really cute episode 1. EXT. CAMPSITE – DAY "Total Line Count: 126 Elinor - 52 Olive - 37 Ranger Rabbit - 24 Mr Rabbit - 13 " CU: On ELINOR and OLIVE’s happy little faces, <SFX: GIGGLING LIKE MAD> in anticipation. They are tucked in a pup-tent gluing together construction paper and tissue flowers (that look very fake). Olive tapes on the last petal. ElINOR (whispering) Ready? Great updates and nice comments by everyone. I just added a few. "Some nice updates from D2! Dad feels a lot more interesting now. A couple of observations: - We still aren't clear on the value of having Olive draw the berries, rather than having the kids focus directly on the fruit they're looking at. - Mom refers to Olive and Elinor as ""girls"" a lot. We might want to pare back on this a bit." Olive nods. The kids sneak out of the tent, Elinor has a nice big home-made card, Olive has the flowers. In the near-distance they see MR. RABBIT, sitting in a camping chair, enjoying the first coffee of the morning. With a <SFX: GIGGLE and a SHHHH> they sneak up to him and… ELINOR/OLIVE HAPPY BIRTHDAY DADDY/MR. RABBIT!! Dad jumps tipping his chair and falling over. MR. RABBIT W ha? What happened? Wh o ’s there? H e stands to straighten his chair upright . Elinor It’s u s! Did we surprise you, Daddy? Mr. Rabbit Oh, sweetie, y ou sure did... ELINOR GOOD ! We want you to have a REALLY special birthday... Olive hands him the paper flowers. Olive We made the se ourselves, just for you! Mr. Rabbit They’re beautiful. (takes a big, comic SNIFF) Oooh, they smell so goooood! Olive and Elinor <SFX: GIGGLE> even more. Elinor (giggling) Those flowers don’t smell, Daddy. Olive (giggling) They’re made of paper! MR. RABBIT Oh? Well they’re still beautiful . Elinor hands him the home-made card. ELINOR And here’s your birthday card we made. Mr. Rabbit admires the card as CU: Elinor points out the drawings. Elinor (CONT’D) See, it’s you, doing all your favorite things. This is you working in the flower garden . Elinor points to her drawing - Dad in the flower garden. ELINOR (CONT’D) And this is you taking care of the flowers in our house . A nother drawing- Dad taking care of his African Violet collection . "RR walks on screen with two cups of coffee - MR had a coffee in hand when we first see him - does he throw the cup/coffe when he falls backwards? is this the same cup RR is bringing, if so how did she get it? perhaps to simplify - he isnt holding a cup at the top of the episode but instead reading " ELINOR (CONT’D) And THIS is the time we went looking for wildflower seeds. Final image: Elinor and her Dad walking in a field of wildflowers . WIDEN: Ranger Rabbit walks OS with TWO cups of coffee . RaNGER RABBIT Do I sense a pattern here? ELINOR FLOWERS ! Ranger Rabbit hands Mr. Rabbit one of the cup s of coffee and they enjoy them together . MR. RABBIT (to Ranger Rabbit) Thank you . What can I say? Elinor knows her Dad . (to Elinor) B est birthday card ever, hunny bunny. He gives her a big hug as he holds up his coffee protectively . ElINOR Olive helped. MR. RABBIT Thanks, Olive. We’re so happy you came on our camping trip . And it just so happens to be my birthday too. OlIVE Happy birthday, Mr. Rabbit. Olive high-fives Mr. Rabbit. MR. RABBIT It IS a happy birthday Olive - there’s nothing I like more than camping out in nature - ahhhhh , it’s my favorite thing. ELINOR I know something else you’d like on your birthday, Dad... BREAKFAST! MR. RABBIT Breakfast? That’s my other favorite thing - how did you know? On <SFX: GIGGLES>, we cross-fade to... 2. EXT. Cooking area - moments later Over by the cooking area (camp fire, small camp stove) Ranger Rabbit has just finished toasting the toast. RANGER RABBIT Okay, y ou girls are in charge of putting jam on the toast . ELINOR That’s the best part! As Ranger Rabbit hands Elinor the toast, Olive looks inside the jam jar. OLIVE Wha-oh, the jam jar is empty. ELINOR What? No strawberry jam? That’s Dad’s favorite thing to put on toast ! (to her Mom) Mom, we have to go to the store right now and get more jam. RaNGER RABBIT Sorry sweetie, there’s no store out here in the forest . At this moment Dad comes over. MR. RABBIT Don’t worry, Elinor . I don ’t need jam on my toast... I’ll just eat it ... plain. He <SFX: TAKES A BITE, THEN CHEWS, CHEWS, CHEWS> Then drinks a whole cup of coffee. <SFX: GULP> MR. RABBIT (CONT’D) Good thing we brought lots of coffee . Elinor and Olive look at each other. <SFX: Hmmmm>. 