Good job, this is great stuff. Just a few notes from us. Thanks Ext. Forest - pirate ship log - daytime This is a super fun episode. Love the visuals, dialogue and cute gags throughout On a sunny afternoon, ELINOR and OLIVE are playing make-believe pirates in the forest. Elinor wears a PAPER PIRATE HAT and Olive wears an EYE-PATCH. They’re playing on a FALLEN LOG that resembles a ship: TANGLED ROOTS create an elevated poop deck, a branch sticks up in the middle like a mast and supports a BED SHEET SAIL. Another branch grows off the bow like a bowsprit, and the kids have hung a PIRATE FLAG from it. Elinor steers a WHEEL MADE OF BENT STICKS at the stern, while Olive scans the horizon with her SPYGLASS MADE OF BARK. Consider opening the episode on a series of close ups as they set up the ship: the sail unfurls, they tie the flag, the steering wheel is mounted. Just a suggestion. Elinor (pirate voice) A really cute set up/play area. Captain Elinor steers the pirate ship through the open seas, ready for adventure! Would kids know what "uncharted" means? Also, walruses are mammals (so they talk in our world), so maybe "fishes" would be better. Olive (pirate voice) First Mate Olive keeps an eye out for uncharted islands... Oooo ! And walruses! Arrr ! Elinor looks at her curiously. Arrr? What does that mean? Elinor “ Arrr ?” What’s that mean? Not sure kids will know "lingo". Consider, "That's how pirates talk" Olive "lingo" is not usually in a preschoolers vocabulary. She could say "It's pirate talk" It’s pirate lingo. I don’t actually know what it means, but pirates say “ Arrr ” all the time. Instead of "Got it, arrr!" consider "Arrr! Got it!" elinor Ok , got it... I mean... (Pirate voice) Got it, Arrr ! After line 5 - haha very cute The girls <GIGGLE> and Olive raises her spyglass up to her patch-covered eye. She catches herself and switches her patch to the other eye and looks through her spyglass. Olive Still no sign of Ari... shouldn’t he be back already? This line feels odd, like it's too adulty. Consider something like, "I'm sure he'll be back soon. He went to hide our treasure chest!" Elinor He will be just as soon as he’s hidden our treasure chest. Olive Oooo ... can you pleeeeease tell me what the treasure is, Elinor? This line is a little oddly constructed. Consider something like, "It's a surprise! You'll have to wait until we find it and open it." Elinor (sing-song) We’ll have to find it first and open it to see. i dont think this should be a question, she should just comment. especially after they discussed it in line 7 and 8 Olive (Gasp) A real pirate treasure hunt? Now that’s an adventure! The girls <GIGGLE> and resume playing. Ext. Forest - various locations - contINUOUS CLEARING - CU: A LUNCH BOX WITH A HAND DRAWN PIRATE LOGO on it. REVEAL: ARI, wearing a BANDANA, bounds through a clearing, carrying the box. He notices a SHRUB WITH YELLOW FLOWERS surrounded by SEVERAL SHRUBS WITH RED FLOWERS. He stops to smell the yellow flowers and spots a path behind them. He heads off down it. PATH - Ari runs down a forest path towards a LARGE NATURALLY STRIPED ROCK SHAPED SOMEWHAT LIKE A HORSE (ZEBRA ROCK). He climbs the rock to scan his surroundings. He sees the path opens into a field not far away, so he flies down off the rock and continues along the path. FIELD / STREAM - Ari runs across a field and stops at a shallow stream. He can’t see anyway to cross it at first, but soon spots a PATH OF STONES across it just down the bank. He runs to the path and hops carefully over the stones. He almost loses his balance, catches himself, and keeps going. Ext. knoll - continuous Ari runs up a small knoll with a TREE on top. He stops to take in a beautiful view of the forest and Animal Town below. It might be a bit weird to name the rock after a mammal animal (since they talk and walk upright in our world). A zebra is ok, but it might be weird that they ride it later on. Consider something else? Ari Woooah ! What a view! (Squinting) is that my house? I think that Ari seeing his house might have been put in because