Line Count - 128 (Need to cut 8 lines) Ari P - 30 Olive P - 24 Elinor P - 33 Farmer Bear P - 28 Ranger Rabbit P - 7 (cut two lines) 1. EXT SUGAR SHACK -- DAY really nice first draft - kids are fully engaged. i especially like when they get to the grove but they dont see anything happening with the trees and start to investigate further I do love pancake day! There is a lot of opportunity for positional language here. "For the top sheet: - Elinor's question: Seems like the more appropriate question is ""Where does syrup come from?"" since Elinor doesn't know from the get-go that trees make sap. - Let's add SEP6 - designing solutions to a problem" It’s a bright, late winter morning in Animal Town, and several families have gathered at Farmer Bear’s farm for a community event called Pancake Day. We see kids running around and parents chatting (including the Rabbits and others). ELINOR, ARI and OLIVE are walking around and talking excitedly about the day. ARI Awesome! Pancake Day is finally here. Can we have her say ‘Yeah, Ari. I love it. Mrs. 2 Gorilla makes the best pancakes.’ Removing ‘pancake day’ otherwise they all mention ‘pancake’ too many times and reads a bit unatural OLIVE Yeah, Ari. I love Pancake Day. Mrs. Gorilla makes the best pancakes. We see MRS. GORILLA off to one side with an outdoor griddle, mixing ingredients in a bowl with some kids helping her. Really nice visuals created with the thought bubbles ELINOR could we had some qualitative language "this much more, or higher or bigger" There are lots of opportunities is this script to demonstrate that early postitional and computational language. Mmm , I can’t wait to eat a big stack of them. They all lick their lips and pat their bellies as they share a joint thought bubble of a SHORT stack dripping with syrup. ELINOR (CONT’D) I’m going to eat THIS many pancakes. She uses her paws to show the distance between her belly and neck. The thought bubble stack grows to that size. Let's make sure Olive doesn't deliver "Yeah, Elinor?" in a snarky fashion. By the way, we know it's a general rule of thumb to introduce the characters' first names in the opening scene of each story, but at a certain point we don't think we need to force it -- especially when it comes to Elinor. She's the main character, and kids will know who she is based on the opening title sequence. OLIVE Yeah, Elinor? Well, I’m going to eat THIS many pancakes. She gestures with her trunk as high as it can go. The thought bubble stack grows. ARI Well, Olive, I’m going to eat THIS many! He flies up to show a ridiculously high stack, and the thought stack gets super tall and falls over. They all <GIGGLE>. The kids continue walking, and we see several animals helping set up the tables and bring out plates. ELINOR It’s great that everyone is helping out for Pancake Day. We pan over to see SALLY BEAVER and MRS. BEAVER cranking out wood furniture amazingly quickly. ARI There’s Sally Beaver and her mom making tables and chairs for everyone. OLIVE They are SO good at that. ELINOR It’s amazing! Olive looks around. This line doesn’t read kid-like - sounds too mature olive Agree w/Kevin's notes and suggestions for 11-12 And it’s great of Farmer Bear to have Pancake Day here in her farm. the conversation between 11 and 12 doesnt sound like young kids. maybe instead one of them says 'lets go ask farmer bear when we can eat!' then others agree in excitment bu when they look around, they cant find her ari like Kevin suggestion Yeah, where IS Farmer Bear, anyway? I haven’t seen her. The kids look around for a beat. Elinor I don’t know. Let’s go ask my mom. The kids walk over to Ranger Rabbit, who’s chatting with some other animals. ElinOR (CONT’D) Hi, Mom! RangER RABBIT Oh, hi, Elinor. ELINOR Have you seen Farmer Bear? Ranger Rabbit looks around thoughtfully. RANGER RABBIT Oh. She’s probably off making the syrup for the pancakes. OlIVE She’s making the syrup? Ari Whoa, you can make syrup?? I thought you just got it at the store! Might be more accurate for RR to say, "Syrup comes from maple trees." (Because it's not made from the tree itself, so saying "made" might be confusing. Seems like this feeds into some of the kids' confusion over the next few lines.) Flagging for Sara. RANGER RABBIT <BENIGN CHUCKLE> Well, somebody has to make the syrup, Ari. Syrup is made from maple trees. Farmer Bear has a grove of them right over there. She points to a nearby grove of maple trees and the kids look over. Ranger Rabbit goes back to her conversation. olive Huh, I never thought about where syrup comes from. Elinor Yeah, it comes from trees? That is SO interesting! Ari has an idea. Ari Let’s go check out the syrup trees. Maybe we’ll find Farmer Bear there! Elinor gets excited. ELINOR Yeah, we need MORE observations! 2. Ext. Maple tree grove - day The kids run across the farm and enter the maple tree grove. Olive looks around a bit. lets remove her 'hmm' - since Elinor starts the same way in the next line Olive Hm , I don’t see Farmer Bear anywhere. Elinor is curiously studying a maple tree. Elinor Also flagging for Sara here -- should this not say "Made from these trees," either? Seems like w ecould wait to talk about "making" the syrup until Farmer Bear's line 46. Hmmm ... My mom said that syrup is made from these trees, but I don’t see where it comes from. Olive and Ari join in her curiosity. OLIVE You’re right... Maybe the syrup comes from a fruit that the tree makes? ELINOR Maybe... but none of the trees here have any fruit. The kids look at the trees around them, and none of them have any fruit. ELINOR (CONT’D) Maybe they make the syrup from the leaves of the tree? OlivE Hmmm , but none of the trees have any leaves either. The trees are all leaf-less. Ari joins in. Might be more kid-friendly if Ari says "Maybe the syrup is ON the tree." Ari Maybe the syrup comes from the tree itself! There’s only one way to find out... He walks over to the tree and... licks it. love this OliVE Ari! Ari processes the taste, smacking his lips. After a beat, he makes a face. ARI Nope, the tree doesn’t taste like syrup. The kids <GIGGLE>. Ari rolls the taste in his mouth. Ari (CONT’D) Hmm, now my mouth tastes like tree bark. Olive Do you want to go back and get some water, Ari? suggest 'Nope, I have just the thing. An emergency juice box!' ARI Nope, I have just the thing. I have an emergency juice box! He pulls a juice box out of his pocket and opens it so the straw is sticking out. He slurps noisily. <SFX: SLURPING>. We get a clear shot of juice flowing up the straw. Ari (CONT’D) Ahhh ... that’s better. Olive <GIGGLES> Ari, you’re always so prepared. Elinor (still looking at the tree) Hmm, where does the syrup come from? At that moment, FARMER BEAR rolls up with a wagon and a big pot. FARMER BEAR Oh, hello kids! elinor Hi, Farmer Bear! Olive We were looking for you! FARMER BEAR Oh? How come? OLIVE We heard you were making syrup, and we wanted to see how you did it. ARI Yeah, do you need help tasting it? I’m an EXPERT syrup taster. Ari licks his lips. Farmer Bear smiles. FARMER BEAR Well, first we have to MAKE the syrup, Ari. And that’s why I’m here in this tree grove. Elinor Yeah, we heard that syrup comes from these trees, but we can’t figure out how. We don’t see any fruits or leaves. Olive And the trees don’t taste like syrup. Ari tried it. Ari It doesn’t taste like syrup at all . Farmer Bear <CHUCKLES>. FarMER BEAR Well, that’s because the syrup doesn’t come from anything ON the trees. It comes from what’s INSIDE the trees. The kids go <OHHHH> . FARMER BEAR (CONT’D) Come with me, I’ll show you. The kids follow Farmer Bear as she pulls the wagon deeper into the tree grove. 3. EXT. deeper in the MAPLE GROVE – DAY The kids and Farmer Bear stop at a point deeper into the grove. Many of the trees are tapped and their sap is dripping into buckets. ARI What’s that watery stuff coming out of the trees? Could Farmer Bear use the term "sap" here? Would be great to get to this sooner than line 58 so that we have more opportunities for repetition of the vocab word. "That's maple tree sap. It's what we make maple syrup out of. Watch." FARMER BEAR That’s what we make maple syrup out of. Watch. The kids are astounded. Farmer Bear takes a spile and a mallet and taps it into a nearby maple tree that doesn’t have any buckets. As the kids look closer at it, Farmer Bear grabs a bucket from her wagon and props it under the spile . After a few beats, clear tree sap starts dripping down. 54 and 55 seems to repeat Line 52 - they have just witnessed this yet seem to react as if the first time - they should say these responses after line 52 before walking to another ‘untapped’ tree. Suggest deleting line 54 and putting line 55 after 52 Elinor Agree with Kevin Whoa, there’s watery stuff inside the tree. OLIVE Wow, I didn’t know trees had that inside. Here Farmer Bear could say, "That's right! Tree sap is just like tree juice." FARMER BEAR That’s right! It’s like tree juice. ARI Ooh , I like juice! I’ve had apple juice, and orange juice and grape juice-- Ari takes a sip of his juice box. If we intro "tree sap" earlier, this can become: "Thank you, Ari. But tree sap is a little different because..." FARMER BEAR Thank you, Ari. But this juice is a little different because it comes from INSIDE the tree, not from any fruit. We call it “tree sap.” Olive looks closer at the spilet . Olive Does that hurt the tree? Should be "not if you make just a little hole." FARMER BEAR Not if you just make a little hole. ELINOR Farmer Bear, why do trees have tree sap inside? Is an alamac where you would look this up? Maybe a tree guidebook? FARMER BEAR Feels like we need to say why trees use sap to move water and sugar around; maybe, "it's how the tree gets what it needs to stay healthy"? Also agree with Sara about the book; kids won't know what an almanac is. Good question, Elinor. Trees use tree sap to move water and sugar to all the different parts of the plant. Here, I think I have a picture in my almanac. Farmer Bear rummages a bit in her wagon and pulls out a book with a little globe on the cover. She opens it up and shows the kids a page with a simple x-ray visual of the INSIDE of the tree, with sap moving and going to all of the branches. "63-67 . wondering if this is too much..maybe in 63 Farmer points out "" The tree sap brings water sugar to all the parts of the tree through little tubes"". Then they can make the connection to Ari's straw..." FarMER BEAR (CONT’D) Agree with Sara's suggestion, as long as we're still able to connect this to the idea Elinor has later re: the system she builds for moving the syrup See? The tree sap brings water and sugar to all the parts of the tree. Ari Whoa... Ari takes another sip of his juice box. Elinor just used the word sap above and is now reverting to tree juice. I think it would be good to have her use the word sap here. Elinor But Farmer Bear, how does the tree juice move inside the tree? FARMER BEAR Another great question! Farmer Bear turns the page, and we see a close up of the inside of a tree, showing simplified tree xylem cells (ref: https: // www.dropbox.com /s/ ih9sbjqc75blhw2 / xylem1.jpg ). FARMER BEAR (CONT’D) Trees have tiny little tubes inside that carry the tree sap everywhere in the tree. ELINOR Oh! They look like the straw in Ari’s juice box! They all look appreciatively at Ari’s juice box. Ari Wow, look! I’m a tree! <SLUURRP> The kids <GIGGLE>. Farmer Bear closes the almanac. good..I like the focus being about that stuff is happening inside the tree.... Maybe stress the inside out side thing...Trees have leaves and fruit on the outside AND they have sap flowing on the inside...Also the adults in the story who introcude a vacabulary word should use it. it's good to have kids continue to descritbe things in kids language but Farmer Bear should use sap here. FARMER BEAR Agree with Sara's note re: sap That’s right. Trees are more than just the leaves and fruit. There’s a lot happening inside of them, too. Now, who wants to help me gather all this tree juice? ElINOR Me! ARI Yeah! Over a quick montage, the kids help Farmer Bear bring the sap buckets to the wagon and pour the tree juice into the pot. Soon, they are all done, and Ari empties the last bucket into the pot. He eyes the last few droplets. Ari (CONT’D) Can I try the tree sap, Farmer Bear? FarMER BEAR Sure, go ahead, Ari. Ari puts a drop on his finger and tastes it. ARI It tastes like water. With maybe a tiny bit of syrup flavor. Olive and Elinor try it too. Might be better for Elinor to say, "But FB, if the tree sap is watery and not very sweet, how do you make syrup out of it?" Elinor But Farmer Bear, this tree sap is watery and not very sweet. How do you make syrup out of it? Just flagging that "Sugar Shack" is the name of a donut chain in DC. Don't know if this raises any clearance issues. FARMER BEAR Well, it’s time to head to the Sugar Shack to find out! The kids follow Farmer Bear as she pulls the wagon back towards the farm. 4. INT BACK OF FARMER BEAR’S BARN - DAY Farmer Bear leads them to a small, open structure at the back of the barn. Inside are two big kettles. One of the kettles is empty and stands over fresh logs. The other one looks like it cooked for a while, and the logs are now burned out. after 78 -She pours the newly collected sap into the empty kettle and lights a fire. (If fire