3. EXT. CAMPSITE – LATER The kids are rinsing the dishes in a bucket with special, safe-for-living things soap and discussing the situation. ELINOR Dad loves strawberry jam on his toast . <SIGH> I wish he could have some for his birthday. OlIVE I know, but what can we do? Ranger Rabbit overhears and comes over , figuring things out as she goes along . RaNGER RABBIT Hmm... I have an idea. Why don't we MAKE some strawberry jam. ELINOR You can MAKE jam? RANGER RABBIT Sure. Even the jam you buy in the store is made by someone. First, we need some strawberries. OlIVE But where are we going to get the strawberries if we can’t go to the store? Ranger Rabbit thinks for a beat. Strange for RR to have suggested making strawberry jam without having thought through how they'd get the strawberries. We can cut "Now that I think about it" and tighten this to: "It's strawberry season, so there should be wild strawberries growing all around." RaNGER RABBIT Now that I think about it , it’s strawberry season. That means there should be wild strawberries growing all around. OlIVE Really? Maybe "Yep, I saw a strawberry patch in the field right beside us. You know what they look like, right?" RaNGER RABBIT Yep, I think I remember there’s a strawberry patch in the field right beside us. You know what they look like , right? Elinor Sure! Big and red and juicy ! RANGER RABBIT Right! Why don't you girls go see if you can find some strawberries. I’ll tell Dad to watch the campfire, and meet you in the field in a minute. The girls react with a <SFX WALLA : YES/ YAY!> RaNGER RABBIT (CONT’D) (calling) Now remember, you can't eat berries you find without an adult there. ElINOR Got it! Location Design Note in the script - I was thinking we'd resue the lake location design we created - the strawberry field can be nearby just off the surrounding beach/dirt that circles the lake RANGER RABBIT Off you GOOO !! (DESIGN NOTE: perhaps the campsite is on a little rise overlooking the strawberry field? And Ranger Rabbit is looking out? Whatever the design it should be clear that the kids remain within Elinor’s parents ’ view.) 4. EXT. FOREST/STAWBERRY FIELD – DAY Elinor and Olive make their way through the trees and step out into the sunlight. Their faces light up with the glory of what they see before them. THEIR POV: The splendor of an early summer meadow of grasses, wildflowers, bees and butterflies all dappled in sweet morning sunshine. <SFX: Oooooh!> . Olive This is where your mom said there might be strawberries. ELINOR Let’s find ‘em ! WIDEN: Olive runs and Elinor hops all over the pretty field. ELINOR (CONT’D) (as she bounces) No strawberries here! No strawberries h ere! And no strawberries here either. OlIVE (calling) Strawberries! Where are youoooo? ELINOR (giggling) The strawberries can’t hear you Olive. They don't have ears. OLIVE Oh, right. (she sees something) Ooooh, look at these, Elinor. ANGLE ON: Some pretty white strawberry blossoms. "52-25: Why is Elinor being dismissive of Olive? Also, the way this is set up makes it seem like the flowers and the strawberries are two separate things rather than the same plant. And it's not clear what makes Elinor think the berries are strawberries in 53. A suggestion to fix - Would rather have Elinor come over to where Olive is standing in 51, then give 52 to Olive: ""Under these pretty white flowers -- berries! Could they be strawberries?"" 53: Elinor -- ""Maybe... they have the same shape as strawberries. And they have the same seeds as strawberries. But these are small and white.""" ELINOR They’re really pretty, Olive, but we’re not looking for flowers, we’re looking for strawber...oh, wait, what’s this? Elinor sees something beside the strawberry blossoms. ELINOR (CONT’D) Strawberries! I think... but these are small and white. Do you think they're strawberries? OlIVE I don't know ... they have the same shape as strawberries. But strawberries are usually bigger and red. The kids look puzzled for a beat. Then Olive looks around and spots something. She steps over and uncovers some green strawberries. Could tighten to: Look at these. Are they strawberries? OLIVE (CONT’D) Look at these ones, are THEY strawberries? ElINOR Hmmm, maybe. But these are green and even smaller. I’ve never heard of green strawberries . Elinor looks around and sees something in a differ e nt spot. ANGLE ON: big, RED berries. ELINOR (CONT’D) <GASP!