I commented on the outline that we don't want to have Ari feel "lost in the forest" too far from 'home'. I think it is fine to look down on the town we just want to make his mood light enough that we don't have kids at home stressing out that Ari is lost in the deep deep forest all by himself. (noticing the tree) Desription during ‘path’ - ari is carrying the lunch box so we wont be able to fly/flap his arms - suggest he opens his wings and hovers down to path to continue. That being said, we get to the stream and he doesnt see a way to cross. We have had him carrying stuff with his feet so he can fly so technically he could grab the lunchbox with feet and just fly across. Perhaps we dont make it about him not be able to see a way across but he’s just walking/skipping along by the bank os the stream and then crosses at the rock path. We have a beautiful BG of the forest edge looking down to the town that we can use here - its from the main title opening - but its of the downtown core - so suggest we remove the line about possibly seeing his house This is the perfect hiding spot for pirate treasure. He puts the lunch box at the base of the tree and bounds off. Ext. forest - pirate ship log - a little later Elinor steers the ship as Olive keeps look-out. ELINOR Any sign of Treasure-Keeper Ari? Olive scans. SPYGLASS POV moves across the forest before finding Ari bounding down the trail towards them. Olive Hmmm .... (spotting him) There he is! Ahoy! Arrr ! Ari arrives and looks up at his friends on the ship. Ari Hey, my name’s Arrr-i , not Arrr . Elinor (Giggle) Welcome back! (then, pirate voice) Treasure-Keeper Ari, did you hide the pirate treasure chest? ARI You bet. I found a great place for it too. I can’t wait to show you. OLIVE First, we should make a map to get there. Ari A map? What do we need that for? A kid would think they needed a treasure map to Mark the spot with X -This could be the nieve explination early on and then the kids could discover maps are for more than marking treasure with an X Elinor Maps show us where places and things are. It can help us find our way to the treasure. Olive Besides, all pirates need a treasure map. Olive pulls a PIECE OF PAPER and CRAYONS out of her satchel. She lays the paper down and Ari and Elinor gather around. In the BOTTOM LEFT of the map, she draws the PIRATE SHIP LOG. Add "…the treasure, Ari?" to the end OLIVE (CONT’D) Here’s where we are now... the Pirate Ship Log. Where did you hide the treasure? Add "I hid it in a tree…" to the beginning ARI In a tree on a hill not too far from here. In the TOP RIGHT of the map, Olive draws a LARGE TREE WITH A LUNCH BOX at its base. Elinor Great! How do we get there? Ari proudly points back down the path he came. ARI (confidently) We go that way! And then... (losing confidence) um ... down another path, I think... and, um ... And then I’m not sure... OLIVE Ari! Did you forget where you hid our treasure chest? Suggest ari ends his line with ‘arrrr’ as if a sigh ARI No! I remember exactly where I hid it... I just forgot how to get there. I think we need to expand the “establish the problem” element (l24-27). The kids just state the problem and then Philbert comes in right away to deliver the solution. We need a bit of time for the problem to settle in: let the kids try to solve it themselves first, so that the audience feels like it needs Philbert’s solution. After line 27, have them brainstorm some ideas, e.g.: We could try looking in all the trees in the forest? That would take too long. We could try asking the birds? They ask a bird, but get no answer. Oh no, how are we going to find our treasure? Then Phibert shows up. OLIVE Uh oh. How will we find our treasure if Ari can’t remember the way? As the kids stop and think, their friend PHILBERT THE SQUIRREL arrives at the pirate ship. Philbert Ahoy! Permission to come aboard your pirate ship? Elinor Of course Philbert, c’mon up! Philbert scrambles up onto the log. He reaches into a HOLE on the side of the log and pulls out a JAR OF ACORNS. olive Woah ! Where did that