Well written with lots of cute moments. In scene 3: They are supposed to be waiting for her, but in lines 2-3 it's not clear what they are waiting for if she just plans to walk straight out the door without putting on a snowsuit. It either needs to be clarified or perhaps it worked better when they arrive at her house, eager to get going. 1. EXT. ANIMAL TOWN - DAy Really cute visual seq to open the epsiode. It really capture the sense of community and the charm of the series A pristine single snowflake flies over ANIMAL TOWN on a gentle breeze. As it floats through town, we see various town RESIDENTS opening their doors to marvel a blanket of fresh white snow. MR. PIG shivers at the cold air and heads back indoors. MR. MOOSE take a deep breath of cold air with a warm smile as he proceeds to shovel his walkway (without a jacket!). The snowflake continues to fly through town, towards... 2. EXT. HAZEL’s HOUSE - hill and field - continuOUS so when we are watching the one snowflake, i assume its the only one in the sky - which is why elinor is excited when it lands on the window - then once she comments we can start to have very light snowfall As the snowflake drifts, it passes a field of snow at the bottom of a mid-sized hill where a group of children are playing <SFX: CHILDREN PLAYING>. S ally Beaver (in earmuffs and mittens) is building an elaborate Snow-Beaver with carrot sticks for teeth. The Goat Twins (wearing only scarves) are pulling each other in a toboggan. JAVIER MOOSE (in just a scarf) is having a playful snowball fight with ROLLIE ARMADILLO (in full winter gear). BODIE HIPPO (in snow suit, helmet and goggles) is snowboarding down the hill. The snowflake drifts toward HAZEL’S HOUSE, nestled near the hillside... Hazel’s window, where we can see ELINOR through the glass, gazing longingly at all the fun outside. The snowflake lands on the window, right where Elinor’s nose is. 3. INt. Hazel’s house - continuous Elinor <gasp!> A snowflake! Elinor (in scarf and mittens ) hops with excitement! Why is she excited that its snowing? She’s excited for the snow outside already on the ground. Maybe "It's going to be so fun!" ELinor (CONT’D) Hurry, Hazel! It’s starting to snow! ARI is waiting nearby (wearing mittens, boots AND HELMET ) holding a shiny new saucer sled. l3 is “saucer sled” a common phrase? It is new to me. I like the “say that three times fast” joke, but I’m not sure our audience will understand it. Maybe: “Those words are hard to say!” instead of "Say that three times fast!" ARi And we’re missing all the super speedy saucer sledding - Whoa. Say that three times fast. Super speedy saucer sledding. ARI/ELINOR (laughing) Super speedy saucer sledding. Super speedy saucer -- This is also a clever bit that the audience might miss? HazeL (o.S.) There’s no time like snow time! HAZEL enters in her everyday clothes. ARi/Elinor/Hazel Alright!/Yay!/Yahoo! Ari, Elinor and Hazel rush to the front door. After line 7 - DESIGN -the trunk is open at the top so she can see her snowsuit (she can recognize it by the colour) otherwise how would she know that’s what her mom was calling her for? HAZEL’S MOM (o.S.) Hazel, Sweetie. Aren’t you forgetting something? Just then, Hazel’s Mom enters carrying a trunkful of winter clothes. Hazel My snow suit? But Mom, it takes forever to put it on. “it takes a bit of time” is awkward. Maybe just “True, but” or “True, it takes a minute, but” HAZEL’S MOM True, it takes a bit of time, but it also makes playing in the snow that much more fun. Elinor It’s okay, Hazel. We’ll wait for you. Right, Ari? Elinor gives Ari a gentle elbow to the ribs. What’s happening in this line? Why was Ari not paying attention? Ari we can have Ari gazing outside the window wishing he was outside playing which is why he seems distracted here. Huh? Oh, uh... yeah. Sure we will! Hazel’s Mom I bet if we work together we can get you ready in no time at all. Ready, set... awesome HAzel/HAzel’s Mom cute- maybe Ari can also comment "i love when they do that" - it could be a thing we carry throughout the series - when Hazel blows her trunk, Ari always reacts with a giggle of comment on how fun it is. As I see you’ve done in line 94 as well :) <TRUMPET with their trunks> I think it is great showing a few different "waiting" strategies for Elinor and Ari. Learning to wait is an executive functioning skill that is important. Ari <chuckles> series of JUMP CUTS: (MUSIC NOTE: the music starts out fast and energetic but gets slower and more tedious as Hazel gets dressed.) -- Hazel’s Mom helps Hazel put on her snow pants. -- Then her jacket. -- Ari and Elinor wait impatiently. Elinor’s leg keeps twitching. -- Hazel’s Mom takes out her hat, scarf and mitten. She antics to put them on Hazel, but Hazel refuses, she wants to put them on herself. -- She puts on her own hat. -- Then her scarf. -- Then her mittens. -- Ari and Elinor are sitting on the floor, bored. Ari checks his watch. -- Hazel steps into one boot. Then the other. -- Ari and Elinor are draped over the furniture. Ari is upside down. -- Finally, Hazel slides on her trunk-warmer (like a leg-warmer but for her trunk). BACK TO SCENE: Ari and Elinor have nodded off. Ari is SNORING. fun! love how they get more bored throughout until we find them asleep HAzel <Achem.> Ari and Elinor wake up to see Hazel in her WINTER GEAR. It’s bulky and stiff like an inflatable Sumo suit. “there’s just so much of it” doesn’t feel quite right. Maybe “There are a lot of parts to it!” HAZEL (CONT’D) Sorry I took so long. It’s my snow suit. There’s just so much of it. “Now we are all ready to play! Let’s go!” Elinor That’s okay, Hazel. Ari Yeah. I’m sure there’s still some snow left outside. Come on! Me and my saucer have a need for speed! Ari and Elinor scamper to the door. They open the door and rush outside. 4. EXT. Hazel’s house - CONTINUOUS Elinor and Ari race outside. Elinor/ARi Yay!/Woo! But Hazel remains INSIDE, in the doorway. Elinor Hazel? What’s wrong? HAzel I... I have to go to the bathroom. Elinor and Ari turn to one another - Oh no! 5. EXT. HAZEL’S HOUSE - hill and field - LATER Elinor, Hazel Are run into the snowy scene. Ari immediately runs up the hill with is saucer, while Hazel scoops up a trunkful of snow and gently tosses it at a delighted Elinor. before l21 “Are” -> “Ari” typo, “is” -> “his” ElINOR (laughs) Oh, this snow is PERFECT! (shares a look with Hazel) Are you thinking what I’m thinking? ElINOR/HAZEL SNOW ANGELS! Hazel and Elinor plop down in the snow and start making Snow Angels. ELINOR/HAzel (CONT’D) <giggling> Both enjoy the snow as they wave their arms and legs. Hazel I don’t know what my Mom was worried about. The snow doesn’t feel so cold. “Ready to look at our …” Elinor I’m not cold at all! Ready to show our Snow Angels? One, two, three! Elinor pops up to look at her snow angel. Elinor (CONT’D) Oooh. So pretty! How’s yours, Hazel? Hazel tries to sit up -- but her bulky snowsuit is too heavy. She’s like a turtle on its back. Hazel <efforts> Uh... Help? ELINOR <giggle> Hazel! <effort> Elinor grunts as she pulls Hazel up by her trunk. Hazel is forced use her hands to push herself up. In doing so, she distorts the shape of her Snow Angel. HAZEL Aw. My Snow Angel looks more like a Snow Monster . I wish my snowsuit wasn’t so big and heavy. ARI (o.S.) Look out below! Elinor and Hazel turn to the hill to see Ari zigzagging down THE HILL on his snow saucer. Ari (CONT’D) Who-oaa! How do you steer this thing?! Ari flies by Elinor and Hazel and off screen - THUD. Elinor Ari! REVEAL Ari stuck head first in a pile of soft snow. His little legs kicking while his voice is muffled. ARI <muffled sounds> Elinor pulls on Ari’s leg, Hazel grabs the other one. They pull him out of the snow. ELINOR/HAzel <efforts> instead of dusting himself off, maybe he can jump up and flap his wings to get the snow off. Elinor Are you okay? Ari dusts himself off. Ari That was... AWESOME! Well, test slide number one didn’t go exactly as planned. But there’s always test slide number two! Wanna come? I’ll race you to the top of the hill. Ari grabs his saucer and races back up the hill. “saucer sliding” -> “sledding”? ELINOR Come on, Hazel. Let’s go saucer sliding! Elinor practically floats across the snow, her big rabbit feet acting like snowshoes. But one or two steps up the hill and Hazel sinks into the deep snow. Hazel Wait up, Elinor! I’m <effort> coming! <effort> Whooooaaa... Hazel takes a few slow steps then tumbles over backwards, disappearing in the snow. Perhaps Elinor turns and cant see Hazel (since she’s fall’n back into the snow) and calls out ‘Hazel! Where did you go!?’ Hazel ‘I’m down here’...then Elinor says ’Uh-oh’ runs to where Hazel fell in and looks down to find her on her back deep in the snow ELINOR Uh-oh! Elinor hurries back and helps her friend up. BULKY, I keep falling over HAZEL (frustrated) extra 'this' in the first sentence needs to be removed I think it might be more 4 year old friendly for her to comment that it is hard to move in her snowsuit...rather then relating the snowsuit to balancing. I wish I didn’t have to wear this all this snow stuff - it’s so BULK I can’t even keep my balance. Elinor Why do you have to wear such a big coat anyway? “and he looks happy” -> “I wonder if he’s cold?” (Need to set up problem where giving snowman coat is the solution) HAZEL I don’t know. Lots of our friends don’t. Even that snowman isn’t wearing a winter coat and he looks happy. Elinor and Hazel turn to see THE GOAT TWINS finishing off a SNOWMAN (with no clothes). ELINOR/Hazel <giggles> Hazel suddenly gets an idea! HAZEL <gasp!> I know... CUT TO: 6. EXT. HAzel’s HOuse - hill and Field - Moments later The snowman is now wearing Hazel’s jacket, scarf, hat and mittens. Now he looks cozy! Hazel There. Now he looks even happier. Elinor/Hazel <giggles.> Suddenly a snowball splats against Hazel’s body. ARi Gotcha, Hazel! <giggles> Hazel Oh yeah? Well, now it’s my turn. Snowball fight! Hazel chases after Ari, rolling snowballs with her hands and launching them with her trunk. With three appendages working, she’s a snowball tossing machine! Ari gets hit multiple times. Fun action with Hazel and snowball 'machine' ARI Hey! <giggle> No fair! Hazel bends down to pick up one more snowball, but as she moulds the snow, she drops the ball. i understand what we're trying to do here but it may seem like this one particular snowball is cold as she's trying to pick it - the way its been written - maybe 'its getting cold' or she just shivers 'bbrrrrr' HaZEL Ooh. That’s cold. As Hazel rubs her hands, another snowball hits her. This time from Elinor. Elinor Can’t get me, Hazel. (beat) Hazel? Elinor and Ari approach Hazel, curios and concerned. Hazel isn’t throwing anymore. She is frozen still, hugging her body with her arms. Shivering. MATCH CUT TO: 7. INT. Hazel’s house - day Hazel, still shivering, takes a comforting sip of hot chocolate. HAzEL Mmm. So warm and chocolatey. Th-thanks, Mom. you keep your snow suit on? Hazel’S MOM You’re welcome, Sweetie. But how about next time we keep our snow suit on? Hazel Mom finishes hanging up Hazel’s snow suit (retrieved from the Snowman) then exits. Elinor I wonder why you got so cold when you took off your snow suit. Yeah. I didn’t have a jacket and I wasn’t cold. Ari Yeah. I wasn’t cold. Elinor I wasn’t cold either. That’s so interesting. HAzel And so unfair. How come I get cold in the snow and nobody else does? Elinor Let’s go back outside and take a closer look. Elinor and Ari head towards the door. Ari Coming, Hazel? an 'ahhh' with a big smile after she takes a sip HAZEL Me? No thank you. I’m staying inside until next Spring. She takes another sip of hot cocoa. 8. INT./EXT. HAZEL’S HOUSE - HILL AND FIELD - day MUSIC begins as Ari and Elinor (now wearing a helmet) hop on Ari’s snow saucer and haphazardly zigzag down the hill past their friends, SINGING... "I'd prefer if the song is about the exploration, rather than a celebration of winter. Something like: Why do some friends have to wear Puffy jackets and long underwear? Some friends put a snow suit on To keep them warm all day long Others don’t wear special clothes And keep their toasty nose and toes Why do some friends have to wear Puffy jackets and long underwear? " ELINOR/ARI noting on Jorge and Daniel's suggestion - I too feel it should be about the exploration but i like that Elinor and Ari express the theme of winter - perhaps we can incorporate the 1st or 1st and 2nd verse off the top and then go into the exploration? There’s no time like snow time, when winter time is here. They slide by Bodie Hippo snowboarding , Javier Moose snow tubing , and The Goat Twins mid-snowball fight . ELINOR/ARI (CONT’D) Sliding, gliding, snowballs, what a time of year. Whooooaa! They slide out of control, just missing one of the twins! ELINOR/ARI (CONT’D) But some friends don’t like winter. They like the summer sun. As they reach the bottom of the hill, they wave to Hazel, looking longingly through her WINDOW. HAZel Because being cold and stuck inside is never very fun. Elinor and Ari pull their saucer back up the hill. As they do, Elinor takes an up-close look at Sally Beaver and Rollie Armadillo building a snow fort. ELINOR/ARI What makes someone like the cold, and another like it hot? Let’s make some observations and see just what we’ve got! Back at the top of the hill, Elinor and Ari prepare for another run. ELINOR/ARI (CONT’D) There’s no time like snow time, when winter time is here. Saucer sliding, so much fun! What a time of yeeeeeaaar! <impact> <laugher> Ari and Elinor zigzag uncontrollably OFF SCREEN and CRASH into a fluffy pile of snow, sending a shower of the white stuff cascading through the frame as we... TRANSITION TO: INT./EXT. Hazel’s HOUSE - day Hazel opens the door to see Elinor and Ari covered in a dusting of white snow. HAzel Whoa. What happened? What science does this refer to? Maybe “We did some more test runs!” Ari Science! Elinor We landed in a snowbank. ARI It came out of nowhere. Ari shakes the snow off his fur. Elinor follows suit as they enter and join Hazel. “discover anything” -> “figure out why I have to wear a snow suit?” HazeL Well? Did you discover anything? Not yet. But we did notice that some of us…” Elinor Yes and no. We observed that some of us wear thick coats and others wear thin coats - ARI - or no coats at all. Like me! I prefer to let my fur fly free! ELINOR But we still don’t know why -- wait. Fur! Ari, you have fur. Elinor takes Ari’s arm and gets up close and personal for a SCIENCE MOMENT ECU of Ari’s fur. ARI You bet, I do! ELINOR And I have fur too! Wait a second, maybe that’s a clue! SCIENCE MOMENT ECU of Elinor’s fur. “Let’s make a chart!” (They already made the observations) Elinor (CONT’D) We need more observations! The chart might work better as a T-Chart with Fur/ no-fur at the top of the T. Then when they think about and draw someone they could group them together appropriately. Hazel I’ll get my clipboard. Hazel grabs her pencil and clipboard . She creates a chart. On one side there is a column for images of animals. On the other side there is a column for check-marks or Xs. “everybody else” -> “all the kids were” or “all the animals were” HAzel (CONT’D) Tell me about what everybody else was wearing. As Elinor describes her friends, Hazel sketches them. we'll need to be clever with how to stage these drawings - it'll visually take too long to show Hazel drawing the entire animal in winter wear - even a kid-like drawing. we'll show her starting the drawing and then cut to her saying her line. or line first and then show her just finishing the drawing. the same for the others. Elinor Okay. Bodie was wearing a full snowsuit. Hazel draws Bodie in his snowsuit. HAZEL And Bodie is a hippo. So he does not have fur. Ari looks out the window and spots Javier Moose, catching snowflakes on his tongue. Ari Javier is only wearing a scarf. And he’s a moose so... HAZEL Yes for fur. Elinor looks out the window and spots Rollie Armadillo, curling up in a ball and rolling down the hill, turning himself into a HUGE snowball. Elinor And Rollie’s wearing his winter coat, a hat and mittens. Ari I guess that’s how he rolls...without fur. <giggle> ELINOR So... our friends that have fur, like Javier, aren’t wearing snowsuits. But our friends that don’t have fur are - like Rollie and Bodie - Hazel And me! Look! I don’t have fur either... SCIENCE MOMENT ECU of Hazel’s arm. There are tiny hairs, but no fur. ELINOR Wait a minute - that’s it! Having fur is like having your own built-in winter coat! HAZEL So if you DON’T have fur, you have to PUT ON a coat! ARi We figured it out! HAzel I wish I had fur, so I didn’t have to wear a coat. ARI Well, I wish I had a trunk, so I could do that thing that you and your Mom do. HAZEL You mean this? <TRUMPETS> ARI <laughs> Yeah. I love that. HAZEL I guess we’re all just different, and since I DON’T have fur... Hazel smiles, then scampers over to the coat rack and grabs her winter gear. HAzel (CONT’D) What are we waiting for? Let’s get outside before the snow melts! Elinor/Ari Yay!