> Now THESE are strawberries. Do we mean to say "They're shaped like strawberries AND they're big and red!" (The way it's currently worded makes it seem like it should read, "They look like strawberries because they're big and red," but I don't think that's the intention.) OlIVE Yes they are! They look like strawberries AND they're bigger and red. The kids look excited, but then Elinor gets curious. Feels like we should leave the question of whether they're strawberries a bit more open-ended. Maybe, "But wait, what about the green and white berries we found. What are those?" ELINOR But wait, what about the green and white berries we found. Are they strawberries too? "I'm not sure. Could they be strawberries, too? Dun dun dun, sounds like a berry mystery!" OLIVE I’m not sure. They sort of look like strawberries ... Dun, dun dun ! Sounds like a strawberry mystery! agree->. ELINOR What's the value of comparing them? Do we need this? Feels like we can just have Elinor say "We need more observations!" and leave it at that. I know, let’s compare them. W e need MORE observations! The only reason she would need to draw them would be to bring the information back to Ranger Rabbit to ask about them. Especially if they are not "picking" the berries until they know what they are. Otherwise it is better to observe the real thing. OlIVE 62-68: We still aren't clear on why Olive needs to draw each berry, since she has the real thing right in front of her. Why can't look at the actual fruit? They could just lay the berries side by side for comparison. (Elinor is already handling the fruit.) It interrupts the action to have Olive go back to the tent to get the paper, and then it requires the audience to look at the pictures rather than the real object. Would prefer to focus the observing on the actual fruit. I’ll go get some paper so I can draw them . Olive runs off back to the tent. ANGLE ON: She grabs some paper from the paper stash they were using earlier. Then she returns. As they draw, they revisit the spots where they found the strawberries . reads elinor holds the white strawberries- assuming he's not pulling them from the stem - just holding them out for Olive to draw OlIVE (CONT’D) Ok , let's see. First, we found these white strawberries. Elinor holds them while Olive sketches a white strawberry on a sheet of paper. ELINOR Then we found the small green ones. Olive flips to a new sheet and sketches a small green strawberry. OLIVE Then we found the red ones. Olive sketches a red strawberry on a third sheet. <SFX: HMM> Elinor lays the drawings side by side: White, green, red. ELINOR They’re all the same strawberry shape. OLIVE But they’re different colors and sizes. Why is that? ElinOR Hmm, maybe someone painted them different colors? Like a berry fairy. THOUGHT BUBBLE shows a fairy painting strawberries. Not sure this line adds much -- feels a little confusing to start talking about jam here. OLIVE And maybe the berry fairy makes white jam and green jam. The fairy hold up jars of white jam and red jam. The girls <SFX: GIGGLE> . THOUGHT BUBBLE BURSTS: Elinor pans across the drawings one after the other, and then double takes back as she notices the pattern. Is there something else we could say other than "That's it!"? It's not clear what Elinor is talking about, or what catches her eye. Also, again, feels like she could be making these observations directly about the fruit, rather than the drawings. ELINOR Wait a minute -- that’s IT! OLIVE A b erry fairy ? Elinor is now looking at the drawings. ELINOR No, the size. Look. She switches the order of the first two drawings. ElINOR (CONT’D) If you put the drawings this way , it looks like the strawberry is getting bigger. OLIVE Like it’s growing! ELINOR Maybe the green strawberries are like the baby strawberries. And as it grows, it changes color. OLIVE I think you could be right, Elinor. At this moment Ranger Rabbit appears with a basket in her hand. RaNGER RABBIT Hi, girls! ELINOR Mom! We found strawberries! Olive could say, "At least we think they're all strawberries. That's what we've observed." OlIVE At least we THINK they’re all strawberries. I drew pictures so we could observe them . ELINOR See? The small ones are green, the me dium -sized ones are white and the big ones are RED! OLIVE We think maybe the strawberries chang e their color as they grow. agree-> maybe remove "that's absolutly right". we always want room for questioning our thinking. Ranger RABBIT Do we want to position this as being right? Or is it enough to say, "Great scientific thinking!" That’s absolutely right . Great scientific thinking , girls ! Strawberries don't just show up big, red and juicy; they start as flowers . T hen they turn into small