come from? Feel like the "Squirrels are good at hiding and finding things" lesson is getting a little lost here. Change the last sentence in this line to something like, "Us squirrels are really good at hiding things and finding them later." PHILBERT These acorns? I hid them here awhile ago so my little brothers wouldn’t eat them. (proudly) Squirrels are expert hiders and finders. Ari scrambles up the log and peers into the hole. ari But how did you remember you hid them right there ? Change to something like, "Oh, squirrels always hide things near landmarks so we can find them later." Philbert I always hide things near landmarks so I can find them later. Elinor What’s a landmark? Philbert A landmark is something in the area that’s different and easy to see. It helps you remember where things are. Olive gets it and flourishes to the log. Olive (excitedly) Like this giant log! Can we change all the "Ya"'s in this draft to plain "Yeah"'s? :) PHILBERT Ya! This is a great landmark because it’s huge and looks like a pirate ship. You can’t miss it. "I think we can squeeze the catchphrase in here. Replace line 38 with: 38: ELINOR Ohhh, that is so interesting. Elinor has an idea. ELINOR Ari… do you remember seeing anything different on your way to hide the treasure? Any landmarks?" Elinor (to ari) Hmmm ... do you remember seeing anything different on your way to hide the treasure, Ari? Any landmarks? Ari considers. perhaps we make it clear that he left the log/ship with the treasure to go hide it...so he can say something about 'when i left here to ide the treasure, i remember passing a shrub with yellow flowers. Otherwise we dont know if he was coming from his house and hid the treasure before coming to the log/ship..therefore he’s back track and get to the hiding spot first. Ari Ya I think I did... (remembering) ...like the shrub with yellow flowers! Elinor Ari! If we can find the landmarks you saw, then we’ll find the path back to the treasure. "Hmm, it's not quite clear how she'd know when they were getting close. Let's change this line to something like, OlIVE Great idea! And I can add them to the map on the way so we don't forget them. " Olive Great idea! I can add them to the map on the way so we’ll know when we’re getting close. maybe have Philbert offer to help find the treasure since afterall he is good a hiding and seeking Philbert Can I join your pirate crew, I’d like to come too. Elinor hops up and offers Philbert a salute. after 43 philbert can respond with an 'arrrr' back Elinor (pirate voice) We always have room for more pirates. Welcome aboard Navigator Philbert. Arrr ! Olive pulls a RED SASH out of her SATCHEL and hands it to Philbert who ties it to his waist. Ari and Olive salute him, and he salutes back. I think we can also squeeze in "Now let's go find our treasure. We need more observations!" to the end of her line here. Elinor (CONT’D) Now let’s go find our treasure! Olive / ari / philbert Aye aye Captain! The kids run off down the path <HOOTING AND LAUGHING>. Ext. Forest - clearing - continuous The kids run into the clearing from earlier with the yellow shrub surrounded by red ones. Ari excitedly points it out. Ari Yo ho ho ! There it is! The shrub with yellow flowers. I knew I went this way. Olive looks at the shrub, unsure. Olive How can you be sure that’s the right shrub? There are shrubs with yellow flowers all over the forest. Do kids know "Clearing"? Maybe just "place" ARI Not in this clearing. All the other shrubs here have red flowers, see? The kids move in for a closer look. Same here ELINOR He’s right! Every shrub in this clearing has red flowers except that one. Olive re-evaluates the scene, looking at the yellow shrub among the red ones. It stands out clearly. OLIVE That yellow shrub sure is hard to miss. It’s the only one like that. "Add a line after 51 for Olive: OLIVE I'll put it on the map!" Philbert What a perfect landmark! It’s different and easy to see. Olive puts her map down on a FLAT ROCK and her friends gather round to look. She draws the YELLOW SHRUB WITH A FEW RED