.g. "I know I just have to push up from the ground, but I just can't seem to get high enough." or something like that. OlIVE (CONT’D) Not sure we need this line. We weren't really sure what it meant. I could see what I had to do to twirl, but just couldn’t get my body to do it . She tries to twirl, stumbles a little, then sits down again. Elinor looks at Olive and back at Miri. <SFX: HMMM> . "We felt like this section could be trimmed a little to be more direct throughout. Maybe something like this. 102: Elinor - Maybe your legs aren’t ready to do a twirl just yet. Just like Miri’s aren’t ready to walk. [It feels mature for Elinor to suggest that twirling is something Olive will have to get bigger to do.] 103: Olive – What do you mean? 104: Ari – We’ve been trying to teach Miri how to take steps on her own, but her legs aren’t strong enough. Mom says she needs to grow a little more before she can really start walking. 105: Elinor – But in the meantime, we can encourage her to keep trying! That way, when her body IS ready… 106: Ari – She’ll be able to do it. 107: Olive – Oh… that explains why it’s easier for Lola. She’s older and her legs are stronger than mine. 108: Mrs. Bat – Maybe you need a little bit of encouragement too, Olive. Keep on trying! Your legs will get stronger the more you practice. 109: Elinor and Ari – Yeah! Go Olive! (start song)" Elinor Maybe twirling is something you’ll have to get a little bigger to do, Olive. ArI (catching on) Yeah, like walking. OlIVE Walking? Ari Not us walking -- Miri. We’ve been trying to teach her to walk, but mom says we have to wait until she’s a little bigger - because her body’s just not ready. ElINOR But we can encourage her to keep trying baby steps. That way, when her body IS ready... ARI She’ll be able to do it. ELINOR Hmmm. Maybe that can work for your roller skating too, Olive. OlIVE Really? You think so? ELINOR Sure! We’re not as big as those big kids, but we’re growing. ArI And in the meantime you can keep on trying, just like Miri. ElINOR And we can ENCOURAGE you. Right, Mrs. Bat? Ari’S MOM That’s right, kids. OlIVE Encourage. I like that word. SONG MONTAGE: Olive keeps skating as Ari, Elinor and Baby Miri watch and applaud INTERCUT WITH the kids helping Miri to stand but also getting her to wave, play peek-a-boo, and play with her rattle and ball. Only suggestion is to replace "Soon you'll be good to go" with "Soon you will do it" (shorter) Elinor, Ari, Olive ELINOR: Keep on trying, It’s part of the fun. And while you’re smiling Soon you’ll get it done. ARI: If you’re not quite ready You can still try now OLIVE: Soon you’ll be good to go And this is how... ALL: Baby steps, baby steps, Just take your time with baby steps. It might seem it’s taking long, But your body’s getting strong, So practice as you sing this song, And take your time with baby steps. ELINOR: You can do it, Even if it seems you can’t. You want to walk or twirl, But you fall down on your pants. ARI: You don’t have to worry, You always have a friend. OLIVE: So if you fall down, I’ll help you up again. ALL: Baby steps, baby steps, Just take your time with baby steps. It might seem it’s taking long, But your body’s getting strong, So practice as you sing this song, And take your time with baby steps. END SONG: Olive is skating gracefully around. OLIVE Okay, maybe I’m ready to twirl Olive tries, but falls. OlIVE (CONT’D) (laughing) Or not. Ari and Olive are helping Olive up, when who skates past but Lola. Lola You’re doing great , Olive. Keep on trying and y ou’ll be twirling in no time! The kids all watch as Lola twirls off into the sunset <SFX: WOOOW WALLA>. Then Olives gets up and starts practicing again as her friends run along beside her, encouraging her.. ElINOR You can do it, Olive. ARI You’ll be twirling before you --whoooaa ! Ari trips again, the lands on his feet. ArI (CONT’D) I meant to do that. Everyone <SFX: LAUGHS> especially Miri. MOVE in on her cute little face and finish with a <SFX: BABY GIGGLE AND AHHH> . FADE OUT, THE END

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 151 Baby Steps By Katherine Sandford Elinor’s Question: Why can’t we teach baby Miri to walk? Logline: Elinor and Ari are taking care of Ari’s sister Miri but they start to wonder why she can’t walk yet, meanwhile Olive gets frustrated when she can’t do her roller-skating trick. Curriculum Goals : LS4 . Understand that all animals and plants have a life cycle, can reproduce, and change and grow over time: b. Observe the growth in animals and plants c. Understand that living things grow and change over time (Elinor and her friend observe baby Miri is just still a baby, but she will grow into a big kid like them) SEP1 . Asking questions (science) and defining problems (engineering) b. Ask more complex questions about observable phenomena c. Ask and/or identify cause and effect questions that can be answered by an investigation (Elinor and Ari observe Miri’s behavior and ask why she can’t walk), SEP3 . Planning and carrying out investigations b. Compare and contrast objects and events by describing similarities and differences in detail c. Demonstrate an ability to make and test predictions based on background knowledge and experiences (Elinor and Ari contrast their abilities with Miri’s and predict that she might not be able to stand) SEP6 . Constructing explanations (science) and Designing Solutions (engineering) a. Use background knowledge experiences, and data to construct reasonable explanations and theories of natural phenomena (science) b. Look for and describe patterns and relationships in natural phenomena (science) (Elinor and her friends realize that you need to get bigger and stronger before you learn many skills). MAIN CHARACTER: Elinor, Olive, Ari, Ari's Mom. SECONDARY: Miri, Lola LOCATION: Park, Grassy Nook, Skating Area PROPS: Roller skates, stroller, blanket, book, rattle, ball. OUTLINE: Aug. 30, 2019 FIRST DRAFT: Oct. 9, 2019 SECOND DRAFT: November 6, 2019 SONG Olive Ari E Art Elinor M Ari’s mom Lol Lola Mrs. Rabbit Mrs. Bat Ari’s ARI’S MOM Elino (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 2 ELINOR WONDERS WHY OUTLINE – AUGUST 30, 2019 ] PARK -- DAY GRASSY NOOK SKATEPARK BLANKET – DAY BLANKET -- DAY SKATE SURFACE – DAY SKATEPARK -- DAY EXT. GRASSY NOOK DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY PARK CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK. [ J&D NOTES: