Very nice. Let's keep the focus on the ptarmigan's feet getting larger because of the feathers, and where possible minimize side information about changing color or keeping warm. 1. Int. Mz. Mole’s Classroom -- Winter Day Cute - after line 7 - we will show the changing of the bird feathers and growing toenails by having pages flips quickly creating a flipbook style through images Looking out the classroom window, a bird feeder hangs nearby. The scenery is blanketed in white snow. A cardinal lands on the bird feeder and quickly flies away. I like this interstitial. The last line of line 7 has too many words that preschoolers might not understand. I’d also love to see mz mole modeling good teacher behavior here by having her ask questions while she reads. Something like “what changes do you notice?” Would be great Inside the classroom, Mz. Mole puts on some strange fluffy white snowshoes over her feet. Olive Mz. Mole? What are those? These are my ptarmigan feet, for walking on the snow. Mz. Mole Oh, I’m just putting on my ptarmigan feet before I go outside. The kids all look at each other, confused. aRI Your what? Mz. Mole My ptarmigan feet. I made them myself. ELINOR Mz. Mole, (giggling) what are ptarmigan feet? Oh they are so much fun. Let's read about them! MZ. MOLE Oh, let me show you. Mz. Mole takes out her storybook and opens the front cover. CLOSE ON the storybook which shows a ptarmigan, a brown bird about the size of a chicken, standing on the ground in the summer arctic tundra. 2. THE STORYBOOK The storybook comes to life and the ptarmigan begins to walk around, pecking at berries on a short bush. "Remove ""that lives in very cold places"" since you talk about summer in the next line. Typo in description inside this line: ptarmigan's. In description inside this line, add how we'll show that the weather is changing. Do the pages flip and in each flip we see the background get more covered in snow? Or do cutouts of snowflakes start falling? ""Every fall, this bird transforms to become a champion of the snow"" is a bit adult. Instead: ""When it starts to snow, the ptarmigan changes"" Overall: A ptarmigan is a bird, an amazing bird with amazing feet. In the summer, the ptarmigan's feet have no feathers. But watch this! When it starts to snow, the ptarmigan and its feet change!" MZ. MOLE (CONT’D) A ptarmigan is a bird, an amazing bird that lives in very cold places. In the summer, the ptarmigan is brown, and its feet have no feathers. But watch this! With a quick flap of its wings, the ptarmigan’s hops up on a rock. As it stands, its brown feathers gradually become white. Every fall, this bird transforms to become a champion of the snow. "It's feet turned white and fluffy!" Elinor It changed color! """And look at its feet"" -> ""But my favorite part is the feet"" In description below, add how we'll see the bird change. Turning of pages? Just changes?" MZ. MOLE That’s right! Before the winter snows arrive, the ptarmigan grows white feathers all over its body. And look at its feet! CLOSE ON the ptarmigan’s feet grow white feathers all over, and its toenails grow a bit longer. "It's feet are bigger now" Olive They’re turning white! "Overusing ""that's right!"". Replace with ""Yes!"" Change to: Yes! The ptarmigan grows fluffy feathers on its feet, and its toenails grow longer." MZ. MOLE That’s right! The ptarmigan grows fluffy feathers all over its feet, and its toenails grow longer as well. Ari Why does it do that? Snowflakes begin to fall and the scenery turns white with snow. The ptarmigan hops down from the rock onto the snow and begins walking. The white bird now blends in with the snowy backdrop, and it leaves footprints in the snow as it walks. "Add ""having"": Bigger feet make it easier to walk on top of the snow. It’s like having a built-in pair of snowshoes! Maybe include the Gael character and have Elinor say: ""Just like Gael. He has huge paws.""" Mz. MOLE Bigger feet make it easier to walk on top of the snow. It’s like a built-in pair of snowshoes! 3. INT. CLASSROOM -- Winter Day Mz. Mole closes the storybook, picks up a bag of birdseed and heads outside. Instead of laughing at the end, have the kids walla "Wow! Cool! Look at that!" MZ. MOLE (CONT’D) Now, let’s see how my ptarmigan feet work! Out the window, the kids watch Mz. Mole walk on the snow and fill the bird feeder with seed. The kids all <SFX: LAUGH>. End

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ELINOR Wonders why EWW129 interstitial: Mz . Mole - Walking on snow Written by ROBERT SAMS FOLLOWS: The Unsinkable lynx CURRICULUM: Mz . Mole and the kids take a close look at the ptarmigan, a chicken-sized bird that has built in snowshoes for walking on top of the snow. LS2: Animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs. FIRST DRAFT: December 20, 2019 SENOR TAPIR Kids ELINOR SALLY BEAVER Ari Mz. Mole Olive (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 FOLLOWS: "THE AMAZING EXPANDABLE CLUBHOUSE" EXT PARK -- DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.