SHRUBS AROUND IT near the Pirate Log. She connects the two landmarks with a DOTTED LINE. She traces the path they’ve taken so far. Olive Ok ... so we started at the Pirate Log here... and took this path to the Yellow Shrub. Elinor Where did you go from here, Ari? Ari thinks about it. Ari Hmm... I remember seeing the yellow flowers and wondering if they smell different than the red flowers... He walks towards the yellow shrub as his friends follow. Ari (CONT’D) So I leaned in for a big sniff... All four friends lean in and take a <BIG SNIFF>. Ari looks beyond the shrub... Ari (CONT’D) And that’s when I saw that path. I went that way. "Consider a little reminder that they are looking for the treasure: ELINOR Great job, Ari. We're getting closer to the treasure! Pirate crew…. Full steam ahead!" Elinor Great job Treasure-Keeper Ari! Pirate Crew... Full steam ahead! The kids bound off down the trail. Ext. forest - path - conTINUOUS Now deeper in the forest, Ari leads the kids down the path. He scans ahead and to the sides, looking for something. Not sure we need this line. Delete? Olive We’ve been going down this path for awhile Ari... Elinor Are you sure the treasure chest is this way? Ari I think this is the path. I just need to find something to be sure... Olive holds up her spyglass. You could add a little moment here for humor after this line. Maybe Ari tries the spyglass but can't quite get it right (he keeps putting it over his closed eye), or maybe he puts it over his eyes the wrong way, or maybe he tries one end, then decides it's the wrong end and flips it over. Olive Would using my spyglass help? Ari spots something down the trail and perks up. Ari Aha there it is! He runs off and his friends follow. ZEBRA ROCK stands out obviously on the side of the path. Ari runs towards it. Ari (CONT’D) I knew we were on the right path! I remember this rock from before. Easy to see instead of "hard to miss" Philbert Woah ! That rock is hard to miss. ELinor Yeah it sure is tall . Olive And stripe-y . Ari climbs up onto it and sits on the back as if riding it. Ari I call it Zebra Rock. Doesn’t it look like a zebra? Olive, Philbert and Elinor share a curious look, unsure. This feels odd here, I would suggest removing this line. Elinor its a bit odd that she responds this way to his question - maybe 'hmmm...a zebra? i think we need more observations!' <-agree We need more observations! They circle the rock, examining it from different sides. Olive Now that you mention it... (pointing) That does look like a zebra’s head. Philbert And where Ari is sitting is shaped like a zebra’s body... Elinor And it does have zebra stripes... (excitedly) Wow, it really does look like a zebra! "Consider adding a line for Olive after this line: OLIVE I'll add it to the map!" Philbert What a great landmark. And it’s easy to remember because you gave it a great name: Zebra Rock. Olive opens up her map and starts to draw as her friends gather around to watch. She adds ZEBRA ROCK to the map and draws a DOTTED LINE from the Yellow Shrub to it. She traces the next leg of their journey. Olive So, after the yellow shrub we went down the forest path until we got to Zebra Rock. Where to next Ari? Ari considers for a moment, then snaps his fingers as he remembers something. He flies to the top of Zebra Rock and looks down the trail from the head of the zebra. Ari The trail opened up into a field not far from here... This way! He flutters down from the rock and runs down the trail. Elinor Yes! We’re on the right path. (then, pirate voice) Our treasure must be nearrrr ! The kids run off after Ari. Ext. field - stream - continuous The kids bound out of the forest path into a WIDE FIELD. They run around playing and <LAUGHING>. Elinor (pirate voice) What lies ahead, First Mate Olive? Olive moves her eye-patch from one eye to the other and looks through her spyglass. SPYGLASS POV: She spots a SHALLOW STREAM further in the field. Olive A stream! I see a stream! could possibly have philbert comment on ari's 'jokes'. to olive 'does he always make jokes like that?'. olive 'yup!' Ari Follow me! Full stream ahead! Ari runs off and leads his friends to the stream. The stream is too wide for them to cross. The kids (not Ari) look across to the other side and wonder what to do. OLIVE Hmm... we can’t go any further. Elinor Ya this stream’s way too wide for us to cross. Are you sure you came this way Ari? due to my note earlier when ari arrived here. he could explain how he couldnt fly across because he was holding the treasure, so he had to find a way across as well Ari Sure I’m sure! I couldn’t see a way to cross when I first saw this stream either. But then I found... He points down the bank and reveals the STONE PATH to his friends. Ari (CONT’D) ...That path of stones. The friends move over to the stone path. Ari (CONT’D) I remember using this to cross the river, so I know I came this way. philbert This path is another great landmark. It’s the only way to cross the river around here, so it’s easy to see and remember. elinor Let’s add it to the map. Olive opens her map and adds a drawing of the STONE PATH CROSSING A STREAM IN A FIELD. She connects it to Zebra Rock with a DOTTED LINE. She traces the path as her friends watch. Olive So after Zebra Rock we crossed the field until we came to the Stone Path at the stream. Where did you go then, Ari? Ari I hopped across the stones, then hid our treasure on the other side. ha! cute. ELinor We’re so close! Eeeee ! I mean... Arrrr ! olivE / ARI / PHILBERT Arrrr ! Ari bounds across the stone path, followed by his friends. Ext. knoll - conTINUOUS The kids run up the knoll and stop at the top to take in the vista. The kids stare in awe, Ari watches them. Ari (proud of himself) Pretty cool, right? Told you I found a great place to hide the treasure. Olive moves her eye-patch to the other eye and looks through her spyglass. SPYGLASS POV: ARI’S HOUSE, with HIS PARENTS relaxing in the front yard. due to my earlier note about design. lets remove this. maybe she can instead be in awe that she can see the whole town from here OLIVE Ari I can see your house from here. Ari (Laughs) I knew it. Ari reaches down to the base of the tree and hoists up the LUNCH BOX. Ari ( drumroll ) (CONT’D) Babababa dum bada dum dum ! Ta da ! perhaps one of them says 'Arrrr' Elinor / olive / PHILBERT The treasure! / We found it! / Yes! OLIVE I’m so excited, we finally get to see what’s inside! Ari puts the lunch box down and the kids drop to their knees in front of it. They share an excited look. They reach out together and open the box to reveal a YUMMY SNACK of APPLE SLICES, GRAPES, AND NUTS! "Consider adding a line before 96 of one of the kids (Ari? Or Olive?) saying, ""Snacks!"" For 96, is there a way to make this line about friendship and/or sharing? Just to introduce that theme and set it up for the final moment in the episode. Maybe something that rings of ""treasures are only fun if you can share them with friends."" or something like that." Elinor (Giggles) I thought a pirate snack would be a great prize after treasure hunting. Philbert pulls out some nuts. "Make this line a little more natural, it feels a little adulty. Consider something like, PHILBERT (surprised) You hid nuts too? Wait… Do you have little brothers too?" Philbert (Laughs) Looks like I’m not the only one that hides nuts... Do you have little brothers too? The kids help themselves to snacks and chow down. Olive opens up her map and places it on the lunch box. She connects the STONE PATH to the TREE with a DOTTED LINE and traces their entire journey with her finger. "Change, ""With this map…"" to ""Now that we have this map…"" and consider adding a line for Ari after line 98: ARI Maps are awesome!" Olive this means philbert has been carrying the jar all this time. suggest we add a note when we first see him that he has a satchel of backpack. and when he grabs the jar from the log, or when he's invited to join them, he put it into the backpack With this map, we know how to get here again. From the Pirate Log, we go to the Yellow Shrub. Then down the path to Zebra Rock and