is a problem, we can set the kettles on a stove). awaiting notes on this from PBS - if we can use fire - what are the rules as to who handles that, do they need to wear gear FarMER BEAR The rules would actually be the same, regardless of whether it's a fire or whether it's the stove: only adult characters can handle, so Farmer Bear should be the only one near the source of the flame. I don't know what the proper gear is for lighting a fire of this kind -- could someone advise? Welcome to my Sugar Shack! This is where we turn the tree juice into syrup. She pours the newly collected sap into the empty kettle and lights a fire. (If fire is a problem, we can set the kettles on a stove). FARMER BEAR (CONT’D) We cook it for a long time, and that makes it thicker and thicker, and sweeter and sweeter, until-- elinor It turns into delicious syrup! I turned it off' - we should rewrite depending on the process we're going with. if on a stove then we can keep it, otherwise we should tweak if we are having it sitting on fire ) FARMER BEAR That’s right. This one cooked for a long time. I turned it off this morning so it would cool down. Farmer Bear points to the kettle with the ready syrup. ARI Is it ready yet? Should I taste it? You know, just to check. Farmer Bear takes out a ladle and scoops some up. She brings it up to inspect it, and we see up close that it is thick and golden colored. FARMER BEAR I think it’s ready! Can they all taste with individual spoons, as opposed to all from the same ladel? ARI Woohoo ! They all taste a little and nod happily. ELINOR It’s ready! OLIVE It’s sooooo goood ! ARI Hmm, I’m not sure. Can I try some more? The kids <GIGGLE> as Ari tries some more. Farmer Bear grabs a bottle from a nearby table full of empty bottles. FARMER BEAR Ok ! Now it’s time to fill up the bottles so everyone can have syrup with their pancakes! Farmer Bear slowly and very carefully starts pouring some syrup from the ladle into the bottle. The kids look at the big table of empty bottles. ELINOR Do we need to fill up ALL the bottles? FARMER BEAR Oh yes. That way everyone will have their own bottle of syrup to enjoy. The kids look at each other a little worried. At that moment, Ranger Rabbit comes into the Shack. Ranger RABBIT Oh, hi kids. Hi, Farmer Bear. FARMER BEAR Hello, Ranger Rabbit. ELINOR Hi mom! We are helping make the syrup! Ranger Rabbit eyes the long line of empty bottles. RANGER RABBIT That’s wonderful, Elinor. Uh, Farmer Bear? Mrs. Gorilla has just about finished making the pancakes, and she wants everyone to eat them while they are hot. FARMER BEAR Oh, um ... But we haven’t finished pouring the syrup into the bottles. OLIVE Uh oh. It’s going to take a long time. FARMER BEAR Maybe we should eat the pancakes without syrup this year? The kids look shocked and exclaim in unison: OLIVE/ARi/ELINOR PANCAKES WITHOUT SYRUP? FARMER BEAR Oh my. ELINOR That’s like having toast without butter. olive Or a sandwich without lettuce! ari Or a pickle without peanut butter! Everyone looks at Ari, who shrugs. ari (CONT’D) I like pickles with peanut butter. RANGER RABBIT Let’s focus on the syrup. Can we help you get it into bottles? Should this be a funnel instead of a spoon? FARMER BEAR I don’t know. I only have one spoon. 106-110: We suggest cutting this sequence in favor of building out Elinor's thought process in 112. See notes on that below ELINOR Can we dip the bottles into the syrup instead of pouring it? 107 and 109 - could mention the possibility of waste - which we dont want RANGER RABBIT Hmm, then the sides of the bottles will get sticky with syrup. OLIVE Can we tip the kettle over and pour it into the bottles? FARMER BEAR That would make a mess! We’d all get covered in syrup. ARI Would that be so bad? I’m just saying... The bottles are arranged spread out across the table. Suddenly, Elinor has a flash of inspiration. In a THOUGHT BUBBLE, she remembers the x-ray view of the tree from before, and how the tree sap spreads out to all of the branches on the tree. She superimposes that on the kettle and bottles (kettle=base of tree, bottles = tips of the branches). ELINOR Wait! I think I have an idea! She runs off and after a few moments comes back with Sally Beaver and her mom. They huddle to confer. Can Elinor please talk through her idea as she draws it to help our audience? It's important to have the support for the engineering design learning goal. ELINOR (CONT’D) Ok , here’s what I’m