"Overall: great stuff! LOTS of really nice humor moments added. General notes: - Let's remove the comparison with Ms. Mole's eyesight. We don't want to draw any humor from her disability, unless she's in on it (like the pilot), or we show she's actually very capable (like in the Ms. Mole's glasses episode). - Let's dial back a half-notch on the competitiveness of the goat twins, and the kids' motivation to ""win"". We need to motivate their wanting to find a solution, but let's keep it fun also. Show the kids having fun, even when they are found. - We have some suggestions two thirds into the script to re-order a few things to motivate their search a little better." 1. EXT. school yard - near school - day PAN across the schoolyard as kids run to find hiding spots, under the supervision of MS. MOLE. SILAS hides himself behind a LOG, CAMILLA behind the corner of the school, TITO hides behind a TREE near the playground. The goat twins, MARY and LIV, count near the classroom door, swapping every number. MARY One...Three...Five ... etc . Liv ...Two...Four...Six etc. The <COUNTING> continues as ELINOR, HAZEL, and ARI stand near, looking frantically for somewhere to hide. The phrase "hiding spot" might not be immediately clear to a lot of kids (what does it mean?). Suggest changing this line to something like: "Where should we hide?" or "We need to find somewhere to hide!" ElINOR We need to find hiding spots! Suggest changing "And fast!" to "Hurry!" Hazel And fast! Mary and Liv are almost done counting. ARI Less talking, more hiding, C’mon ! The kids run off in search of hiding spots. 2. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - NEAR PLAYGROUND - conTINUOUS Hazel tries to tuck herself behind a TREE SO NARROW that no student could hide behind it. She manages to conceal her trunk, but little else. Ari sticks his head into a BUSH, leaving his lower half clearly visible. Elinor tries to hide behind a TREE, but is shooed out by KAI . Shooed out feels a little unfriendly. Maybe "bumps into Kai" instead? Elinor Oops, sorry! I didn’t see you there Kai ! Where can I hide? (she looks around) Aha! She jumps behind a ROCK. BEAT. SALLY BEAVER stands up from behind the rock with Elinor on her head. Nice moment here! ELinor (CONT’D) Oh, hi Sally. I guess this spot is taken too? Sally nods as Elinor hops down and runs off. 3. Ext. ScHOOL YARD - playground - conTINUOUS Elinor runs towards the SLIDE and ducks behind it. She’s pleased with this spot, though she stands out obviously. Elinor (sotto) There’s no way the goat twins will find me here! Mary / liv (o.s.) Ready or not, here we come! 4. EXT. SCHOOL YARD - NEAR PLAYGROUND - CONTINUOUS Liv and Mary run up beside Hazel behind the tree. LIV Nice try Hazel, Found you! HAZEL Oh well... at least my trunk was hidden. She wiggles her trunk. The twins run up to Ari in the bush. MARY <GIGGLES> Um , Ari? Nice moment here! Ari SHH! I’m trying to hide from the- (he pokes his head up and sees the goats) ...goat twins. Aw shucks. The twins run off. 5. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - playground - conTINUOUS Mary and Liv run into the playground, immediately spotting Elinor. They run up on either side of her, surprising her. Mary / LIV Found you Elinor! ELINOR (jumping) AAAAH ! (then) Already? That was fast. Hazel and Ari approach. HAZEL (to Twins) Ya, how did you find us all so fast? ARI Especially me! I though my hiding spot was pretty good. "Split this line between Mary and Liv, and make it specific to goats: MARY: Well, goats just have great eyesight. LIVE: That means we can see really well." MAry Well, some animals just have great eyesight, that means they can see really well. (then, gloating a bit) Like us goats. Remove this line and the paragraph right after it. Liv And other animals don’t see as well. (indicating to Ms. Mole) Like Ms. Mole. ON MS MOLE: sitting on a rock reading an UPSIDE DOWN BOOK. She squints at the pages, adjusts her glasses, and flips the book back right side up. Kai pops up briefly from behind her during this action. ON KIDS: Behind the goats, Tito peeks out from behind a tree. MARY And that’s why we goats are so good at ... (then, calling) Kai ! You’re hiding behind Ms. Mole! ON MS. MOLE: Kai steps out from behind her, startling her. LIV Hide and Seek! (then, calling) Tito! Come out from behind that tree! Tito comes out from behind the tree, Mary and Liv <LAUGH PLAYFULLY> and bound off, in search of other students. MARY (O.S.) There you are Camilla! Suggest changing "no one stands a chance!" to "we don't stand a chance!" ARI The Goat Twins are way too good at Hide-and-Seek, no one stands a chance! LIV (O.S.) Found you too, Sally! Elinor and her friends look over to see Liv and Mary next to Sally’s rock. Camilla stands near, arms on hips in disbelief. "This line feels a little cloddy. Suggest something like, ""Hmm, how can we make ourselves harder to find?"" ir ""Hmm, we need to figure out how to make ourselves harder to find!"" Also, remove reference to ""beating the twins""" ELINOR We’re going to need to figure out a way to hide that makes us much harder to find if we’re going to beat Mary and Liv. Give this line to Hazel ARI We’d better figure it out quickly. The twins have found everyone but- Add "Found you, Silas!" MARY / LIV (O.S.) Silas ! Mary and Liv stand on either side of Silas’ log. Silas stands up between them, arms crossed. Give this line to Ari. ELINOR Now they’ve found everyone! That must be a new Hide-and-Seek record! The goats bound back to Elinor and her friends. Change "really impressive" to "so good!" or something simpler/age appropriate. ELINOR (to twins) (CONT’D) That was really impressive. Is there anything you two can’t see? Mary and Liv notice something in the distance. Lines 30-33: Delete this Ms. Mole joke. MARY (Calling) Don’t eat that, Ms. Mole! The kids all look over to see Ms. Mole sitting at the far side of the yard, about to eat a STICK. LIV (O.S.)(Calling) That’s a stick, not a carrot! ON MS. MOLE: She looks at the stick in her hand, then notices a CARROT next to her. She picks it up and compares it to the stick. She takes a bite of the carrot. Ms. Mole (Calling) Thanks Mary, thanks Liv! That would have been too much crunch. ON KIDS: Ari squints to see Ms. Mole in the distance. ARI Wow, they really can see everything! Lines 34 to 36: this feels a little too competitive and too negative of the twins. Instead, maybe one of the other kids suggests, "Let's play again!" and the twins offer to count again. ELINOR (to goats) We’ll stump you yet, I’m sure of it. Want to play again? The goats shrug. MARY Sure! We don’t mind winning. LIV If you don’t mind losing. The twins cover their heads and count as the kids run off. MARY One... Three... etc. Liv (CONT'D) ...Two ...Four etc. 6. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - river bend - conTINUOUS At the river bend, Elinor jumps behind a LARGE GREY ROCK, Ari tries to hide in some WHITE LOTUS BLOSSOMS, and Hazel behind a GREEN AND BROWN TREE. All three of them stick out obviously. River bend sounds dangerous. Change to "Small shallow stream" or just keep this in another part of the forest. MARY / LIV (O.S.) Ready or not here we come! Mary and Liv bound into frame, spotting the friends quickly. "We think we need to motivate the searching/exploration a little bit better. Right now, it feels a little like an aside and a little too on the nose that they are looking for better hiding strategies (which is the lesson they need to learn). Let's make it more curiosity driven. Try this: Instead of having the goat twins find our three main characters right away, let's have the twins go off looking for kids, and then we take a moment to sit with our three mains as they hide. While they're hiding, Elinor notices the leaf moving (Huh?), Hazel notices some leaves moving (What?) and Ari hears a bird but doesn't know where it comes from. Before Elinor can explore the leaf more, we hear ""Here we come!"" from the twins. Then, after they are found, Maybe it's Ari or Hazel who leans on the rock and they discover the katydid." LIV Elinor, you’re behind the grey rock. MARY Ari, we see you in those flowers. LIV Hazel, you’re hiding behind that tree! The friends come out of their hiding spots, astounded. ELINOR Again? But how? Liv It was easy to spot your white ears behind that grey rock, Elinor. Elinor looks up at her ears and drops them to her side. MAry You too, Hazel. You stand out behind that brown tree... After this line, give Ari a funny line about being found. Liv Same for you in those white flowers, Ari. Ari and Hazel compare themselves to their hiding spots. The goats bound off. Elinor <SIGHS> and rests her head in her hand on the rock, thinking. Her friends join her. Give this line to Hazel, and while she's talking, Elinor catches sight of the leaf moving again. ELINOR I thought our hiding spots were much better this time, but the twins still found us right away. (then) There must be something we can do to hide better . Elinor looks idly at THREE LEAVES resting on top of her rock. Suddenly, one of the “leaves” (A KATYDID) takes two quick hops along the rock. Elinor is shocked. ELINOR (CONT’D) Did you two see that? HAZEL Did that leaf just... hop? ARI I’ve never seen a leaf hop before. Here the leaf moves again, surprising the kids. And then this line is where Elinor says, "That is So Interesting! We need more observations!" ELINOR Let’s take a closer look. The friends lean in to examine. SCIENCE MOMENT CU: The katydid looks very similar to the other two leaves. It takes a couple more hops along the rock. Lines 50-53: add a line or two describing what makes the insect blend in. ELINOR (CONT’D) How interesting! It’s not a leaf at all. It’s an insect ! HAZEL You’re right! When you look closely, you can see it has antennae and legs. The katydid hops again, landing beside another LEAF. ARI Woah ! It looks almost exactly like an actual leaf. ELINOR (to katydid) We almost didn’t see you there, little friend! Ms. Mole approaches and looks over their shoulders. She adjusts her glasses and leans in (a lot) for a closer look. Ms. Mole Oh, you’ve spotted a katydid! It’s a kind of grasshopper that’s hard to see because it looks like those leaves. That’s called camouflage . ELINOr That’s so interesting! (thinking) So “camouflage” means to hide by looking like the things that are around you? Ms. Mole looks around, as if about reveal a big secret. She gestures for the kids to come closer. Ms. MOLE Yes, exactly! And... (then, stage whisper) The katydid isn’t the only thing around here that’s camouflaged. ELINOR Really?! We need more observations! As Ms. Mole leaves, Ari looks off to see Mary and Liv find Tito and Silas hiding in the playground. ARI We’d better observe fast, the goats have already found Silas and Tito! As they explore, Hazel is drawn to a BROWN PILE OF FALLEN TWIGS. As she examines it, something in the pile shifts. HAZEL Hmm. First hopping leaves and now moving twigs? That can’t be right. She looks even closer and... nothing happens. She starts to look away when something in the pile shifts again. HAZEL (CONT’D) Ok , that time I know I saw something move. She extends her trunk and sniffs the pile when a BROWN TOAD hops out of it and startles her! HAZEL (CONT’D) <TRUMPET>! The toad lands next to the twigs. Her friends run over. ELINOR Hazel! Did you find something? HAZEl Yeah. Something brown and... jumpy! The kids search near the pile. Ari spots the toad. ARI Is this what you saw? This guy looks pretty brown and jumpy to me. HAZEL That tricky toad was hidden in that pile of sticks and twigs. The kids lean in for a closer look at the toad sitting next to the pile of mulch. SCIENCE MOMENT CU: ARI His color matches the brown and black of the twig pile. ELINOR Cool! And that pattern on his back makes him look like a stick. HAZEL Even when I was looking right at him, I couldn’t see him! The toad <RIBBITS> proudly and hops away. ELINOR How interesting! I wonder if anything else around here is hiding from us. The kids resume searching. Above them, they hear a <CHIRPING>. They look up at the canopy, but can’t see anything. ARI I can hear a bird up there, but I can’t see one. Elinor Think you can fly up and take a closer look? ARI (excited) Can I?! Just watch! Ari flies up onto a TREE BOUGH with several branches and twigs growing off of it. A SMALL BROWN SPARROW sits, barely visible, on a nearby twig. The bird <CHIRPS> and flutters, identifying itself to the audience (but not Ari). Ari (CONT’D) Where is that sound coming from? As Ari looks LEFT, UP, then RIGHT, the bird flies from one twig to another, always one step ahead of him. ( ie , when Ari looks LEFT, the bird is UP. When the bird flies RIGHT, he looks UP etc.). The bird <CHIRPS> at each branch. Ari (CONT’D) Is it the tree that’s chirping? On the ground, Hazel and Elinor share a <GIGGLE>. Ari is looking directly at the bird, but he doesn’t notice. The bird <CHIRPS> and flutters and he finally sees it. ARI (CONT’D) Oh, there you are! Have you been hiding here this whole time? The bird <CHIRPS> happily and flies onto his head. Ari floats down to the ground to rejoin his friends. ELINOR (to bird) Look at your beautiful brown and grey feathers. They’re the same colors as the tree. HAZEL It’s a perfect match. We couldn’t see him at all from down here. ARI (pointing up) I couldn’t even see him from up there! The bird, still on his head, <CHIRPS> in agreement. MARY / LIV (o.S.) Gotcha ! The friends look and see the goat twins find Kai and Camilla’s HIDING SPOTS near the school. HAZEL Oh no! They’ve almost found everyone. And we still don’t know how to hide better. ELINOR Let’s think about what we’ve seen. (thinking) Okay, the katydid was hidden because it had the same shape and color as the leaves it was next to. HAZEL And I didn’t see that tricky toad because his color and pattern matched the twigs he was sitting on. Ari (pointing at bird on head) And my little buddy up here looks just like... (pointing up at canopy) ...the tree up there. I didn’t see him at all ! Elinor Hmmm ... that’s it! If we hide near things that we look like, we can camouflage too! Just like them! Ari Mary and Liv will never find us! Mary / liv (o.s.) We found you! The kids look to see the twins find Sally behind a TRASH BIN. ELINOR The twins have found everyone! Let’s try again, and this time we can stay hidden for sure . Just remember, we need to camouflage! The kids share a <WINK> as Mary and Liv bound into shot. MARY Are you ready to give up? ARi (dramatically) NEVER!! Liv OK, get ready to be found! Wipe to: 7. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - near school - moments later MUSIC STARTS as the goat twins count at the school. Elinor, Ari, and Hazel run across the school yard as other schoolmates find hiding spots along the way. Elinor / ari / hazel Hide and Seek, Hide and Seek Count to ten and don’t you peek! Nature shows me how to hide, Use my color, shape or size. A hiding spot that looks like me, Will make me really hard to see! 8. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - RIVER BEND - conTINUOUS Hazel jumps behind the large grey rock (all hiding spots are from SC5 ), spreading her grey ears over it. HAZEL ‘Cause my skin is rough and grey, By this rock is where I’ll stay. Ari hides in the green and brown tree. ARI My shirt is green, my fur is brown, Good thing there are trees around! Elinor crouches beside the white lotus blossoms, sticking out her ears to blend in with the PETALS of the flower. Elinor ‘Cause my ears are straight and white, These flowers can hide me from sight! Elinor, Hazel and Ari pop out from their hiding spots to finish the song. ELINOR / ARI / HAZEL Hide and Seek, Hide and Seek Count to ten and don’t you peek! A hiding spot that looks like me, Will make me really hard to see! Then they all pop into their hiding places. ElINOR / ARI / HAZEL (CONT’D) (giggle) 9. Ext. School yard - various locations - conTINUOUS Mary 7... 9... Liv ...8 ...10! MARY / LIV Ready or not, here we come! The twins run into the playground and find Silas behind a POST. They run past the river bend, not noticing Elinor, Hazel and Ari, who watch them sneakily as they run past. They find Sally standing on Camilla’s back, behind a TREE. They run in the other direction past the river bend again. The twins find Tito behind the trash bin, and Kai in it. The twins look around, searching. They look at each other confused, shrug, and run off. MUSIC STOPS. 10. Ext. SCHOOL YARD - river bend - contINUOUS The twins run in and start searching, coming close to Elinor and friends, but not finding them. Mary I can’t see Elinor, Ari, or Hazel anywhere... where are they? Liv I don’t know! We’ve usually found them by now. They’re hiding much better this time. MAry Do you think we should spilt up to look? The start at other for a beat. Mary / LIV No way! / We’re never splitting up! The bound off together hand-in-hand, <GIGGLING>. Elinor (STAGE whisper) It’s working! They can’t see us. ARI (stage whiSPER) Shhh ! Flowers can’t talk! HAZEL (stage whisPER) Neither can trees! Ari catches himself and covers his mouth his hands. Elinor stifles a <GIGGLE>. The goats bound back in. Mary We’ve looked everywhere! LiV And they’re nowhere! Ms. Mole (o.s.) Need help searching? Ms. Mole looks near the school. She sees her reflection in the WINDOW OF THE SCHOOL. She thinks it’s Elinor for a second before adjusting her glasses and getting a closer look. MS. MOLE (CONT’D) I found Elinor! Oh wait... (then) Oops! That’s me! Back at the river bend, the twins are giving up. Mary If we can’t see them... Liv Then no-one can. They look at each other for a beat. MARY / LIV WE GIVE UP! / OLLY-OLLY-OXEN-FREE ! Elinor and her friends jump out of their hiding spots, startling the goats! A few classmates run in to watch. MarY / LIV (shocked) (CONT’D) BAAAAAAA !!! Elinor Here we are! Right in front of you! Mary But how? We looked here! Liv We looked there! Mary / LIV We looked everywhere! Elinor <LAUGHS> We used camouflage to hide in plain sight! Hazel By using our colors and shapes, we blended in with our surroundings. Ari So you couldn’t see us! (leaning in) Even when we were... Right. Under. Your. Noses. MARY That... LiV Is... Mary / LIV AMAZING!!! Ari, Hazel, and Elinor stand proud. MARy Can we try? We want to camouflage! LIV Ya, to hide from you now! Elinor <GIGGLES> Sure thing! Elinor covers her head and counts. Elinor (CONT’D) 1... 2... 3... etc. Everyone scatters to hide, leaving the goat twins behind. They look around for a hiding spot. MAry (stage whisper, to liv) Psst ... what around here looks the most like twin goats? Liv shrugs and they bound out, looking for a goat-shaped hiding space. IRIS OUT on Elinor counting. THE END.

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ELINOR’S TOWN EP 106 Hiding In Plain Sight By: Tom Berger Elinor’s Question: How can we hide so that we're harder to find? Logline: With their keen eyesight, the goat twins are too good at hide and go seek, so Elinor and her friends have to figure out a better way to hide. Curriculum Goals: (suggested by Sara) Constructing Explanations (science) and Designing Solutions (engineering) o Use background knowledge experiences, and data to construct reasonable explanations and theories of natural phenomena ( may not be scientifically correct, rather naïve theories) (science) o Look for and describe patterns and relationships in natural phenomena (science) o Use and apply productive science discourse to support an explanation (e.g., think out loud, revise and rethink) o Use evidence to support a theory (science) or solution to a problem (engineering) LS2. Understand that animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs – Animals have different shapes, patters and colors to help them blend in with their surroundings and “hide”. Main Characters: Elinor, Hazel, Ari, Mary, Liv Secondary Characters: Ms. Mole Incidental Characters: Silas , Camilla, Tito, Kai , Sally Backgrounds - Schoolyard - various Props - book, lotus flowers, leaves, trash bin OUTLINE: December 7, 2018 FIRST DRAFT: January 3, 2019 ELINOR ARI HAZEL Mary Liv Mary / liv Ms. Mole Elinor / ari / hazel (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (SUBTITLE) (Calling) (excited) (looking up at the bird) (Realizing) (dramatically) (whispers) (stage whisper) INT EXT I/E 1 2 EXT. school yard - near school Ext. SCHOOL YARD - NEAR PLAYGROUND Ext. ScHOOL YARD - playground Ext. SCHOOL YARD - river bend Ext. SCHOOL YARD - riverbend Ext. School yard - various locations SCHOOL YARD - riverbend SCHOOL YARD - PLAYGROUND DAY NIGHT AFTERNOON MORNING EVENING LATER MOMENTS LATER CONTINUOUS THE NEXT DAY CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.