across the stream on the Stone Path. Philbert places his jar of nuts under the tree. Philbert And now there’s another treasure for us to find next time we come. Elinor hops to her feet. Fun song! Elinor (pirate voice) C’mon Pirate Crew! Back to our ship! The kids take in the view one last time before running off. Ext. Forest - various LOCATIONS The kids sing a PIRATE SHANTY as they retrace their steps back to the ship. ELINOR: Yo ho me mateys ! REST: A pirate crew are we! ELINOR: Yo ho me mateys , REST: We sail on the high seas! ALL: We search for treasure high and low, We check our map as we go, Landmarks help us chart our way, To find our prize without delay. They cross back over the river on the Stone Path. OLIVE: The Stone Path helps us cross the creek, To find the treasure that we seek! They pass Zebra Rock, Ari climbing it again. ARI: Up and over Zebra Rock, While out on our treasure walk! They emerge into the clearing and stop to smell the yellow shrub. PHILBERT: Past the yellow flowered shrub, Hiked our treasure-searching club! ALL: We look for things that stick out, So we know we’re on our route, Landmarks that catch our eyes, Will help us find our hidden prize! ELINOR: Yo ho me mateys ! REST: A pirate crew are we! ELINOR: Yo ho me mateys , REST: We sail on the high seas! Ext. Forest - pirate ship log - conTINUOUS The kids arrive back at their pirate ship as they finish their song. They climb aboard and Elinor takes her place at the wheel, Olive scans the horizon with her spyglass and Ari makes adjustments to the sail. "This line feels a little odd too. Maybe something like, ELINOR Ready to set sail? PHILBERT Wait, you never told me what your ship is called. Does it have a name? ELINOR Yup, it has the best name for this crew of pirates. The Friend-ship. Arrr!" Philbert Elinor? You never told me what your pirate ship is called. Does it have a name? cute Elinor It sure does. (then, in Pirate Voice) The Friend-Ship. Arrrr ! No more notes after this line. Nice job, thanks! OliVE / ARI / PHILBERT Arrrr ! The kids <LAUGH> and resume their pirate play as we IRIS OUT. END.

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 145 "Pirate Treasure!" By: Tom Berger Logline : While playing pretend pirates in the forest, Ari forgets the route to their hidden treasure. With the help of Philbert Squirrel, they learn how to use landmarks and make a map to find it. Curriculum Goals: LS1: Record observations about a plant’s physical appearance. (Elinor and her friends illustrate what features make a landmark unique and mark them on a map). ES: Understand that maps show where things are located. Develop a model (drawing, map, diorama, etc.) to represent the shapes and kinds of landforms (hills, valleys, riverbanks, dunes) and bodies of water (streams, lakes, ponds, rivers, oceans) in an area.(Olive draws a map that includes landmarks. NOTE: this is not in our core curriculum but was suggested for inclusion by PBS ) ES1: Explore and describe the characteristics of earth materials such as sand, rocks, soil, water and air (as above). SEP2: Developing and using models, using simple models to support explanations (Olive makes a map to illustrate the locations of the landmarks and treasure). MAIN CHARACTERS: Elinor, Olive, Ari, Philbert PROPS: Pirate hat, eye patch, bedsheet, lunchbox , bandana, pirate sash, spyglass, pirate log, shrub with yellow flowers, shrubs with red flowers, zebra rock, jar of nuts LOCATIONS: Forest, Forest Clearing, Forest Path, Stream, Hill with Tree First Draft: Aug 8, 2019 Elinor Olive ElinOR / olive Ari Elinro Philbert Philbertg Olive / ari / philbert Elinot Elinor / OLIVE / philbert Philbery ElinOR / OLIVE / PHILBERT / ari (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) (like a pirate) (proud of himself) (pirate voice) (getting it) INT EXT I/E FOREST - PIRATE SHIP LOG FOREST - VARIOUS LOCATIONS FOREST - KNOLL FOREST - FIELD FOREST - PATH FOREST - RIVER DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY DAYTIME A LITTLE LATER CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.