thinking. Elinor draws something on a sheet of paper. Sally and her mom nod. They take some logs and Sally Beaver and her mom whip up a delivery system for the maple syrup. It consists of u-shaped channels that branch out from a central channel. From the top, it looks just like the x-ray of the tree. ELINOR (CONT’D) Farmer Bear, I think this will help us fill lots of bottles all at once! FARMER BEAR Wow, Elinor, where did you get that idea? This is the first time we’ve talked about the idea of “spreading it out”. If we want to go this route, then we should talk about it earlier around line 67. Or Elinor should say something about making tubes to get the syrup to all the bottles like the tubes take the water and sugar to all parts of the tree. ELINOR From the trees! They move the tree sap to all the parts of the plant by spreading it out! FARMER BEAR Great idea, Elinor! Let’s try it! MUSIC MONTAGE: The kids sing as they put the bottles in place at the ends of the branching channels and Farmer Bear pours syrup into the base of the new system. SONG: We'd really like this song to talk more about the answer to Elinor’s question and the connection between the tree sap moving and the syrup moving to the bottles. Line 118 does this a bit but it would be nice to have more. ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI Fill the bottles up Fill them up with syrup! We need a lot So everyone gets enough! Pour it in the top And watch it move out Just like a tree It all gets spread about Fill the bottles up Fill them up with syrup! We need a lot So everyone gets enough! At the end of the song, they have filled all the bottles! 5. EXT FARMER BEAR’S FARM - DAY Farmer Bear pulls a wagon filled with syrup bottles around to where everyone is seated. We see Mrs. Gorilla serving the pancakes. FARMER BEAR Who is ready for syrup? A forest of hands go up, <CHEERING>. ELINOR Let’s spread out the bottles! The kids bring syrup bottles out to each table. Soon, everyone is eating happily. We see a montage of visual jokes: Gee Raffe is cutting up her pancakes, but her head is off screen, it’s unclear how she will eat them! Silas finishes his pancakes in almost no time, zips off for seconds. Mz. Mole smells the pancakes and looks excited about eating them. Finally, Ari and Olive and Elinor sit down to steaming piles of pancakes next to Farmer Bear and Ranger Rabbit. OLIVE I’m so ready to eat these pancakes. ARI I hope these pancakes are ready for me! ELINOR Ari, wait! Don’t forget the syrup! Elinor hands a bottle of syrup to Ari. a few of them start eating and make 'delicious' faces ARI Aww , thanks Elinor. You’re so... SWEET! They all <LAUGH> as the camera pulls up and we... END

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY EP 128 Syrup Tree By: Jorge Cham and Daniel Whiteson Elinor's Question: Why do trees make sap? Logline: The kids learn what tree sap is and help Farmer Bear make enough maple syrup for Pancake Day. Curriculum Goals: LS2b Understand that animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs, and that plants have different parts that help them survive and grow. (b) Identify the basic parts of plants and their function. [ The kids learn that trees use sap to move stuff around inside.] ET1b Define a simple problem that can be solved through the design of a new or improved tool or technology [ The kids design an improved delivery system ] ND3 . ( RTL Crosscutting concept ‘Structure and Function’): Understand that structures and materials in the natural world can be used or can inspire the engineering of structures with similar function in the designed world. [ The kids use the branching-tree structure as inspiration for the branching-stream sap delivery system.] SEP1d : Identify a problem that can be solved by the design a new or improved object or tool [ Need a new pouring system for the syrup. ] LINE COUNT: 129 MAINS: Elinor, Olive, Ari, Farmer Bear LOCATIONS: Sugar Shack (interior and Exterior), Maple Grove PROPS: Wagon, barrel, spiles , juice box with straw, almanac, kettle, ladle, syrup bottles, Syrup delivery system (made by Sally) pancakes OUTLINE: Apr 2, 2019 FIRST DRAFT: May 6, 2019 ELINOR OLIVE ARI SILAS ELINIR MARY LIZZIE MR RaCCOON ELINR TAPIR MZ Mole KOA SALLY FARMER BEAR R Ranger RABBIT OLIVE/ARi/ELINOR ELINOR/OLIVE/ARI (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 EXT MAIN FOREST PATH -- DAY MAPLE TREE GROVE DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.