"Charming first draft! Our only real concern is the number of new words for our audience. We consulted with Sara, who confirmed that these words are likely unfamiliar to our audience: fossil, reptile, plesiosaur, ichthyosaur. We'd like to minimize the vocab to maximize comprehension. ""fossil"" is central to the story, as are the names of the swimmers, but we'd like to avoid ""reptile"" if possible. Also, we have found that the music comes out best when the song lyrics are shorter, giving the composers more musical options. Please shoten/simplify/remove syllables wherever possible. Replies to Kevin's comments: Characters: let's keep Mary at one age visually? Locations: let's reuse the frog pond from the ""rain rain"", and have the turtles on a rock instead of a log. OR, use the frog pond from ""Frog Orchestra"" interstitial." 1. EXT MOSSY LAKE -- DAY "TOP NOTE - Flagging # of Assets - need to cut down based on assumptions characters - Mary at 12 yrs Old and 22 yrs old (Badger) -ichthyosaur (which looks a little like a dolphin) swimming in water. -plesiosaur (which is a long-necked reptile) swimming in the water. BG locations: 1. walks along the beach of England’s Jurassic coast, next to sandy, rock cliffs. 2. Cut to a close up of an ICTHYOSAUR SKULL poking out from the sand in the cliff. 3.uncovered a FULL SKELETON of an ICTHYOSAUR. 4.has uncovered a FULL SKELETON of a PLESIOSAUR. 5.Open on six TURTLES sitting on top of a LOG, basking in the sun. One turtle hops off, <PLOPS> into the water and disappears. Props: -a basket along with a rock hammer and small brush. -sits near the ichthyosaur skeleton and sketches a drawing of it in her sketchbook. she has uncovered a FULL SKELETON of a PLESIOSAUR. -a shell -ammonite fossil suggest we also cut to keep character count down: Cut wide to reveal she is showing other folks (a couple other badgers) her discovery. " Open on six TURTLES sitting on top of a LOG, basking in the sun. One turtle hops off, <PLOPS> into the water and disappears. Fun...I wonder if the song will encourage the listener to find out what is "under" and dig for discovery . On the shore, Señor Tapir and a group of kids watch the turtle swimming. 1-3:Let's focus on the swimming aspect of the turtles, rather than their reptile categorization. We can keep the relationship between the turtles and Mary's finds without using the word "reptile". We'd suggest changes to L2,3 below. ELINOR ( giggling ) Where did that turtle go?! Elinor watches the water by the log for a few seconds in great anticipation, and suddenly a little turtle head pops up out of the water. The turtle swims at the surface. Olive: There it is! It's swimming with its flippers! Elinor (CONT’D) There it is! Did you know turtle are reptiles, Señor Tapir? Indeed it is! That's sooo interesting! Let's sing a song about a scientist who discovered some relatives of these turtle that used their flippers to swim … animals that lived long ago -- during the time of the dinosaurs! Señor Tapir (smiling) Indeed they are! That’s sooo interesting, Elinor. (strums his guitar) saying 'indeed they are' notes that he's aware - yet then he says 'Thats so interesting Elinor' as if just learning it - do we need 'thats so intersting Elinor'? Lets sing a song about a scientist who discovered some other reptiles that could swim...reptiles that lived long ago - during the time of the dinosaurs! Señor Tapir starts to sing. After a line or two, we transition to a simpler style of animation that describes what he is singing. SEñOR TAPIR (CONT’D) Mary Anning lived by the sea in the English countryside. 2. EXT ENGLISH COAST SEASIDE -- DAY Twelve year old MARY ANNING (a badger) walks along the beach of England’s Jurassic coast, next to sandy, rock cliffs. She wears a long dress with a cardigan, and she carries a small basket along with a rock hammer and small brush. She leans down to pick up a shell and inspect it. Cut to a close up of an ICTHYOSAUR SKULL poking out from the sand in the cliff. Mary’s face enters the scene as she looks closely at the skull, as if truly wondering what else is underneath it. Then one day her brother saw.." do we need to mention her brother? we cant add him as a design and without seeing him, may be a bit confusing SEñOR TAPIR (CONT’D) She often walked along the beach to see what she could find. Then one day her brother saw a skull with pointy teeth, And Mary started wondering what else was underneath. Close up on a small BRUSH that Mary uses to brush dirt away from the fossil. Mary keeps digging until she stands up to admire that she has uncovered a FULL SKELETON of an ICTHYOSAUR . We see an ichthyosaur (which looks a little like a dolphin) swimming in water. cut "years old", "reptile" -> "animal" SEñOR TAPIR (CONT’D) Mary started digging to see what she’d uncover, And at the age of 12 years old, you know what she discovered? A huge, full skeleton of an ichthyosaur, A reptile that swam around the time of dinosaurs! Mary’s head dramatically pops up into frame as she looks around. She walks along the seaside, reaches down and picks up an ammonite fossil to put in a basket. Then she sits near the ichthyosaur skeleton and sketches a drawing of it in her sketchbook. "ancient" might be too technical? Maybe "And that skeleton from long ago,called a fossil, was all that was left of the original animal" Señor Tapir (CONT’D) (spoken) And that ancient skeleton was called - a fossil. (singing) maybe not "finding big things" ..could we be more specific about either the 'discover' process ...searching carefully , observing new discoveries.... She was a Fossil Hunter! Digging for fossils on the seashore, She was a Fossil Hunter! Finding big things and looking for more. Mary is now an adult, and she walks along the same seaside as she did when she was twelve years old. Close up on a small BRUSH that Mary uses to brush dirt away from the fossil. Mary keeps digging until she stands up to admire that she has uncovered a FULL SKELETON of a PLESIOSAUR. We see a plesiosaur (which is a long-necked reptile) swimming in the water. consider "fossil" here instead of "skeleton";"reptile" -> "animal" Señor Tapir (CONT’D) Mary grew up and kept searching in the ground, And at the age of twenty-two, you know what she found? The very first skeleton of a plesiosaur, Another swimming reptile from the time of the dinosaurs! Mary’s head pops into frame. Cut wide to reveal she is showing other folks (a couple other badgers) her discovery. They look surprised and amazed. Remind us of who she is by replacing "She" with Mary. (also for previous chorus) Señor Tapir (CONT’D) She was a Fossil Hunter! Digging for fossils on the seashore, She was a Fossil Hunter! Finding big things and looking for more. 3. EXT MOSSY LAKE -- DAY Señor Tapir finishes singing the song in front of the kids. Señor Tapir (CONT’D) Loooooking for moooooooore ! Señor Tapir plays one final loud chord, which scares the five turtles still sitting on top of the log. The turtles each <PLOP> into the water quickly, one after another. The kids <giggle>. (Music Note: It would be fun to have an accompanying percussion with the strumming pattern of a washboard, so that the animation of Mary using the paleontology brush, and brushing at dirt, syncs up with that rhythm).

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ELINOR WONDERS WHY 124 interstitial: Señor Tapir Written by LAURA SAMS FOLLOWS: “speedy swimming” CURRICULUM: Mary Anning is one of the first female paleontologists, who found fossils of giant swimming reptiles including a full ichthyosaur (when she was only 12 years old) and the first ever skeleton of a plesiosaur.' LS8 . Begin to understand that there are many different kinds of living things and how they may be the same or different: Group different kinds of living things into categories based on basic similarities and differences FIRST DRAFT: November 4 2019 ELINOR Kids SALLY BEAVER Señor Tapir Silas (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E 1 FOLLOWS: "THE AMAZING EXPANDABLE CLUBHOUSE" EXT PARK -- DAY DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.