/Wahoo! Hazel’s Mom enters. Hazel’s Mom Do you want a little help Hazel? HAZEL Well, maybe just a little ArI Hey, can you do that elephant thing again - pleeese! Hazel and her mother exchange smiles. HAZEL OK. Ready, set... HAzel/HAZEL’S MOM <TRUMPET!> 9. Ext. hazel’s house - field and hill - Day Back outside, Ari, Elinor and Hazel are standing at the top of the hill with Ari’s snow saucer. Ari Are you sure, Elinor? I still don’t know how to steer this thing. Hazel You don’t have to. Follow me! Hazel lies down in the snow, like she did when she made her Snow Angel, and slides down the hill on her back. Her winter clothes keep her dry and warm as she carves a perfect bobsled path down the hill. Hazel (CONT’D) Yahooo! When Hazel gets to the bottom, she struggles to her feet. Hazel (CONT’D) <effort> Come on you guys! There’s no time like snow time! Ari and Elinor exchange a look. Then... ARI/ELINOR Super speedy saucer sledding. Super speedy saucer sledding. Super speedy saucer sledding! Ari and Elinor hop in the snow saucer and slide down in Hazel’s path. Elinor/ari Yay!/Wahoo! I love SNOW!

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ELINOR’S TOWN EP 104 T he Science of Staying Warm By: Miklos Perlus Elinor’s Question: Why do animals have fur? Logline : Elinor wants to play outside in the snow with Hazel and Ari, but Hazel’s heavy winter wear keep getting in the way of their fun so she’d rather not wear it at all. Curriculum Goals: SEP6. Constructing Explanations. Look for and describe patterns and relationships in natural phenomena. LS2. Understand that animals have different body parts that are used in different ways to meet their needs and that plans have different parts that help them survive and grow. ND1. (RTL Crosscutting concept ‘Patterns’) Understand that modes of life in the natural world and engineered solutions in the designed world have common patterns, and engineers often look to natural patterns for inspiration. Main Characters: Elinor, Hazel, Ari. Secondary Characters: Hazel's Mom, Sally Beaver. Incidental Characters: Camilla, Goat Twins, Bodie (NEW) Settings: Props: OUTLINE: December 5, 2018 FIRST DRAFT: December 18, 2018 Elinor HAZEL Ari ARi/Elinor/Hazel Hazel I’m ready! HAZEL’S MOM HAzel/HAzel’s Mom Elinor/ARi ELINOR/HAzel Elinro Hazel’s Elknor ARI/ELINOR (V.O.) (O.S.) (O.C.) (CONT'D) (SUBTITLE) INT EXT I/E ANIMAL TOWN DAYBACK OUTSIDE, ARI IS STILL STRUGGLING WITH HIS SAUCER, BUT HIS PROBLEM IS NOW SOLVED BECAUSE HAZEL HAS LEARNED TO TAKE ADVANTAGE OF THE BULKINESS OF HER CLOTHES FRONT ENTRANCE HAZEL HAZEL HAZEL HAZEL LATER LATER OUTSIDE, ALL THE KIDS ARE PLAYING IN THE SNOW LATEROUTSIDE, ALL THE KIDS ARE PLAYING IN THE SNOW PARK PARK - DAYBACK OUTSIDE, ARI IS STILL STRUGGLING WITH HIS SAUCER, BUT HIS PROBLEM IS NOW SOLVED BECAUSE HAZEL HAS LEARNED TO TAKE ADVANTAGE OF THE BULKINESS OF HER CLOTHES PARK - LATER PARKBACK OUTSIDE, ARI IS STILL STRUGGLING WITH HIS SAUCER, BUT HIS PROBLEM IS NOW SOLVED BECAUSE HAZEL HAS LEARNED TO TAKE ADVANTAGE OF THE BULKINESS OF HER CLOTHES HAZEL'S HOUSE AFTERNOON CONTINUOUS DAY DAYBACK OUTSIDE, ARI IS STILL STRUGGLING WITH HIS SAUCER, BUT HIS PROBLEM IS NOW SOLVED BECAUSE HAZEL HAS LEARNED TO TAKE ADVANTAGE OF THE BULKINESS OF HER CLOTHES. SHE HOPS UP THE HILL, SLIDES DOWN ON HER OWN AND HER ROUNDED SUIT CREATES A GROOVE EVENING LATER LATER OUTSIDE, ALL THE KIDS ARE PLAYING IN THE SNOW. IT TAKES A WHILE FOR HAZEL JUST TO WALK OUT TO WHERE THE KIDS ARE PLAYING. LATER. OUTSIDE, ALL THE KIDS ARE PLAYING IN THE SNOW. IT TAKES A WHILE FOR HAZEL JUST TO WALK OUT TO WHERE THE KIDS ARE PLAYING. LATEROUTSIDE, ALL THE KIDS ARE PLAYING IN THE SNOW. IT TAKES A WHILE FOR HAZEL JUST TO WALK OUT TO WHERE THE KIDS ARE PLAYING. MOMENTS LATER MORNING NIGHT THE NEXT DAY SERIES OF SHOTS CUT TO: FADE IN: FADE OUT. FADE TO: DISSOLVE TO: BACK TO: MATCH CUT TO: JUMP CUT TO: FADE TO BLACK.