berries that grow over time. OlIVE Really? The white flowers change into strawberries? RANGER RABBIT Yup . ElINOR That is sooo interesting. Olive Ranger Rabbit, if these are all strawberries, can we use all of them to make jam? RaNGER RABBIT Good question, Olive. D o you think they all taste the same? OLIVE H mmm I think they should, because they’re all strawberries. But I ’m not sure . Elinor has an idea. ELINOR Oooh, we should taste them. Can we Mom? RANGER RABBIT You sure can, and I’m really glad you asked first . Elinor picks up a green strawberry and feels it. ELINOR The green ones feel very hard . (she tries to bite it but can’t) I ca n't tell what it tastes like! I t’s too hard to bite. Olive draws a face emoji with a straight mouth under the green berry. Then she picks up a white berry. OLIVE The white ones are a little soft and... (she bites it and makes a funny face ) BOY are they sour! Elinor picks up another white berry and takes a bite. Elinor REALLY sour ! Elinor ’s sour face is even funnier. The girls <SFX: GIGGLE>, then hand the berry to Mom. RANGER RABBIT Well, if I must, for science. Mom bites the berry, her Sour Face is hilarious! The girls <SFX: LAUGH LIKE MAD!> Olive makes a sour-face emoji under the white berry. Then Elinor picks up a red berry. ELINOR The red one is nice and soft. (sniffing) It REALLY smells like strawberries, and it tastes... (she bites) Mmmmmmmmm. She hands the berry to Olive who takes a bite too. OlIVE (mouth full) So yummy!! Olive draws a happy face emoji under the red berry. ELINOR It's not just the size and color that changes as it grows. The taste changes too! Maybe here she could say "Nice Observation, Strawberries turn red and juicy and sweet as they grow. When strawberries are red and sweet they are RIPE. Fruits are not ready to pick and eat until they are ripe." RANGER RABBIT Feels like a bit much to have RR praise their science skills in both 82 and 98. Could we pick one? We don't want it to start feeling forced. Also, might be clearer to say "It's called becoming ripe" rather than "turning" (as turning could sound like a word for movement rather than progression). Wow, you r scien ce skills are on a roll. You ’re right. S trawberries turn red and juicy and sweet as they grow. It’s called turning ripe. Would move 100 up here: Ripe means it's ready to eat! / Then have Olive say "Mmm. Ripe. I like that word." OLIVE Mmm. Ripe. I like that word. RANGER RABBIT It IS a good word . ElINOR Ripe means it’s ready to eat! "Now why don't you pick a big basket of ripe, red strawberries." (Add "ripe," remove "girls") RANGER RABBIT You got it! Now why don’t you girls pick a big basket of red strawberries and then we’ll make some jam for Dad ’s birthday. The girls cheer <SFX: YAY!!> and start collecting a big basket of luscious, ripe, red strawberries. CROSSFADE TO: 5 . EXT. CAMPSITE – DAY Mr. Rabbit is reading in his hammock as the girls enter with their basket full of strawberries . They tip-toe over to the cooking area without him seeing them . <SFX: SHHH WALLA> Ranger Rabbit quickly washes the berries in a bucket of water and puts them in a bowl. 103-110: This feels long and a bit procedural. Would cut 103 and 104. Start with 105: RR - OK! First step is to squish the strawberries. Squish away, girls! OlIVE So what to we do first? ElINOR Well, jam is just squished berries, right? Ranger Rabbit hands the girls a bowl of berries and a potato masher. RaNGER RABBIT That’s the first step. Squish away, girls. Olive and Elinor both grab hold of the potato masher handle and <SFX: SQUISH, SQUISH> together. Elinor takes a taste. ELINOR Hmmm , these squished strawberries are yummy, but they don’t taste like jam yet . Olive tastes a little bit too, then Elinor takes the last finger-full of jam from the jar. should this line not come from elinor since she just tasted the last of the jam from the jar? olive The jam from the jar is jammier. "That's because we're not done yet. To make our jam thicker and sweeter, we have to add some sugar and then cook it on the stove." RANGER RABBIT Yes, jam is thicker and sweeter. To make jam, we have to add some sugar and then cook it on the stove. Don't need this line since the girls have already been acting as the squishers. elinor Ooh . Ok , we'll be the squishers ... RANGER RABBIT And I’ll be the cook! MONTAGE: Elinor and Olive take the tops off the last few berries, put them in a bowl and start squishing . Then the girls add the sugar and Ranger Rabbit cooks it over the camp stove as they sing their song . Elinor/olive BOTH: Strawberry jam, strawberry jam , We’re gonna make some strawberry jam , We’ll squish up the berries and cook them on the stove , Dad’s gonna love our Strawberry Jam! OLIVE: Fruit starts out small and hard , Then i t grows and gets soft and sweet, ELINOR: When it’s nice and big and juicy , Th en it’s ripe and ready to eat. BOTH: Strawberry jam, strawberry jam, We’re gonna make some strawberry jam, We’ll squish up the berries and cook them in a can. Dad’s gonna love our Strawberry Jam! Strawberries start as flowers so bright, That turn into berries, delish ! Small green berries grow big and white! When they’re red, they’re ready to squish. BOTH: Strawberry jam, strawberry jam, We’re gonna make some strawberry jam, We’ll squish up the berries and cook them on the stove. Dad’s gonna love our Strawberry Jam! After the song, Ranger Rabbit lifts a spoon to her lips and blows to make sure it’s cool, then she tastes. RANGER RABBIT Mmmm, I think this is ready. What do you girls think? Elinor and Olive each take a taste. ELINOR Now THAT is yummy strawberry jam. Olive nods. Olive and Elinor slather it on the toast, then they sneak up on Dad once again. ELINOR/OLIVE HAPPY BIRTHDAY DADDY/MR.RABBIT!! Dad JUMPS out of his hammock, <SFX: WHOOOAAAA!!!>. (Or maybe it can spin around, cartoon-style). Elinor Look! OLIVE We made you some JAM! Dad recovers. MR. RABBIT What? You made this? ELINOR Uh-huh. Olive and I found strawberries in a strawberry patch. OlIVE And then we squished up the red berries, and cooked them into jam. ELINOR What do you think? Dad takes a big bite <SFX: CRUNCH> then... MR. RABBIT (mouth full) It’s delicious ! Elinor gives her Dad a big jammy birthday hug. MR. RABBIT (CONT’D) I think this is the BERRY best birthday I’ve ever had ! Get it? BERRY best? Elinor, Olive and Ranger Rabbit <SFX: LAUGH /GROAN > RANGER RABBIT Oh , dear. I think we’ve “jammed” enough words for the day. On <SFX: LAUGHTER/GIGGLES>, we... IRIS OUT, THE END.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 148 Strawberry Jam By Katherine Sandford Elinor’s Question: Where do strawberries come from? Logline: Elinor’s Dad’s perfect birthday camping breakfast is less-than-perfect when they run out of strawberry jam. Curriculum Goals; LS4 . Understand that all animals and plants have a life cycle, can reproduce, and change and grow over time: a. Observe the life cycle of familiar plants and animals b. Observe the growth in animals and plants c. Understand that living things grow and change over time. (Elinor and Olive observe the life cycle of the strawberry plant) SEP1 . Asking questions (science) and defining problems (engineering) a. Demonstrate curiosity about the greater world outside of their local environmentb . Ask more complex questions about observable phenomena (Elinor and Olive explore the strawberry field near their campground and ask questions about what they find.) SEP3 . Planning and carrying out investigations a. Identify and use a greater variety of tools to extend the senses for observing, measuring, and recording data about objects and events b. Compare and contrast objects and events by describing similarities and differences in detaild . With guidance, plan and conduct simple investigations using simple tools. e. Design and build a solution to a simple problem (engineering)(Elinor and Olive use the magnifying glass and notebook to examine the strawberries, then decide to make strawberry jam). SEP4 . Analyzing and interpreting data a. Collect, describe, and record observations in greater detail and in various ways b. Use the 5 senses and simple tools to gather and record data c. Record observations to describe patterns and/or relationships in the natural and designed world(s) in order to answer scientific questions and solve problems. (Elinor and Olive collect, observe, describe and record the various stages of strawberries.) MAINS: Elinor, Olive, Mr. Rabbit, Ranger Rabbit SETTINGS: Campsite, Cooking Area, Forest/Strawberry Field PROPS: Paper flower, birthday card, coffee cup, camping gear, strawberry blossoms, strawberries (green, white, red), magnifying glass, notebook and coloured crayons, bowl, potato masher, camp stove, can, toast. FIRST DRAFT: 04-Sept-19 SECOND DRAFT: 30-Sept-19 POLISH: 07-Nov-19 Mr. Rabbit ELINOR OLIVE RANGER RABBIT Elinor/olive Dad Eln (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E ELINOR WONDERS WHY ] CAMPSITE – DAY CAMPSITE – LATER STAWBERRY FIELD – DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.